My entry for the sunset shipping contest in which Sunset and her wife Wallflower take their 2 kids Sunblush and Firerose on a family vacation no hijinx just a run of the mill day in there lives
https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/822006/sunset-shipping-contest-journeys
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Cutting it close aren't you Aceina?
9161209
haha yea
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Couldn't honestly enjoy it either, not with the grammar issues. Sorry, Ace.
If nothing else, this image will stay with me for a while.
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your welcome
The grammatical and spelling issues with the summary are enough to make me hate the work already.
Grammar was a problem, but overall a good story. I'm not picky, my brain fixed all the mistakes as I was reading it anyways. So I enjoyed. If you ever want to write and need help with grammar don't hesitate to pm me.
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thank you *Smile* i do have some one who can help me with grammar this was a bit of a time crunch kinda worked on it last minute for the contest lol
but glad you enjoyed the story
This needs work. The grammar issues make this difficult to read, and the overall story is too short to get invested in.
As a general rule, shorter sentences are better than long, meandering ones.