Coco has been a shy mare for too long. Using a new dating app, she's arranged for a handsome suitor to visit her after work to satisfy her more... taboo fantasies. Unfortunately, (or fortunately) Rarity shows up and the evening gets quite exciting!
Sorry. The "Mistress Rarity" bit killed it for me. She would be fine, as an observer/voyeur/participant. Her taking control of the night though? Nah. Not my style. Thanks for a well written story, but, yeah. Not like this.
As much as i enjoy the idea of slutty sub Coco Pommel, Rarity is being a total cunt. This is obviously her first scene with Coco or Mac and yet she goes in like she knows them intimately when it comes to SnM. Her pacing is quick and there is not even mention of a safeword. She also goes somewhat hard into degredation but that's really only an issue if you haven't taken the time to feel out your partner's preferences for it as prodding the wrong point may cause emotional destress that no one was prepared for. I didn't mind rarity going dom on mac, i do mind her going this far with such little thought for what he wants from this and it makes her a boner killing thoughtless cunt.
9194383 I might have missed the mark? It was my first time writing BDSM. I liked how Rarity came off, total mistress and not too county... Just domineering as she had to be.
But then again, I'm new to writing Dom/sub.. so maybe I didn't quite get it right?
It seems she was generally liked but I've seen a handful of comments to the contrary.
Wow that's some good shit. I'm envious of your writing skills...
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Rarity
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I wonder....
Sorry. The "Mistress Rarity" bit killed it for me. She would be fine, as an observer/voyeur/participant. Her taking control of the night though? Nah. Not my style. Thanks for a well written story, but, yeah. Not like this.
Uh... that is going to be QUITE painful to make and would probably mess up a LOT of nerve termination...
As much as i enjoy the idea of slutty sub Coco Pommel, Rarity is being a total cunt. This is obviously her first scene with Coco or Mac and yet she goes in like she knows them intimately when it comes to SnM. Her pacing is quick and there is not even mention of a safeword. She also goes somewhat hard into degredation but that's really only an issue if you haven't taken the time to feel out your partner's preferences for it as prodding the wrong point may cause emotional destress that no one was prepared for. I didn't mind rarity going dom on mac, i do mind her going this far with such little thought for what he wants from this and it makes her a boner killing thoughtless cunt.
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I might have missed the mark? It was my first time writing BDSM. I liked how Rarity came off, total mistress and not too county... Just domineering as she had to be.
But then again, I'm new to writing Dom/sub.. so maybe I didn't quite get it right?
It seems she was generally liked but I've seen a handful of comments to the contrary.