Firewire has had a small patch of bad luck. However, the young pegasus starts to get an idea on how to turn his luck around. It's a long journey from unemployment, but that's not always a bad thing.
I do like this, but I think you're doing too much telling rather then showing.
9143364Yea, its bit much. needed like 2 or 3 more paragraphs of action, and maybe some more descriptions.
It's still pretty nice story. Good writing.
Love it~! And I totally ship it
I do like this, but I think you're doing too much telling rather then showing.
9143364
Yea, its bit much. needed like 2 or 3 more paragraphs of action, and maybe some more descriptions.
It's still pretty nice story. Good writing.
Love it~! And I totally ship it