A human that does alot of DIY blacksmith who work for friends and himself ends up in Equestria when coming in contact with a book that holds knowledge of a strange and magical kind.
Still you need some editing. Basically this is fine.
Just a few bits of screwed up language.
What is too much is the story I think and trust me I am usually very forgiving on what the story is.
This is not too bad but let's recap.
Some guy you get (still in school) became interested in blacksmithing, and after a very short period (still in school or at least close to graduation...) owns a two story house with no worries.
Then has their female friend who is 4 foot 3 inches just agree to join them in what is suppose to be an interdimensional adventure because reasons.
Then during the beginning of said journey to Equestria makes it through dimensions to meet Luna in the dreamscape and accost her while she is dealing with her duties?
Then decided that the main character needs to use the rest room?
I usually tend to like crack fics but this doesn't like a crack fic to me.
9058836 Then don't pay? Use spelling/grammar check on any program for word editing from the last 20 years except maybe basic notepad. Wordpad, Microsoft word, open office, what ever mac uses should all have a free function that would cover the remaining bits for you...
Really. It would help. Your grammar and spelling is not that bad so far. You just need a little help on that end.
9058878 thank you for the details it is hard for me to get good and well defined detail in much of what I do/read esc. Also the two humans will get more details in the next chapter just to clear up some things. I will also be going over the mishaps manually because some of those programs are kinda shoddy with me using them
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9058730
would you like to help with that
9058752
uhhhh no. Just use some editing program. Like Grammarly.
9058758would you believe I cant get that program in full
like seriously I have to pay a monthly fee so
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9058792
o-okay
9058826
oh don't worry I'm not mad at you I was just making a point
Still you need some editing. Basically this is fine.
Just a few bits of screwed up language.
What is too much is the story I think and trust me I am usually very forgiving on what the story is.
This is not too bad but let's recap.
Some guy you get (still in school) became interested in blacksmithing, and after a very short period (still in school or at least close to graduation...) owns a two story house with no worries.
Then has their female friend who is 4 foot 3 inches just agree to join them in what is suppose to be an interdimensional adventure because reasons.
Then during the beginning of said journey to Equestria makes it through dimensions to meet Luna in the dreamscape and accost her while she is dealing with her duties?
Then decided that the main character needs to use the rest room?
I usually tend to like crack fics but this doesn't like a crack fic to me.
9058836
Then don't pay? Use spelling/grammar check on any program for word editing from the last 20 years except maybe basic notepad. Wordpad, Microsoft word, open office, what ever mac uses should all have a free function that would cover the remaining bits for you...
Really. It would help. Your grammar and spelling is not that bad so far. You just need a little help on that end.
9058878
thank you for the details it is hard for me to get good and well defined detail in much of what I do/read esc. Also the two humans will get more details in the next chapter just to clear up some things. I will also be going over the mishaps manually because some of those programs are kinda shoddy with me using them
9058898
No problem and anytime I can reply to help I will.
No way to git gud (that's still funny to me...) with out feedback.
I want more