Seems to be jumping all over the place. One minute he's helping the ponies defend Ponyville from invasion. The next he's being caged and toted to Canterlot to talk with Celestia (I have an entire rant about that for multiple reasons, but I'll spare you). Then after that his attitude flops from "I' need to know what is going on here" to "Well okay. Guess magic exists now. Better get used to it".
Overall, this story doesn't exactly seem all that coherent.
If you're in the middle of a conflict and an unknown being suddenly took the effort to intervene on your behalf, you'd have reason to be suspicious, and taking them to the place with the strongest 'military', and I use that term VERY loosely, presence until it can be determined that they're not going to present themselves as an aggressor is only common sense.
That said, the confiscation of his weapons, while sound in theory, is unwise, when it involves advanced technologies, such as the laser, plasma, recharger and pulse weapons, not to mention Mini-Nukes, Missiles, mines and other highly unstable explosives.
9027990 It's not really about the fact they caged him (though that is minorly a bit of a nitpick I have) that bothers me. It's the whole treating him like an animal when they can clearly tell he's sapient enough to have a conversation with them. That and bringing him directly to their leader. If they really were concerned about him being a threat, they wouldn't just directly take him to the princesses, they more than likely should have kept him in a cell and interrogated him there before moving on to having the princesses question him. Then even after discussing with him, and flat out saying "We can't fully trust you" they set him up in a guest room. It sends out mixed signals.
I have a generally poor opinion of stories where the characters act a lot dumber than they really should be.
9028026 Need I remind you that we're talking about a race with no discernibly specific joints to warrant a less demeaning means of containment beyond the use of cages. They're not exactly going to have handcuffs to use when detaining him. Also, smart, wise and logical Whilst able to, don't necessarily need to go together.
Seems to be jumping all over the place. One minute he's helping the ponies defend Ponyville from invasion. The next he's being caged and toted to Canterlot to talk with Celestia (I have an entire rant about that for multiple reasons, but I'll spare you). Then after that his attitude flops from "I' need to know what is going on here" to "Well okay. Guess magic exists now. Better get used to it".
Overall, this story doesn't exactly seem all that coherent.
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It looked to me it was going pretty well.
Thanks for the eye-opener, though. I'll try to gradually fix it as I update the story more.
9027777
It seems entirely reasonable to me.
If you're in the middle of a conflict and an unknown being suddenly took the effort to intervene on your behalf, you'd have reason to be suspicious, and taking them to the place with the strongest 'military', and I use that term VERY loosely, presence until it can be determined that they're not going to present themselves as an aggressor is only common sense.
That said, the confiscation of his weapons, while sound in theory, is unwise, when it involves advanced technologies, such as the laser, plasma, recharger and pulse weapons, not to mention Mini-Nukes, Missiles, mines and other highly unstable explosives.
9027990
Agreed.
Though, with the whole part about magic, it's actually a big deal to him. He's just not showing it.
9027990
It's not really about the fact they caged him (though that is minorly a bit of a nitpick I have) that bothers me. It's the whole treating him like an animal when they can clearly tell he's sapient enough to have a conversation with them. That and bringing him directly to their leader. If they really were concerned about him being a threat, they wouldn't just directly take him to the princesses, they more than likely should have kept him in a cell and interrogated him there before moving on to having the princesses question him. Then even after discussing with him, and flat out saying "We can't fully trust you" they set him up in a guest room. It sends out mixed signals.
I have a generally poor opinion of stories where the characters act a lot dumber than they really should be.
Some simple chapter to read and some thoughts to Luna.
I’m going to anticipate some action or at least, unexpected thing to happen. For the next chapter.
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Need I remind you that we're talking about a race with no discernibly specific joints to warrant a less demeaning means of containment beyond the use of cages. They're not exactly going to have handcuffs to use when detaining him.
Also, smart, wise and logical Whilst able to, don't necessarily need to go together.