I like this, but there are a few things wrong. There are times where you used 'arms' and 'person' instead of 'legs/forlegs' and 'pony'.
Other than that, the story is great!

This's really sexy and all, and you have a masterful grasp of timing, plot and characterization, as well as a wonderful grasp of the English language, but... you better not just leave us hanging with what happened to those two beautiful mares! This story absolutely positively must leave Las Pegasus!

Also legs can be called arms when they're used as arms. And ponies can be called people sometimes.

Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease do like 50 more in this arc

so... no family threesome then?

I wish you had written more about when Trixie got filled to the brim with a buttload of cum.

Oh boy, Trixie fucked her dad and Jackpot fucked his daughter. Jackpot is pretty much a hypocrite now, albeit an indirect one.
Good first chapter.

I need a follow up on the family, if it's not in the next chapter then hopefully a spin off where the mother and daughter take the father back to their hotel room and have their way with him. Then he fills them with his potent seed then have an awkward morning. But then come out of it closer and more loving as a three-way couple only because I don't want it to rip the family apart.

Well I was a little miffed at the lack of actual rutting taking place. The descriptions of the morning after made up for it. Just a little.

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Hm? Not enough description of rutting?