Sequel to Purple Skies. An: Purple Skies isn't something I thought I would continue but people liked it, and now I have a writing team to work with, this is Team Joker's first team effort and we hope you enjoy our holiday special.
Twilight and Soarin' have been living together ever since the end of the Welcome Summer Special. Soarin' lost his ability to fly but found hobbies that he never thought he would have enjoyed doing like reading, and helping others around Ponyville, he thought it felt good not going through life so fast. Hearth Warming Day was coming up, and it was going to be their first time to spend the holiday together. Rarity and Sweetie Belle have left Ponyville for the holiday, and are now in Manessota.
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Rarity's father, Sports Blitz, was attacking a plate of deep fried mayonnaise balls.
"Eww, gross, gross!" Rarity said while putting her hooves over her mouth.
"Don't knock 'em till you try 'em, ey Rarity?" Her father returned to eating the plate of mayonnaise balls.
Sweetie Belle was playing a guessing game with their mother while the T.V blared a holiday special, How Nightmare Moon stole Hearth Warming Day.
"Is it...a drum!?" Sweetie Bell yelled while jumping on the sofa.
"Guess again!" The mother, Fran, yelled while laughing at the energetic filly.
Rarity was still disgusted at her father’s taste in food. "Is there nothing more civil to eat?"
Sports Blitz swallowed a mouth full of deep fried mayonnaise balls. "Nothing beats a Manessota specialty."
Rarity face-hooved.
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While Rarity and Sweetie Belle left town, Rainbow Dash was given Soarin's position on the Wonder Bolts and was also out of town in Canterlot, training for the Hearth Warming Eve flying show.
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Spitfire and Rainbow Dash were talking in front of the other Wonder Bolts.
"Alright, Dash and I are going to head upwards at the edge of the field. Echo, you take Silver Wing up through the middle and arch in towards Dash, and then we'll fly forward for a second, then ignite your trails and follow me."
"Let’s do this!" Dash was finally doing what she had always dreamed of, and was ready to give it 111%, that was her new motto, 1% more than people giving it 110%.
"Glad to see you pumped up for today's practice Dash."
"You kidding? This is what I was born to do. Let’s get started!"
"Sounds good! Try and keep up Dash!" Spit Fire took off.
"I'll fly circles around you, Fire!" Dash laughed.
The Wonder Bolts all took off, eager to practice.
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Twilight and Soarin' are now preparing for the holidays.
A snowflake was slowly falling to the ground, glistening from the minor sun rays showing through the gray clouds, it landed on Soarin's nose.
Soarin' wiped the snow flake from his nose and looked up into the sky and saw that it was lightly snowing. He smiled at the sight of the snowfall, remembering his happy childhood with his parents.
Soarin' turned to Spike. "So is there anywhere else we need to go shopping at today?"
Spike opened some of the bags he was carrying while pointing his claw at the items, counting them. "Uh... nope! That's everything Twilight put on the list."
"Alright, good. I heard that Big Macintosh and Fluttershy found each other."
Spike shrugged. "Yeah, Big Mac has always liked her, I was wondering when he was going to do something."
Soarin' gave a light chuckle. "Maybe it’s the Hearth Warming spirit?"
Spike joined him. "Heh… Yeah."
Spike and Soarin' were walking through Ponyville, watching the young foals carol, and looking at all of Ponyville’s decorations that matched the season.
Ponies all over Ponyville were getting into the holiday, Hearth Warming was coming up fast, only two days away. Ponies were wearing the decorative holiday sweaters, pointy red hats, and scurrying all over Ponyville for last minute shopping.
Soarin' turned his head to Spike again as they walked. "So did you get Applejack a present?"
Spike rummaged through a bag and brought out a small box and opened it. Inside was a necklace with a ruby heart-shaped gem in the center that opened up and had a picture of Spike and Applejack.
"Whoa, she's gonna love that, Spike."
Spike placed the small box back inside the bag. "I went digging to find the perfect ruby for it too. So what did you get Twilight?"
Soarin' stopped in his tracks at the question.
Spike had kept walking forward and didn't notice Soarin's absence until he took a few more steps forward, he looked back and saw Soarin' wide-eyed and his mouth was open.
~*~*
"All finished!" Twilight said, feeling triumphant after cleaning the library. "Thanks for all the help AJ."
Applejack walked up next to Twilight. "No problem, Twilight, Ah couldn't let a mother to-be, do all the cleanin' herself." Applejack smiled at Twilight, happy about her coming family.
Twilight gently rubbed her stomach with a smile on her face. "Do you think Spike and Soarin' got all of the shopping done?"
Applejack rubbed the back of her head. "Ah don't know, some ponies can go a little crazy durin' this time of th' year and flood the stores."
"Well I hope they get here soon so-" Twilight was cut off.
'AAAAAHHH!'
"What the hay was that?" Applejack went to the window, hoping to find the source of the yell.
"No idea..." Twilight joined Applejack in the search.
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Spike had put his hands over his ears from the panicked scream and Soarin' was sitting in the lightly covered ground rubbing his head with his hooves.
Soarin' was getting a headache with all of the thoughts racing through his mind. 'Why! How could I forget to get her a gift? I have been busy lately, hiring construction workers for the add-on to the library, accepting endorsements... but how could I forget?!' Soarin continued to rub his head. 'I need to get her something fast... something she will love... She loves books! No wait... we live in a library...Jewelry? No, she doesn't wear jewelry....'
Spike went over to Soarin' and put a hand on his shoulder. "What’s wrong?"
"I forgot to get a gift for Twilight..." Soarin' said in defeat.
"Oh... well the stores are still open, we can go look for one." Spike said reassuringly.
"But what should I get her? It's our first Hearth Warming together and I don't want to get her some last minute gift."
"I'll help you think of a good one then... a book? She likes books." Spike thought for a moment. "Oh, right, library." Spike started scratching his head in thought.
Soarin's eyes lit up and he leaned into Spike's personal bubble at the excitement of his idea. "Spike, go ahead and head home, I thought the perfect gift."
Spike slowly leaned back away from Soarin’. "Alright, are you sure you don't need my help?"
Soarin' noticed how close he was to Spike and backed away as well. "Yeah I got this, see you later, tell Twilight I'll be home in a few."
Soarin' trotted off into Ponyville's chaotic streets while Spike continued back on his way to the library.
The errors have now all been fixed by our new awesome pre-reader FlutterLove, Team Joker is glad to have him.
d'awww
D'AAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWW
Suggestion: Make em pull cute pranks on each other. C'mon its winter, whats winter without a good prank involving snow. Comedy is in the tag afterall.
57918
Just don't read this and be done with it okay? Later.
57921
Yes, yes it is
But the troll that doesn't know what 'Slice of Life' genre means has given me a headache. I'll tolerate him but don't worry, Team Joker is planning this out well.
57918 A CHANCE THOU ART MUST GIVETH THE WRITER!!!!
Sorry dude but your username was just begging for it.
57931
Why do you keep removing my comments for no reason? It is simple criticism, you do not have to flame me for giving it.
Yay sequel! Good start!
57964 I'm removing your comments because you insist on spamming them to me, really. don't read it. this isn't for people who didn't like purple skies, this is a holiday special we are doing because of how many people loved purple skies before we go to the real sequel.
"You should not have posted this." And your not trolling...? Seriously. its annoying.
57972
It isn't spam. I've read through what you wrote, and I gave you my concerns in a constructive manner. In response, I was told that I should "Deal with it" "Stop reading" "Stop trolling", etc. Now, you're removing all of my comments and accusing me of spamming. It isn't spam.
Also, I didn't say you shouldn't have posted it, I said I don't understand why you posted it. I don't understand the plot of Winter Skies. What is truly annoying, is having any of my opinions simply thrown away without consideration when they were only meant to help you write better.
No, I'm not trolling.
the fuck is purple skies
anyways cool read!!
57987
The plot to Purple Skies was made by just me, the ending was aided by a friend, those comments don't really apply to me anymore considering I have a writing team and we make the plot together.
Feel free to stay if you want to keep reading something you 'criticize' so often, its your call.
58002
You are confusing negative criticism with blatantly hating your story and flaming you for it. As I have said before, I do not resent/hate anything that you and your team writes. I've just given my advice on how to improve it, and by doing that, it could not possibly be a positive comment.
I'm not going to leave, I'm sure you've figured that out by now. I'm also going to continue giving my opinions, whatever importance you hold them to is beyond my control. Please, do not call me a troll/spammer.
Cheers.
Deep fried Mayonnaise balls, ha ha ha. Yes, they do exist.
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Hi, I'm the co-writer of this and its predecessor.
This my perspective as the guy wrote most of the plot and subplots.
For some of the skeptics: This story goes deeper than just a plot about a gift. Just wait and see. If you hated this chapter because nothing really happened other than the main plot point being established then I swear that get's better in next chapter. This is a holiday special and it's supposed to be campy, diabetes inducing and lighthearted.
If you have any questions or concerns please address them to me, instead of WinterTwister and I'll my best to respond in a civil manner.
Peace Out.
YES MOAR!
58068
Thank you, I'll be sure to forward my opinions directly to you instead as you create this story.
Expect an inbox message later.
57899
Hey, I read your story about pinkie taking you into equestria
It's divinely absurd lol
58068 That is somewhat disgusting. The thought of mayonaise balls, not the story. The story is awesome. Much daaaaw was had.
58198
When writing this we wanted to send Rarity and Sweetie to be with their parents. I needed a place with an easy horse pun that her parents could be from based their accents. So, Minnesota was the easy choice and since it's fried food capital of the world and we saw Rarity's dad eat all the burnt food. I decided to make him eat some gross disgusting fried foods(Fried Mayo being the grossest) in front of her. Oh and her mother is based on Fran Drescher.
Lets all remember to be loving and tolerating up in here. It is Hearth's Warming after all. :ajsmug :
Well, that emoticon failed... *facehoof*
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwww (With Simon's voice from The Yogscast)!!!
:3
Proofread, please. I hate reading stories where everything is rushed and half the things are misspelled... It is, however, a good start, and if you can fix up your spelling errors, I would love to read more.
Could be good. Too many errors for my liking though.
Keep up the good work.
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Our supposivley pre-reader has gone missing, trust me im aware of this and I would love to find a replacement but waffle told me to give him some time, so i apologize for the mistakes, good writers, horrible grammar.
58593
I noticed it in your other story, too. Purple Skies. I left a more... detailed comment on that one.
58600 yep.I read it, That story was made by just me, the plot was weak until the end when i actually got help on it, it was my first ship-fic after I wrote action stories, so it was hard to go slow for me. We still want to know where our pre-reader is though, if it was my call I would remove him and such, but this team isn't a monarchy and waffle doesn't want to burn bridges
I read it and...
Meh
It's rushed, there's no clear plot (as of yet) outside of "Everypony's getting ready for the hilodays", and there are quite a lot of errors.
"her some last minuet gift."
I think you meant minute there.
Anyway, it wasn't interesting enough to keep me reading, and I feel like I'm missing a lot of background info. Is this a sequal?
So anyway, I always enjoy seeing new stories, but this one isn't for me.
58618
MFW I misspell Holidays
58618 Yes, its like a sequel , its mainly just a seasonal special, the real sequel comes after this. The first is story Purple Skies
58612
Well, now that the semester is up and college has slowed down, I bet a lot of people will have more time to read and/or edit. If you, or anybody else that reads this, needs a pre-reader, I'm available. I may, however, get a bit distracted by TOR.... However, the option is open if you ever need one!
Meh. Not so much daw. It's kind of all over the place really :/ I didn't read Purple Skies or whatever it's called so i don't get some of it, but it's *alright*.
58623 hmmm... excuse me but i don't know what that ''slice of life'' category means, could someone please tell me?
nice story beginning, i'm looking forward to this. but please, it's ''Ponyville'' and not ''Ponyvile'' and it's ''sweetie Belle'' and not ''Sweetie Bell''
58769 Yeah, like Winter said our proof reader kinda ditched us, then again since there's four other members of our team we should proof read it together and thanks for the support.
Oh, and Slice of Life refers to character driven fiction. Stories that show you a glimpse into the lives of the characters: daily situations, misunderstandings, fun, friendship, heartwarming moments, etc.
Hi i'm also on the team for this story and the idea for Sorlight came from me. If you have not read Purple Sky's go read it. To understand some of this you kinda need to had read it. Also we are getting a prereader so don't fret over the small stuff. We are all working really hard on this and we love feedback. Thanks yawl.
Cheers, Joltttix
Very good but it is spelt minute not minuet. Just trying to help!
You might want to put "sequel to purple skies" somewhere in the description of the story. It seems there's a lot of people confused over this.
58842
Good to see you have a new proof-reader, but there are still some pretty simple issues around. A few misspellings, a lot less than before, but I see a few run-on sentences in there still. Might want to take a look in there at some point. It is, however, a much, MUCH easier read now than it was before.
59210 saddly, I'll admit it, I am not that good at fixing run on sentences
But I will try my hardest to fix as much as I can
Hearth Warming is obviously a combo of a ponified Christmas and a pun on "Heartwarming".
I see you took the advice I gave to waffle and put a notice at the top of the page.
Good work.
Now, they should all be fixed.
Ch.2 comes out possibly tomorrow.
YAY, IM FROM MINNESOTA, err *cough* Manessota
58068 I will admit that is disgusting. I've had my far share of bizar food being in the Marines but that is weird.
I'm sorry but I lol'd at mayonnaise balls