Found this from the Plounge after dark. Now I'm reading it instead of writing my stories. Thanks! Actually pretty good. You could use some cover art to get some readers.
Cover art is already on the way, though it was only just commissioned so it'll likely be a few weeks. The next chapter will be out before that, so I'm just doing without for a little.
I'm glad you're enjoying it. This story has been percolating for a long time, it's great to hear someone else is enjoying it asuch as I have been.
Hmmmmm, a good start for what will surely be a great story! Finally got a chance to read it while breaking from chapter 14 of my own fic.
Right now I'm very curious as to these "spirits" that Longwatch seems to be able to communicate with and get assistance from. It makes me wonder how he manages that and how powerful they really are with him. It does concern me about how much they help, though. It's a shame we can't get to know Magnum a bit more, though I hope we learn about her past deeds from Longwatch in the future.
Spelling and grammar were pretty good. If you aren't already, try proofreading a few days after finishing a new chapter. That's what I do: I finish, say, chapter 13 and then sit on it for at least a couple days before doing any proof reading or editing. I tend to find more mistakes that way. Also, try re-reading sentences (either in your head or aloud) and that can help pick out awkward sentences, reused words, and sentence flow errors. There were a few here, but not enough to detract from the story. There were a couple of past and present tense issues as well.
When I saw the name "Silver" I was briefly confused, but remembered that it wasn't who I was thinking of. Anywho, greatly looking forward to the next two chapters! Well done!
Found this from the Plounge after dark. Now I'm reading it instead of writing my stories. Thanks! Actually pretty good. You could use some cover art to get some readers.
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Cover art is already on the way, though it was only just commissioned so it'll likely be a few weeks. The next chapter will be out before that, so I'm just doing without for a little.
I'm glad you're enjoying it. This story has been percolating for a long time, it's great to hear someone else is enjoying it asuch as I have been.
Hmmmmm, a good start for what will surely be a great story! Finally got a chance to read it while breaking from chapter 14 of my own fic.
Right now I'm very curious as to these "spirits" that Longwatch seems to be able to communicate with and get assistance from. It makes me wonder how he manages that and how powerful they really are with him. It does concern me about how much they help, though. It's a shame we can't get to know Magnum a bit more, though I hope we learn about her past deeds from Longwatch in the future.
Spelling and grammar were pretty good. If you aren't already, try proofreading a few days after finishing a new chapter. That's what I do: I finish, say, chapter 13 and then sit on it for at least a couple days before doing any proof reading or editing. I tend to find more mistakes that way. Also, try re-reading sentences (either in your head or aloud) and that can help pick out awkward sentences, reused words, and sentence flow errors. There were a few here, but not enough to detract from the story. There were a couple of past and present tense issues as well.
When I saw the name "Silver" I was briefly confused, but remembered that it wasn't who I was thinking of. Anywho, greatly looking forward to the next two chapters! Well done!