ok now that that is out of my system, I really love your stories! Keep up the good writing!
edit: now that i have read the chapter, what happened to not describing full blown sex? Also, I love how you basically made the equivalent of the brony fandom for ponies.
"The two mares eventually became quiet proficient in their new careers as fantasy sculptors. " I think you meant "quite." (Posting this quickly so nobody else mentions it first.)
983916 I picture Howard Stern as a predatory griffon, as opposed to a stallion, hence the name "Howie Tern." (Animaniacs fans may also get the reference.)
At one point there i am pretty sure there was stallion clopping to human while humans were fapping to pony clopping to human having sex with pony. Not sure what kind of ception that is, but the chapter was bucking amazing anyways, cant wait for more
"My favorite one is Lola," the stallion said, "She's five feet, six inches tall, with Caucasian skin. Her blonde hair is long enough to rest on top of her tanned, C cup-sized breasts."
My gosh. Change the name to Shayla, and that's me! Get away from me, you creepy stalker! (Just kidding, but one heckuva coinkydink, right?)
Hrm. Perhaps not as funny as the first Lyra & Bon Bon's Odd Jobs. When you said you were embracing the mature rating, you really weren't kidding. I don't mind. I do hope future chapters have more comedy, though, and possibly more drama. I might be missing out on just how funny it is. This chapter is clearly a parody of certain parts of the Brony community, and while I understood what you were getting at, being fairly new to MLP:FiM I suppose it all didn't quite sink in right. The first chapter IMHO was much better, but again, that might just be my personal context. Also, your previous story had that whole thing with the anti-gay anti-sperm-bank drama, which was fascinating. Will Lyra and Bon Bon's Odd Jobs II be returning more to the social commentary drama that the first had, or is this exclusively a partially-comedy clopfic?
984177 I don't enjoy mindless clop. I'll have to see where the story takes me. I can't say whether or not it will address social issues or not, but there will be some plot, as in storyline.
984301 "When did this just turn into clop?" -Collins4112
"this one will feature clop, so it fully embraces its mature rating." Since the description box before it was published. If it's not to your liking, I will soon be adding the final epilogue to the first Lyra and Bon Bon's Odd Jobs. I promise that it will be hilarious and clopfree!
Wow... I am aroused... Do go on. I don't clop but damn if this was a human story i would Certainly fap to this... I just find it disgusting how people clop to ponies...
This was a well done chapter. It was entertaining. But I'm not sure if I can call it great, an attribute I've attatched to previous sections of the LaBBOJ series. 984261 I too love sexual scenes when it adds to story and characters. But this seemed closer to actual porn, since it describes the actions so vividly, with very little comparative focus on the emotions going through () the characters. We had a tender scene with the two mares towards the end, but was that put aside to make way for the meta humour.
What seemed disconcerting is that a recently you threw up a really interesting blog post, in response to a reader asking about LaBBOJ being moved up to mature. You wrote about how "Mature" should be diffrentiated from full on graphic sex. Yet here it is. I'm not accusing you of being hypocritical, since I never heard you Pinkie Pie Promise that you wouldn't take this story there.* It just seems like you're hobbling yourself by not being able to produce an example to back your argument. Especially with this story, as it started out strong without graphic material such as this, and it is responsible for your newfound popularity, the reason so many people saw that blog post. At least, that's why I read it. I started following you immediately after the first few chapters of LaBBOJ.
*if you did make such a claim I take it back, you are a hypocrite, a dirty liar, and a horrible horrible person.
I WAS going to go to bed. But I decided to see if FimFiction added anything. And of course, I'd have to be this. Oh well, I guess sleep can wait... time to read. and nothing else!
1st is so overrated. I claim the honors of LAST....... wait... I semi-agree with 984542 but I think there should be a balance between the two. As long as we get the raunchy comedy we all came to know and love from the 1st one, then the world is saved once again. I enjoyed it still.
Chapter two is up!
Quick. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png
Update! Hell yeah!!!
OMG! im almost first for something! HI WORLD!
ok now that that is out of my system, I really love your stories! Keep up the good writing!
edit: now that i have read the chapter, what happened to not describing full blown sex? Also, I love how you basically made the equivalent of the brony fandom for ponies.
First! (other than author)
Okay, now that that is out of the way, good chapter. My reaction is as follows:
I am aroused. And Mildly disturbed. continue.
"There were some days when Bon Bon truly felt sorry for stallions and their inferior genitals."
Oh sure, rub it in why don't you
...............yes
So THAT'S where fanfiction writers come from.
Damn Lyra, you so kinky.
LOL at the Howard Stern reference.
Interesting parody.
"The two mares eventually became quiet proficient in their new careers as fantasy sculptors. "
I think you meant "quite." (Posting this quickly so nobody else mentions it first.)
This is NOT something i should be reading while theres 5 people in the house, is it?
cause im doing it
983916
I picture Howard Stern as a predatory griffon, as opposed to a stallion, hence the name "Howie Tern." (Animaniacs fans may also get the reference.)
983919
You're quite correct.
Update: Fixed!
983879 Atleast we don't bleed every month.
I feel like that was a parallel to something... Oh welldl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Luna_apple.png , absolutely hilarious, & I love how you reintroduced Lyra's human fetish. The clop was funny, even if I'm here for the plot and not the dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_plot.png , I still enjoy such well crafted humor. Also, Cloud Bank for the win, best way to entertain yourself while making customers clop!
I can never read a whole chapter without stopping to laugh a few time.
Oh you.
Best chapter yet of either story!
However while I understand your frustration at those individuals, they do have feelings, maybe it would be beat not to kick them whilst they're down.
Oh, and contiunue at once!
Ponies clopping to humans who are fapping to ponies. Clopception!
Oh really Bon Bon our genitals are inferior. Well you clearly have never felt the warm embrace of a stallions meat.
Lol good story broskie you just earned a favorite
983932
Dat last sentence!
"Have you ever considered writing fanfiction?"
That is the best final line EVER!
you are awesome
That was hilarious! I love it!
Wunderbar!
Absolutely hilarious XD
Dat Ending:
image.minoc.com/zd_images/2012/22/lol_face.jpg
You really earned that M rating this time my friend good luck on the next one
At one point there i am pretty sure there was stallion clopping to human while humans were fapping to pony clopping to human having sex with pony. Not sure what kind of ception that is, but the chapter was bucking amazing anyways, cant wait for more
"My favorite one is Lola," the stallion said, "She's five feet, six inches tall, with Caucasian skin. Her blonde hair is long enough to rest on top of her tanned, C cup-sized breasts."
My gosh. Change the name to Shayla, and that's me! Get away from me, you creepy stalker! (Just kidding, but one heckuva coinkydink, right?)
Hrm. Perhaps not as funny as the first Lyra & Bon Bon's Odd Jobs. When you said you were embracing the mature rating, you really weren't kidding. I don't mind. I do hope future chapters have more comedy, though, and possibly more drama. I might be missing out on just how funny it is. This chapter is clearly a parody of certain parts of the Brony community, and while I understood what you were getting at, being fairly new to MLP:FiM I suppose it all didn't quite sink in right. The first chapter IMHO was much better, but again, that might just be my personal context. Also, your previous story had that whole thing with the anti-gay anti-sperm-bank drama, which was fascinating. Will Lyra and Bon Bon's Odd Jobs II be returning more to the social commentary drama that the first had, or is this exclusively a partially-comedy clopfic?
All the yes...
984177
I don't enjoy mindless clop. I'll have to see where the story takes me. I can't say whether or not it will address social issues or not, but there will be some plot, as in storyline.
When did this just turn into clop?
984301
"When did this just turn into clop?" -Collins4112
"this one will feature clop, so it fully embraces its mature rating."
Since the description box before it was published. If it's not to your liking, I will soon be adding the final epilogue to the first Lyra and Bon Bon's Odd Jobs. I promise that it will be hilarious and clopfree!
983873
HI seth57rules!
Sorry, but I just haaaad to reply!
980536
Not even with that phallic symbol behind you?
Oh. Dear. God. That stallion is going to write a self insert pony on Earth fanfic now.
984376
Do note the wingboner. Methinks the mare doth protest too much.
984427
Let's pray he does a decent job at least...
Love that last line!
'jilling off'?
........
media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m7s5zusQTh1qiq5w9.gif freakin' hilarious!
Embrace evil next.
Oh my goddess. sounds like me... only with a human with a pony fetish
Hmm, I know a guy Bon Bon would love to meet.
webspace.newschool.edu/~araul573/pudt2101/final/therocksays/image/candyass.jpg
Wow... I am aroused...
Do go on.
I don't clop but damn if this was a human story i would Certainly fap to this...
I just find it disgusting how people clop to ponies...
This was a well done chapter. It was entertaining. But I'm not sure if I can call it great, an attribute I've attatched to previous sections of the LaBBOJ series.
984261
I too love sexual scenes when it adds to story and characters. But this seemed closer to actual porn, since it describes the actions so vividly, with very little comparative focus on the emotions going through () the characters. We had a tender scene with the two mares towards the end, but was that put aside to make way for the meta humour.
What seemed disconcerting is that a recently you threw up a really interesting blog post, in response to a reader asking about LaBBOJ being moved up to mature. You wrote about how "Mature" should be diffrentiated from full on graphic sex. Yet here it is. I'm not accusing you of being hypocritical, since I never heard you Pinkie Pie Promise that you wouldn't take this story there.* It just seems like you're hobbling yourself by not being able to produce an example to back your argument. Especially with this story, as it started out strong without graphic material such as this, and it is responsible for your newfound popularity, the reason so many people saw that blog post. At least, that's why I read it. I started following you immediately after the first few chapters of LaBBOJ.
*if you did make such a claim I take it back, you are a hypocrite, a dirty liar, and a horrible horrible person.
984335 I proabably read it more clearly
LOL! Epic!
I WAS going to go to bed. But I decided to see if FimFiction added anything. And of course, I'd have to be this. Oh well, I guess sleep can wait... time to read. and nothing else!
I'm not sure with this... I enjoyed it greatly.. though the Lyra and bon bon well.. sorta threw me. But!
for good measure have another.
984489
that, actually is the term for female ejaculation
Hah, This was hilarious and well written, just, hilarious.
also, I liked that you somehow managed to include all those facts.....
1st is so overrated. I claim the honors of LAST....... wait...
I semi-agree with 984542 but I think there should be a balance between the two.
As long as we get the raunchy comedy we all came to know and love from the 1st one, then the world is saved once again.
I enjoyed it still.