Grifter pony Strange Mirror has a gift — when ponies look at her, they see only what they want to see. Then one wonderful evening she meets a pony who loves her for who she truly is. It could ruin everything.
It wasn’t something I decided all at once,” said Strange Mirror, as calmly as she could. “I was just trying to live with my condition. And was hard. But it was also all I had. And then you took that away from me, and then everything fell apart.”
I feel there should be a 'that' in there.
X grimaced, and leaned away from her. “Oh, it wouldn’t be illegal wouldn’t it?”
Was that suppose to be 'would' be illegal wouldn't it'?
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I feel there should be a 'that' in there.
Was that suppose to be 'would' be illegal wouldn't it'?
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