“I know, darling—these spa treatments are always over too soon!” The white-coated unicorn threw a curl of her immaculate purple mane onto the other side of her neck as she walked down the hall.. “Lotus and Aloe are the best of the best, though, so I always make sure to enlist their services whenever I come by. I do hope you enjoyed yourself?
“I did, um, Miss Rarity.”
“Oh, please, dear, how many times must I say this? There’s no need to be so formal around me.” Rarity stopped before the door leading into the main reception room, as if to linger in the comfortable, jasmine-laced air for a moment longer before stepping outside into the dirt and dust of the world once more. “I understand the stress of moving into another town that isn’t your own. Perhaps you’d like to make this a weekly thing for now, to get you comfortable while you’re here? I mean—if you say you’re going to be working with animals—” She let the implication hang in the air.
“They’re not all bad,” said Fluttershy, pushing the door open for her spa partner. “A lot of them are quite skilled at cleaning themselves. Besides, I made the mistake of bathing a cat once—never again.”
“You’re too nice a soul to be dealing with such creatures on a regular basis,” sniffed Rarity.
Fluttershy blushed and hung her head as she passed through the door.
“Aaaaand I want that one. No, wait—gimme that one instead. Orrrr was it that one? Hang on, that one’s part of a set? Just grab me something that comes in one bottle. Aw, haystacks, I don’t even know what I’m doing here.”
The pegasus’s head bounced back up as she stopped in her tracks. She knew that voice from somewhere.
“Rainbow Dash?” Rarity gasped.
The noise of glass bottles shattering on tile filled the air. “R-R-Rarity? Boy, of all the ponies I had to run into today, I just—”
Fluttershy’s eyes grew wide at the same time the other pony’s voice died away. They gaped at each other for a moment that could have spanned the life of a glacier. And then Fluttershy broke out into the largest smile she’d smiled ever since she moved to Ponyville.
“Rainbow Dash!” She launched herself across the room just as the other pegasus threw her hooves out wide, and the two of them embraced as if the years after their last meeting had never happened at all.
“I-I-I can’t believe this!” Rainbow’s voice sang in her ear. “Fluttershy! I looked for you everywhere after I got kicked outta camp! You live here now?”
Fluttershy’s throat tightened in ecstasy. “I moved here last month, yes.”
“Ahhhh! Get outta here!” Rainbow hugged her all the tighter, and the two of them moved toward the front door. “You’ve gotta tell me what you’ve been up to all this time!”
Behind the animated chatter of their reunion, Rarity reached up and scratched her head. “Goodness, Rainbow Dash,” she sniffed, surveying the broken bottles by her hooves. “I, well... hm. If you wanted to get the right conditioner for your mane, all you had to do was consult me on the matter and I could’ve saved you all this trouble.”
D'AWWW
56067 I can't agree any more.
CouchCrusader, feel proud of this story. I can tell you put tons of effort into it and it turned out awesome . I legitimately don't know how this didn't get more views or a feature on the slideshowy thingy up top. . . .
But even if that's dissapointing, views aren't everything.
This was amazing, and know that you made my life that much better. Don't let the stupid views discourage you, you write really well. I'll be following you, even if you don't have legions of fans like some other people! ~YAY~
Aw shucks, guys. The views aren't what's important to me or anything. If you feel like this story needs attention, feel free to tell your friends about it. Other than that, though, I basically wrote this piece for myself and a couple of friends, and they're all the people I was aiming to satisfy. Everyone else's approval is just icing on the cake.
That said, I'm really honored by the positive response this story's been getting so far. It's also published on EqD if you want to check it out there, too: http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/12/story-wingmares.html
Hopefully I'll get around to writing another story once finals stop massaging my face into a pile of broken glass.
Thank you for reading.
Awesome fic! I really liked how you elaborated on how Flutteryshy and Rainbow Dash became friends.
I enjoyed every Word! Very well written.
Dammit, now I want a Fluttershy massage.
Nice. Its not as romantic as most other romance fics but its very good anyway...
Wow. Your plot and characterization: A+
Your view count: why so underrated?
Your execution? Approaching perfect. Are you willing to revise any more?
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I'm always interested in improving my writing. If you have suggestions, I'd love to hear them! And like I said above, views don't matter to me, but feel free to tell your friends about this story if you'd like.
>>Mondoblasto
i think everypony wants a Fluttershy massage
you, yes you, you should write more characterization stories.... this one was awesome
keep up the great writing
I thoroughly enjoyed the read and I thought it was extremely well written! I hope that you write another story sometime!
There were a few places where it wasn't clear what was happening, but maybe that's just me. All in all, this was an amazing story and I loved every minute of it!
Oh man, that's beautiful. You must write more. I can't believe this isn't more popular. I really love this story, considering Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy are my favorite characters, I'm surprised I didn't find this earlier. Good job.
First pony fan fiction I ever read, and I made a great choice in choosing this one! I'm currently re-reading it via Kindle.
Seriously amazing story. I love it so much.
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Oh wow. Of all the amazing stories out there to read first, you picked mine? I can't even express how happy and humbled I am by your comment there. Thank you so much for reading! I know you'll find tons of other stories out there you'll love better than mine, anyway XD
This is a damn good story.
That is all have to say.
25 comments? Hmmm.......... LOL nope! 26 naow. Seee ya>>338692
Of all the fanfiction I have read, this story is my absolute favourite. The scene with Fluttershy colouring her hair is the sweetest, most adorably awesome scene I've ever read. I love it, and just wanted to let everyone (especially the author) know,
Wow. That's all I can really say to describe this fic. It was absolutely amazing.
Read this story in one go. Loved every second of it
I loved this. The massage works perfectly with Fluttershy's ability to massage a bear, for heaven's sake.