After weeks of waiting, Roseluck slips into the virtual Chimera District, eager to lose herself in the cyberparadise. Finally, she can be anypony. Anypony at all.
I like the hook and all, but i feel like theres a lot going on that might need explanation. I'm fine with sci-fi but giving some sort of reason for the "hows and whys" of the VR stuff would make the world feel a bit more real.
Why does Roseluck think that it isn't Twilight? From the character's opening statement it has to be someone that knows her and knows she's been putting this off for a while. If it isn't Twilight, it would have to be one of her sisters, which doesn't seem likely. Also, what is it that she had to get Twilight to do? That part wasn't clear.
Her sisters are a bit strange too. They clearly care about her well-being as they got her the interface. But they don't care enough to invite her to their 'testing sessions'? What's up with that?
8784732 Heeee! I dunno! Roseluck's gotta have some reason to think that! Mayyybeeeee we'll find out! And maybe she'll be right! Maybe she'll be wrong! :3
... why is this in
Anthros of Harmony
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Oopsies! Wrong button! |badhoney
Well, this certainly sounds interesting, ill keep an eye on this.
Wow interesting concept can't wait for more
Too short! Too short! Cliffhanger! Want more!
Time to see if you have other stories.
Oh boy this sounds good. I'm on board.
A true submissive's story? You've got my attention.
For some reason, I got Ready Player One vibes.
Looking forward to Roseluck getting some love.
Very nice.
I like the hook and all, but i feel like theres a lot going on that might need explanation. I'm fine with sci-fi but giving some sort of reason for the "hows and whys" of the VR stuff would make the world feel a bit more real.
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Heeee! I'm gonna try to get a new chapter out tonight, so more to look at! :3
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It's gonna be fun! I've already had so much fun with it! :3
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Wellllllll since you asked all nice and stuff, probably can do that tonight! :3
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Heeee! Hope you like the ride! :3
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Oh yes. Total sub here! Lots and lots of it! :3
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Heee! I did just read that! Probably helped a litttttlleeeeee (and yay movie soon!!!!) :3
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Thx so much!
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Not sure about "why," but I'm going to do a lot of "how!" I like fancy worlds, too!!!!! :3
Why does Roseluck think that it isn't Twilight? From the character's opening statement it has to be someone that knows her and knows she's been putting this off for a while. If it isn't Twilight, it would have to be one of her sisters, which doesn't seem likely. Also, what is it that she had to get Twilight to do? That part wasn't clear.
Her sisters are a bit strange too. They clearly care about her well-being as they got her the interface. But they don't care enough to invite her to their 'testing sessions'? What's up with that?
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Heeee! I dunno! Roseluck's gotta have some reason to think that! Mayyybeeeee we'll find out! And maybe she'll be right! Maybe she'll be wrong! :3