When Dusk's mother signs him up to the wrong college, his life takes a rather crazy turn when he has to live with four cute girls for the next four years.
University students acting like they are teens. And this story runs on childish cliches... At least the grammar is on the okay side of things. Grow up.
9697304 Someone that understands! An actual adult! It is so tiring to see all these anime-like stories from the younger generation. Maybe one day they will grow up.
9697311 I think this is the biggest issue I have with HiEs and stories like this is the main characters and side characters don't act their age. If the characters are young write them as young but most of the time it's a a mid twenties guy acting like he's f****** 12 and it just takes me out of the story.
And I'm tagging out my dudes after reading the update. The story is written (as in spelling and grammar) well but the content is just Anime trope upon anime trope maybe if I was 13 and I thought sexual stupidity and assault and battery equaled funny but it's not and I don't so...yeah. So to the writer you do you my dude... you do you.
9697375 I agree with everything but I did find a story that runs on anime tropes but it is presented in a way that makes things believable. MLP is not involved in this story and the whole thing just makes fun of anime. It's not on this website as most of the people on Fimfiction are far too young to write properly but check this out: The Simulacrum.
9697087 ...University students ARE Teens. Until the end of their second year there at the latest, they are going to be 18 and 19 years old if they went in right after High School
9697826 You know, as a graduate of a university I have never seen something this stupid--maybe it's due to the university I was in but never the less... At the point of 18 years of age (Which is legally an adult), people act a lot older than children such as these. They are responsible for far more yet these children are worthless. Let me reword my original comment by putting 'Tweens', is that better? Or do you still have difficulty understanding the meaning behind my words?
Damn that's one hell of way for Poor Dusk to be introduced to Aria. Being viciously attacked for no real reason & hurting Barb was messed up! I wanna know more why Aria is so hateful towards men especially, when Adagio said...
“She showed up one day in our dorm crying her eyes out and refused to say anything.”
“She only said that she never wanted to see another guy again.”
That's a story I hope we get to discover & find out what (or who) cause Aria to be the way, she is today cuz something tells me that's gonna be an emotional for her & Dusk.
Excellent job on the chapter & can't wait for the next chapter!
So we're making Dusk room with someone who is straight looking for any excuse to hospitalize him, and everyone's just telling him to suck it up? Really? That's what we're going with?
9699954 Cuz both times he got attacked, he was never given a fighting chance. At least, he's pissed off Aria for kicking his dog, so he won't be having his defense down cuz of it now.... I hope
Hmmm .... This is just me don't take this the wrong way ... But I think lunas lying. A student can transfer colleges. It's just harder because the screening process is more strict the... more prestigious... the college you try to transfer into. What i mean is it's harder to go up then down. With dusks scores he'd probably still be accepted for a transfer to celestias college because his scores are that good. His real problems would be scholarships if he's using any would be tied up in paperwork for a month or two or if any of the courses he wanted were full. The only one it looks bad for is lunas college ....because he's transferring out to whats considered a better college it makes it look like he couldn't recieve an adequate education thus giving the college a bad rep if found out... which is what I think is really going on.
The way they desribed canterlot college If at some point lunas college and celestias have a competition (and I'm hoping Luna realllllly thanks dusk for siding with her college. *wink wink nudge nudge* maybe even have celestia show her appreciation for helping her sister) Because you just know the other side... being pratts ... would try to get him on their side by bribing him with a transfer.
9708953 There’s nothing wrong with that, but why were you expecting more from a Fanfic that’s obviously just wants to a fun little Harem story? Your complains so far can literally boiled down to something similar like “this character’s breasts should be breaking their back because they’re too huge.”
9708977 I don't think that is a fair comparison. I want more believable characters and character development, I have read light novels in the past (wish I could remember them) with great realistic character developments and at the same time having the stereotypical cliches and pitfalls of animes.
9710118 Again then why are you coming to a fanfic about already established characters for that? I mean I know there are fics out there that have what you’re looking for, but you’re honestly coming off as asshole here for comparing a Light Novel to a fan made story that was most likely made for fun.
9710476 Because there is nothing else to read on this site and this has a high rating. So, I wanted to see if this story was any good. It was not and I commented about the wrongs but now people keep dragging me back here. I'm done, I'm not responding here anymore. PMs are different though.
wow, i'm starting to think all those people claiming this is a harem anime (whatever that is) were right. he falls asleep on a couch alone. he wakes up on the couch not alone. angry girl finds them like this. she inexplicably believes he is doing perverted things to the other girl despite the fact he is still on the couch thus she had to have come to him not the other way around. wow.
wow I laugh a lot when people get angry with the authors of fics just because they do not make their ideal and happy story, they could see another page specialized in literature, go and complain elsewhere, this place is to entertain and seek entertainment with stories of all kinds, if this fic is not liked, look elsewhere, on the internet, there is a whole universe with other fics that could satisfy them. again, go to complain and cry to another side.
9699954 Because he was too afraid to and it would only make it worse for himself because the students would think he's like every other guy that tried to get in the school. Plus he doesn't like hitting girls.
9747974 Yeah honestly I was a little thrown off too on the concept but after a while I got the hang of it but if you see us use the terms mare or stallion let us know and we'll see to adjust it as soon as possible.
9716437 No we weren't aware of it and we never saw the show. Also Starlight and Sunstone are going to the same college because they're dating and don't want to be apart.
9782252 Crap, my bad we meant to make it humanized. Only thing is their skin will be colored like their coats an will only have wings and horns. If you want better reference check fatelogic on Derpibooru.
9710915 Hey Cipher, I heard from a couple friends that you've been trolling their stories. I don't know who u are but if you don't stop trolling we WILL have a problem. Am I clear?
Psst
As a changling I feel like I am an expert on this topic.
Is Eris going to be in this story?
I would really love to see dusk being dominated😅
I’m honestly fearing for Dusks life with Aria
Such a nice set of roommates: A sensible one, an airhead one, a flirty one and a murderous one. Good luck Dusk... You'll need it I think.
I get the feeling Aria ether had her heart broken or raped hopefully the former.
Make sure dusk learns a shield spell for his balls sometime in the future plz
I don;t care for Bitchy Aira, yes i get she got hurt. But she kicked barbed for trying to keep her master from being murdered!
University students acting like they are teens. And this story runs on childish cliches... At least the grammar is on the okay side of things. Grow up.
Aria’s all like “I definitely have absolutely no romantic feelings towards you! B-baka!”
9697087
I agree with you, that seems to be the case more often than not when it comes to this kind of story... anime story writing.
9697304
Someone that understands! An actual adult! It is so tiring to see all these anime-like stories from the younger generation. Maybe one day they will grow up.
9697311
I think this is the biggest issue I have with HiEs and stories like this is the main characters and side characters don't act their age. If the characters are young write them as young but most of the time it's a a mid twenties guy acting like he's f****** 12 and it just takes me out of the story.
And I'm tagging out my dudes after reading the update. The story is written (as in spelling and grammar) well but the content is just Anime trope upon anime trope maybe if I was 13 and I thought sexual stupidity and assault and battery equaled funny but it's not and I don't so...yeah. So to the writer you do you my dude... you do you.
Dusk you lucky stallion
9697375
I agree with everything but I did find a story that runs on anime tropes but it is presented in a way that makes things believable. MLP is not involved in this story and the whole thing just makes fun of anime. It's not on this website as most of the people on Fimfiction are far too young to write properly but check this out: The Simulacrum.
9697087
...University students ARE Teens. Until the end of their second year there at the latest, they are going to be 18 and 19 years old if they went in right after High School
No one:
Sonata: It appears that my clothing has become redundant.
9697826
You know, as a graduate of a university I have never seen something this stupid--maybe it's due to the university I was in but never the less... At the point of 18 years of age (Which is legally an adult), people act a lot older than children such as these. They are responsible for far more yet these children are worthless. Let me reword my original comment by putting 'Tweens', is that better? Or do you still have difficulty understanding the meaning behind my words?
Damn that's one hell of way for Poor Dusk to be introduced to Aria. Being viciously attacked for no real reason & hurting Barb was messed up! I wanna know more why Aria is so hateful towards men especially, when Adagio said...
That's a story I hope we get to discover & find out what (or who) cause Aria to be the way, she is today cuz something tells me that's gonna be an emotional for her & Dusk.
Excellent job on the chapter & can't wait for the next chapter!
9696707
I hope it's the first one...
Does Dusk not have magic? Why can't he defend himself?
So we're making Dusk room with someone who is straight looking for any excuse to hospitalize him, and everyone's just telling him to suck it up? Really? That's what we're going with?
9699954
Cuz both times he got attacked, he was never given a fighting chance. At least, he's pissed off Aria for kicking his dog, so he won't be having his defense down cuz of it now.... I hope
Hmmm .... This is just me don't take this the wrong way ... But I think lunas lying. A student can transfer colleges. It's just harder because the screening process is more strict the... more prestigious... the college you try to transfer into. What i mean is it's harder to go up then down. With dusks scores he'd probably still be accepted for a transfer to celestias college because his scores are that good. His real problems would be scholarships if he's using any would be tied up in paperwork for a month or two or if any of the courses he wanted were full. The only one it looks bad for is lunas college ....because he's transferring out to whats considered a better college it makes it look like he couldn't recieve an adequate education thus giving the college a bad rep if found out... which is what I think is really going on.
The way they desribed canterlot college If at some point lunas college and celestias have a competition (and I'm hoping Luna realllllly thanks dusk for siding with her college. *wink wink nudge nudge* maybe even have celestia show her appreciation for helping her sister) Because you just know the other side... being pratts ... would try to get him on their side by bribing him with a transfer.
9697087
Have you read the previous chapters mate, or are you just trolling everyone?
9708255
I read every chapter and then posted the comment.
9708949
Okay, then why are you surprised by how the characters are acting?
9708951
I expected more, but the childish cliches really throw me off. It's literally like an anime, it's getting old.
9708953
There’s nothing wrong with that, but why were you expecting more from a Fanfic that’s obviously just wants to a fun little Harem story? Your complains so far can literally boiled down to something similar like “this character’s breasts should be breaking their back because they’re too huge.”
9708977
I don't think that is a fair comparison. I want more believable characters and character development, I have read light novels in the past (wish I could remember them) with great realistic character developments and at the same time having the stereotypical cliches and pitfalls of animes.
9710118
Again then why are you coming to a fanfic about already established characters for that? I mean I know there are fics out there that have what you’re looking for, but you’re honestly coming off as asshole here for comparing a Light Novel to a fan made story that was most likely made for fun.
9710476
Because there is nothing else to read on this site and this has a high rating. So, I wanted to see if this story was any good. It was not and I commented about the wrongs but now people keep dragging me back here. I'm done, I'm not responding here anymore. PMs are different though.
wow, i'm starting to think all those people claiming this is a harem anime (whatever that is) were right. he falls asleep on a couch alone. he wakes up on the couch not alone. angry girl finds them like this. she inexplicably believes he is doing perverted things to the other girl despite the fact he is still on the couch thus she had to have come to him not the other way around. wow.
wow
I laugh a lot when people get angry with the authors of fics just because they do not make their ideal and happy story, they could see another page specialized in literature, go and complain elsewhere, this place is to entertain and seek entertainment with stories of all kinds, if this fic is not liked, look elsewhere, on the internet, there is a whole universe with other fics that could satisfy them.
again, go to complain and cry to another side.
9699954
Because he was too afraid to and it would only make it worse for himself because the students would think he's like every other guy that tried to get in the school. Plus he doesn't like hitting girls.
9747974
Yeah honestly I was a little thrown off too on the concept but after a while I got the hang of it but if you see us use the terms mare or stallion let us know and we'll see to adjust it as soon as possible.
9716437
No we weren't aware of it and we never saw the show. Also Starlight and Sunstone are going to the same college because they're dating and don't want to be apart.
9696591
Don't worry she's not going to kill him she just REEEEAAAAALLLLLYY doesn't like him.
9782252
Crap, my bad we meant to make it humanized. Only thing is their skin will be colored like their coats an will only have wings and horns. If you want better reference check fatelogic on Derpibooru.
Okay, I'm going to ask... How adept is Dusk with magic? Also, I hope Fluttershy has a few choice words for Aria's abuse of Barb.
This was a awesome read I can't wait to see what thet dream was really about and what happened next.
9710915
Hey Cipher, I heard from a couple friends that you've been trolling their stories. I don't know who u are but if you don't stop trolling we WILL have a problem. Am I clear?
I hope this continues, I liked the story. It kinda reminded of a certain anime I read once
Please continue the STORY!! It's been 4 months and I'm kinda disappointed.
I somehow doubt the wisdom in rooming Dusk with a violent psychotic misandrist