When Jet Stream puts his and Apogee's special Tuesday nights on hold three weeks in a row, the frustrated teen decides to turn to her mother Delta Vee for help. When things don't work out like she imagined she finds herself having to improvise.
Well, I can certainly and safely say that, without a doubt, with this being your first story, it's well written and very enjoyable. From start to finish, I like it! Like... mmm, truthfully, I'm still iffy on Jet, but I'm liking the premise of where this story may lay, I -obviously- fucking love Delta Vee, and Apogee is a fucking cutie, so... this fic should be immensely enjoyable to me.
I like the end there as well, that was both funny and fairly... what's the word, I suppose it's relatable? We've all gone through that stage in life, so I can... in a strange way, kind of see where Gee's coming from.
I'm eager to read more of this, I wonder how Delta will react to this, hehe. So good show, good show.
8689709 Thanks Dust, I'm glad you liked it. If you like Delta Vee a lot then I think you should appreciate chapter 2. It is for her what this chapter is for Apogee, so to speak.
Ah, Apogee. Truly a spoiled, petulant child, but that is not entirely her fault. She does not know what it entails to be the CEO of a huge, multi-million company... but at the same time, some of her reasoning was that of a petulant child. And it was perfect. She has made a stupid, rash decision, at the time she believed she had a perfect justification for it. Not an objectively good one, but again, her reaction is in line with what we know so far.
Then again, it's not like Jet's innocent in this situation either - he should have known better to make promises he knew he wouldn't be able to keep. Though I think he's about to do some serious restructuralization in his company. Seriously, a CEO should not be the one to handle pretty much every single little thing in the whole company - that's what VPs, directors, and their underlings are for. He should be doing the biggest decisions and called for the most important meetings.
Whether that is the case or not, we know that he angrily slammed the door not because of how Apogee reacted, but because of the fact that all those situations have caused all of this to happen. ... and Apogee's reaction to that was perfectly natural in her current mindset. She absolutely misinterpreted that slam as him being angry at her, but it made sense at the time.
Also, she actually swore. Holy hell, she must have been holding a lot of repressed anger/disappointment.
Heh, Delta will be Delta indeed. I am really looking to the reaction of her finding Apogee in her trailer, and how the talk will go. Because, obviously, Apogee will have to spill the beans... but at the same time be vague enough so Delta doesn't go into a fit of rage because of the current relationship between Gee and Jet.
tl;dr - a good lead-in chapter, definitely can't wait for more!
I'm glad the others told me to watch you. I've been anticipating this for some time. Poor Apogee.
Jet is such an odd character. No matter what I read I don't know what caused everything for him and Delta to spiral out of control. There are many stories and the blog that started this whole thing, but I want to hear his side of the story now. I know what Delta said happened, but is it true? I can't wait to see how this eventually plays out, but now I want to see Delta walk in on Apogee and just see how she reacts to finding her daughter among her toys. *Please give me more Delta!!!!*
Also, Apogee, sweetie, normal people lock their doors. It's a perfectly normal thing for a functional member of society to do. And unfortunately so is the key under the mat thing.
8690306 Glad you followed along. You'll get more Delta than you know what to do with in Chapter 2. Chapter 2 shouldn't take terribly long to put out. It's mostly written already.
About the door thing... I actually made the assumption that ponies don't normally lock their doors since.. ponies are ponies. OTOH, Shino's AU take on a more modern Equestria might mean more human-like sensibilities. Either way, regardless of which you personally believe it either makes Apogee seem silly, or Delta. Both work.
first delta, and now apogee is running away. I hope everything ends well between them and she forgives him. Jet can't seem to have a break.
Anyway... Your first story, huh? Not bad at all. I look foward to see chapter two (hopefuly with some mom x daughter action). You made Apogee look a lot relatable. Of course, that has to do with her still imaturity as a teenager like we all had, but that gives her a lot of character. I liked it quite a lot, even if it was a little sad to see her not compreending how tiring and complicated an adult's life can be. As for jet, i enjoyed what you did with him too. He really looks frustrated with his attemptions and his work getting on the way of him and apogee. It made it sound like he left to make propper actions to the company so that he can stay more time with her. He thinks he's losing her.
Dude, you're doing fucking fantastic. I can't wait to see the end of it
Making the conflict felt by Jet and 'Gee feel real was something I fretted about so I'm glad it worked out.
I will regretfully say this much: Chapter 2 won't feature Apogee and Delta together in a scene, that'll happen in chapter 3. Chapter 2 will be all about Delta and how her day has been going.
eh, i can wait. But i really liked how you're developing jet and gee. They feel so real. Jet and his frustration and gee and her... let's say... inocent blindness(?) make it look like something we see a lot happening irl. It actualy made me feel grateful for having parents that care about me, but i was too imature to see it when i was 15. Congractulations, mate
heh, this really looks like it could become it's own separated series
8690542 Silly Apogee is best Apogees. She wouldn't be great otherwise in my books. If she's not super horny and silly she just wouldn't be the same. I'm still waiting to see all three of them in a threesome together. Maybe someday.
Oh boy, I can't wait for the next chapter, it's a time for Delta to get some love from her daughter. I like JetGee stories, but I'm wanting to read DeltaGee too, and you're the first one to deliver. Keep it coming, man!
I'm wondering that is this story be a short one or long one?
8699526 It will be at least 4 chapters, but I see no reason that I won't continue to do more after that. Assuming people are continuing to enjoy what is there. Glad you enjoyed it though.
Well, I can certainly and safely say that, without a doubt, with this being your first story, it's well written and very enjoyable. From start to finish, I like it! Like... mmm, truthfully, I'm still iffy on Jet, but I'm liking the premise of where this story may lay, I -obviously- fucking love Delta Vee, and Apogee is a fucking cutie, so... this fic should be immensely enjoyable to me.
I like the end there as well, that was both funny and fairly... what's the word, I suppose it's relatable? We've all gone through that stage in life, so I can... in a strange way, kind of see where Gee's coming from.
I'm eager to read more of this, I wonder how Delta will react to this, hehe. So good show, good show.
8689709
Thanks Dust, I'm glad you liked it.
If you like Delta Vee a lot then I think you should appreciate chapter 2. It is for her what this chapter is for Apogee, so to speak.
8689728
Nice! Looking forward to it
Keep it up dude.
I can't wait for the terminator reveal!
8689828
It will come when you least expect it.
Ah, Apogee. Truly a spoiled, petulant child, but that is not entirely her fault.
She does not know what it entails to be the CEO of a huge, multi-million company... but at the same time, some of her reasoning was that of a petulant child.
And it was perfect. She has made a stupid, rash decision, at the time she believed she had a perfect justification for it. Not an objectively good one, but again, her reaction is in line with what we know so far.
Then again, it's not like Jet's innocent in this situation either - he should have known better to make promises he knew he wouldn't be able to keep.
Though I think he's about to do some serious restructuralization in his company. Seriously, a CEO should not be the one to handle pretty much every single little thing in the whole company - that's what VPs, directors, and their underlings are for. He should be doing the biggest decisions and called for the most important meetings.
Whether that is the case or not, we know that he angrily slammed the door not because of how Apogee reacted, but because of the fact that all those situations have caused all of this to happen.
... and Apogee's reaction to that was perfectly natural in her current mindset. She absolutely misinterpreted that slam as him being angry at her, but it made sense at the time.
Also, she actually swore. Holy hell, she must have been holding a lot of repressed anger/disappointment.
Heh, Delta will be Delta indeed. I am really looking to the reaction of her finding Apogee in her trailer, and how the talk will go.
Because, obviously, Apogee will have to spill the beans... but at the same time be vague enough so Delta doesn't go into a fit of rage because of the current relationship between Gee and Jet.
tl;dr - a good lead-in chapter, definitely can't wait for more!
I'm glad the others told me to watch you. I've been anticipating this for some time. Poor Apogee.
Jet is such an odd character. No matter what I read I don't know what caused everything for him and Delta to spiral out of control. There are many stories and the blog that started this whole thing, but I want to hear his side of the story now. I know what Delta said happened, but is it true? I can't wait to see how this eventually plays out, but now I want to see Delta walk in on Apogee and just see how she reacts to finding her daughter among her toys. *Please give me more Delta!!!!*
Also, Apogee, sweetie, normal people lock their doors. It's a perfectly normal thing for a functional member of society to do. And unfortunately so is the key under the mat thing.
8690306
Glad you followed along.
You'll get more Delta than you know what to do with in Chapter 2.
Chapter 2 shouldn't take terribly long to put out. It's mostly written already.
About the door thing...
I actually made the assumption that ponies don't normally lock their doors since.. ponies are ponies. OTOH, Shino's AU take on a more modern Equestria might mean more human-like sensibilities. Either way, regardless of which you personally believe it either makes Apogee seem silly, or Delta. Both work.
whew, that first scene did put me on the edge
first delta, and now apogee is running away. I hope everything ends well between them and she forgives him. Jet can't seem to have a break.
Anyway... Your first story, huh? Not bad at all. I look foward to see chapter two (hopefuly with some mom x daughter action). You made Apogee look a lot relatable. Of course, that has to do with her still imaturity as a teenager like we all had, but that gives her a lot of character. I liked it quite a lot, even if it was a little sad to see her not compreending how tiring and complicated an adult's life can be. As for jet, i enjoyed what you did with him too. He really looks frustrated with his attemptions and his work getting on the way of him and apogee. It made it sound like he left to make propper actions to the company so that he can stay more time with her. He thinks he's losing her.
Dude, you're doing fucking fantastic. I can't wait to see the end of it
8690552
Wow thanks.
Making the conflict felt by Jet and 'Gee feel real was something I fretted about so I'm glad it worked out.
I will regretfully say this much: Chapter 2 won't feature Apogee and Delta together in a scene, that'll happen in chapter 3. Chapter 2 will be all about Delta and how her day has been going.
8690639
shrugs
eh, i can wait. But i really liked how you're developing jet and gee. They feel so real. Jet and his frustration and gee and her... let's say... inocent blindness(?) make it look like something we see a lot happening irl. It actualy made me feel grateful for having parents that care about me, but i was too imature to see it when i was 15. Congractulations, mate
heh, this really looks like it could become it's own separated series
8690542
Silly Apogee is best Apogees. She wouldn't be great otherwise in my books. If she's not super horny and silly she just wouldn't be the same. I'm still waiting to see all three of them in a threesome together. Maybe someday.
8690975
You and me both
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Oh boy, I can't wait for the next chapter, it's a time for Delta to get some love from her daughter.
I like JetGee stories, but I'm wanting to read DeltaGee too, and you're the first one to deliver. Keep it coming, man!
I'm wondering that is this story be a short one or long one?
8699526
It will be at least 4 chapters, but I see no reason that I won't continue to do more after that. Assuming people are continuing to enjoy what is there.
Glad you enjoyed it though.
Apogee is so silly....