Dayson hadn't expected to change reality tonight. He hadn't expected a cliche magical bracelet, a dark and stormy night or legends from some pony version of Atlantis.
I really love this, wacky impossible large scale transformation is exactly my jam. The human OCs are actually mostly characters, too, which is nice. You've got a pretty good handle on how to emphasis lewd aspects, but an outright sex scene wouldn't go unappreciated.
Of a little bit mixed feelings on the exact execution of the history rewriting stuff, one part is fantastic in terms of ridiculous escalation, and freaky mind control and such is well within my tastes, but there's a fine line to watch out for where it makes the situation less fun. What's the point of a transformation if no one's aware of it enough to be disoriented or terrified or excited or reluctant? And like... I liked Becky! Becky was a fun character who was going to move the plot and action in good directions, so effectively writing her out of the story feels like missed opportunity. Maybe I'm underestimating you, though.
Anyway, eagerly anticipating more, good luck. Especially looking forward to when we get some TG in the mix.
There were a few conjugation and article issues scattered about, if I get the motivation for a reread I'll try and wrap them up in a PM to you.
Well in the work that inspired this story, there were moments of regression where the character would come back to themselves, and so would everyone else. Granted, that happened less and less often as he (then she) allowed the power to warp them over time, but I could easily see it seemingly like the new reality completely displaces the old one in the moment.
I agree with you though, Becky is a fun character in this story.
8662534 HEEEE!!! Thx! I was totally not expecting to get such a great comment on my first try for a story like this!
I dunno. Really flat characters bore me. Need to give them something. It's fun that worked! Next part is all direct fun stuff though, so you'll "appreciate" that a bunch! Reality shifts are really fun to me though! I kinda like it when the person reading the story is the only one who knows about the changes! Kinda adds and exciting/scary part to me! After all, we're just starting! I've got a few DAYS planned for this little thing!
So, yeah, don't worry, Becky's not out! After all, that little voice got REALLLLLY mad about forcing people. The voice would probably get even madder about just making people go poof! She is definitely not done with Dayson! Don't worry, there's way more to come! Thx for the edit offer! Sure there's a bunch of errors. I edited this a bunch, but kinda went "good enough! Let's have some fun!"
8662904 Ooooh! Sneaky! Reading the story I linked and stuff. Don't worry though, Becky's not done! Though after your comments, I think I'm gonna give her a bigger part! Thx so much!
I really love this, wacky impossible large scale transformation is exactly my jam. The human OCs are actually mostly characters, too, which is nice. You've got a pretty good handle on how to emphasis lewd aspects, but an outright sex scene wouldn't go unappreciated.
Of a little bit mixed feelings on the exact execution of the history rewriting stuff, one part is fantastic in terms of ridiculous escalation, and freaky mind control and such is well within my tastes, but there's a fine line to watch out for where it makes the situation less fun. What's the point of a transformation if no one's aware of it enough to be disoriented or terrified or excited or reluctant? And like... I liked Becky! Becky was a fun character who was going to move the plot and action in good directions, so effectively writing her out of the story feels like missed opportunity. Maybe I'm underestimating you, though.
Anyway, eagerly anticipating more, good luck. Especially looking forward to when we get some TG in the mix.
There were a few conjugation and article issues scattered about, if I get the motivation for a reread I'll try and wrap them up in a PM to you.
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Well in the work that inspired this story, there were moments of regression where the character would come back to themselves, and so would everyone else. Granted, that happened less and less often as he (then she) allowed the power to warp them over time, but I could easily see it seemingly like the new reality completely displaces the old one in the moment.
I agree with you though, Becky is a fun character in this story.
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HEEEE!!! Thx! I was totally not expecting to get such a great comment on my first try for a story like this!
I dunno. Really flat characters bore me. Need to give them something. It's fun that worked! Next part is all direct fun stuff though, so you'll "appreciate" that a bunch! Reality shifts are really fun to me though! I kinda like it when the person reading the story is the only one who knows about the changes! Kinda adds and exciting/scary part to me! After all, we're just starting! I've got a few DAYS planned for this little thing!
So, yeah, don't worry, Becky's not out! After all, that little voice got REALLLLLY mad about forcing people. The voice would probably get even madder about just making people go poof! She is definitely not done with Dayson! Don't worry, there's way more to come! Thx for the edit offer! Sure there's a bunch of errors. I edited this a bunch, but kinda went "good enough! Let's have some fun!"
8662904
Ooooh! Sneaky! Reading the story I linked and stuff. Don't worry though, Becky's not done! Though after your comments, I think I'm gonna give her a bigger part! Thx so much!
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Either way, you have my interest. I look forward to the inevitable anthrofication of the world.
8662980 SOOOOOOOOON!
Definitely an interesting story. I'm going to keep an eye on this one
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Aww! Thx so much!
You have no idea how happy i am that you choose to focus on these underused characters. And from what i read so far, this is gonna be fun.
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Heee! You're gonna like the next one then!
Okay. You had my interest, now you have my attention! Your really good at this.
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Heeee! Thx so much! :3