When a simple determined soldier falls in battle, he is given a second chance as a new life. What is the problem you ask? Not only is he born as a different gender and a pony, but he is the daughter of Nightmare Moon, Empress of Equestria.
Since he is a fan character, I kind of hope that he is at least not telling her about the show for a while, but in this situation it is probably getting more interessting as soon as they maybe have a talk about his former life.
That fear grew until I was panicing for a reason I don't even know.
That can maybe work in that situation, but I hope his body isn't controlling his adult mind to much. I understand it to a certain point, but then I say it shouldn'T let's say force him to do stuff. I mean like in one storie where the main char couldn't stop calling Luna mommy despite wanting to do that or a story in which it sounded the body raped someone much to the horror of the human being in that body and that just because the body was used to do that.
Hhhmmm I can't explain it, but I guess he should have some kind of reason why he is affraid and where he is. Well after looking again it seems he can't open his eyes.
Not bad, I mean they are still at the start but it happened somewhat fast.
9279619 It was more of a fear of everything in general. He was in an unknown place, everything he knew is gone, he has to live with the memory of dying, and there was nothing to ease his fears
Logical.
When you make the characters talk, don't do it in the way Glory of the Sun did.
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Well I did say inspired by, but don't worry, I will be using my own writing style.
Thanks for the input!
I love where this is going
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Thanks! Now if only this writers block would go away... I can't even work on my irl novels with it rn
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Don’t worry, heck check my library I’m sure you’ll find something.
If you want
Since he is a fan character, I kind of hope that he is at least not telling her about the show for a while, but in this situation it is probably getting more interessting as soon as they maybe have a talk about his former life.
That can maybe work in that situation, but I hope his body isn't controlling his adult mind to much. I understand it to a certain point, but then I say it shouldn'T let's say force him to do stuff.
I mean like in one storie where the main char couldn't stop calling Luna mommy despite wanting to do that or a story in which it sounded the body raped someone much to the horror of the human being in that body and that just because the body was used to do that.
Hhhmmm I can't explain it, but I guess he should have some kind of reason why he is affraid and where he is. Well after looking again it seems he can't open his eyes.
Not bad, I mean they are still at the start but it happened somewhat fast.
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It was more of a fear of everything in general. He was in an unknown place, everything he knew is gone, he has to live with the memory of dying, and there was nothing to ease his fears