Early in the morning, the sun rose over the small village where Tempest lived. In her home, in her comfy bed, Tempest was sleeping under a thick blanket her mother left on her late in the previous evening. The unicorn rolled over on her bed snuggled happily in the blanket consent to getting some more sleep before waking up to start the morning chores. Then suddenly, from underneath her, there was a muffled scream. Something began thrashing at her back and it was very uncomfortable.
Tempest's eyes shot open with mild irritation. She threw off the blanket to the floor and lifted herself up from the bed. There was a dramatic gasp as Berry Pinch came into view. In her grumpy mood Tempest didn’t register who it was and thought the filly was nothing more than one of her stuffed animals that her mother left with her. Grumbling the mare nudged the filly off the bed with her nose. She then reached down grabbed the blanket and curled up in bed to sleep again completely unaware of her cold niece.
On the floor, Bery Pinch grumbled at Tempest for throwing her on the floor. She was cold and was sure she’d freeze to death if she didn’t find some warmth soon. Shivering she jumped up onto the bed. Her lower half didn’t quite make it up and she had to try many times to get her backside on the bed. Her efforts were rewarded when she finally reached the top of the bed and crawled over the large breathing lump. Careful not to wake Tempest She fully managed to work her way to the front of the bed where she saw par to Tempest's mane sticking out from beneath the comfy blanket with the broken tip of her horn also sticking out, Pinch followed the mane and wriggled under the blanket much like a cat or dog would squeeze under a fence to escape.
She did so but was unaware that she had awoken Tempest as soon as she began moving over her from the start. Tempest, now aware of what was going on lifted the blanket to allow the filly safe passage under the blanket. The bone shivering cold was melted away as Berry Pinch snuggled up against Tempest under the blanket. Her tiny head poked out from under and nestled itself on the pillow. Her muzzle only inches from Tempest, Pinch let out a tired yawn forcing a wet sleep tear to drop down her face. Once it was out she smiled with closed eyes and scooted closer to Tempest and pressed her body against the warmer older mare.
Tempest rolled her eyes, but she allowed this violation of personal space. The night was very cold. She could spare some of her dignity to sleep with her niece.
*Ka-click!*
“Grrrrrrrrrr.”
Tempest opened one eye with so much contempt it could have burned a hole into the ponies above her. Her parents and Aunt Berry had gathered around her and Pinch with a camera in her Aunt’s magical aura. The clicking was no doubt the camera catching the tender moment between Tempest and Pinch. A few moments later a picture was produced from the camera and after the image came to focus showed Tempest snuggled with Pinch with her. The parents awww’ed once again, but a low snarl from Tempest gave them all the warning they needed. Chuckling gently to try and not wake the filly as the parents left the room, but not before Tempest received three kisses to the cheek from the mother, father, and then her aunt.
When her parents left her aunt remained behind. The older mare smiled and took the photo and placed it on the nightstand by the bed for Tempest to see. At first, the younger unicorn mumbled but she couldn’t help but curl her lip at the photo of her and Pinch together.
Berry Punch gently fluffed Tempest's neon pink mane smiling at her.
“I’m so proud of you my little grapevine,” She said to Tempest. “Thank you for being so kind to my filly. She needs friends and family like you.”
Tempest sighed nuzzling the filly. She then wrapped her arms around Pinch and pulled her close allowing her head to rest on her fluffy chest. To both their surprises Pinch giggled and nuzzled against Tempest's chest before letting out a loud snore. Tempest felt her heart melt, her cheeks burned, and she felt very self-conscious about her aunt seeing her like this. Berry Punch seemed to sense her niece's distress and pet her mane gently. This simple act made Tempest relax. Oh, how I missed this. She thought. This is what it’s like to be loved. I can’t believe I ran away from all this. Well, never again. She declared mentally closing her eyes once more.
Berry Punch chuckled and turned to leave. As she exited the room and closed the door a soft barely audible voice said, “I love you, Auntie.” The words resonated with her. Her heart ached and filled with pride. Her eyes welled up with tears as she quickly glanced back in to see Tempest staring at her with the kindest smile she’d ever received from her. In that moment there was a spark between them.
An emotional bond had finally formed and solidified itself. She had earned her nieces respect, and it would only flourish as long as it was nurtured. Of course that would still take time and for now, Berry Punch allowed her two precious fillies to rest. She wiped her tears away and closed the door behind her to allow Tempest and Pinch to rest a bit longer under the warmth of each other's embrace.
Downstairs Berry Punch walked into the living room where her sister and brother in law were with three guests. Maud, Starlight, and Trixie. She took a seat next to her sister and nodded to her.
“Well, it seems Fizzlepop is still tired from last night,” Chardonnay said.
“Yeah, what did you all do last night?” Berry Punch asked the three mares.
Starlight and Trixie gave each other worried glances, but Maud in her stoic way gave a simple response.
“We were bonding as friends,” Maud said, as a tiny smile crept on her lips.
Maud is One Punch Mare
An emotional bond had finally formed and solidified itself. She had earned her nieces respect, and it would only flourish as long as it was nurtured. Of course that would still take time and for now, Berry Punch allowed her two precious fillies to rest. She wiped her tears away and closed the door behind her to allow Tempest and Pich to rest a bit longer under the warmth of each other's embrace.
I have read it but I'm a bit tired from last night, can you explain to me why she suddenly had her respect?, was it because Berry respected her wishes and wasn't only annoying her?
I just failed to see the important thing Berry did to earn the trust right now, I think I simply didn'T understood it because being tired but maybe it was nearly nothing she did and I'm not exactly impressed in the end but please explain it to me.
I like Maud and have nothing against Starlight and Tempest becoming friends, I just hope Maud isn't just forcing her to accept Trixie or anything. You seems to follow the idea that someone or Trixie in this chase did something awful to her, which is why I expect a more or less meaningfull apology sooner or later.
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Really she wasn't an Earth Pony?, I thought the stump on my avatars head was just a bump on the head.
Have you just compared a maschine with a human? (I just guess that first unit you mentioned meant that without looking it up)
I don't know what to say else, but I know that it can make sense if you are willing to look this or that way at it.
There are several stories that work that way and sometimes I think it doesn't looks so good to play the "we are eath pony with godlike strange" card.
This sometimes sounds like it would be a golden rule and she then maybe should have known that it could be that dangerous to fight an earth pony.
I like to think that strong power doesn't has to mean a strong defense and everything like that and that technique should be able to win a fight in some games/animes.
That and know that I think about it, I wouldn't expect a man with a pistol to run straight towards the tank and expect to win without being a bit crafty. I'm not an expert but I'm thinking that an anime could pull it off without being to unrealistic.
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Never actually watched it funny enough. I've only heard about it. O.o
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It was actually the connection to Berry Pinch they shared. Obviously Berry Pinch wants Tempets to like her. Tempest found that pinch was the common no d they shared and if Berry could change and have a good filly then she could change too. That's why Tempest respects her more now.
Oh, yes tempest was a unicorn with a broken horn. I'm surprised you didn't realize that. :derpytongueI 2: She shoots magic from the her horn. Unless you're talking about another character.
Honestly kinda surprised no one else chewed Trixie out when finding out the Ursa story is in fact an actual tragedy in which she was semi at fault.
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That fact was nice yes.
I admit I'm always a little bit supportive towards the main char, but I don't know, this makes it feel like "no one can be better than Starswirls" again. (well something similar)
Not sure if you understood what I meant there. In a way I liked it, more because of the fact that Tempest underestimated her and I know she destroyed a rock, but I liked her to have a real chance when the next fight would happen.
edit: at first I was more dissapointed because it looked like she didn'T even had a chance and then you said something that sounded like she could have a chance in the future if she doesn'T underestimate her.
I only really needed it to be clear that Maud wouldn't be the clear winner everytime they fight.
I hate to think that she could have never beat her, that and I kind of have to think how not someone could have simply beaten Tempest during the movie (if it was a story) if her training means nothing.
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okay I think that is good enough for me.
I know you made a joke there but still sorry for the avatar...uhhmmm joke, but I can only take so many stupid comments or more sentences? like that, which mention the most obvious stuff and everything. However I really believe it doesn't has to be like that, but if it is like that in your story then I will learn to accept that.
I really like both characters at least as much as I like Trixie but I didn't liked the fact that Tempest could do what she wants and never win.
To be honest I'm just reacting on the opinion on someone else, you haven'T really told me yet how you view it or if Tempest would win with the right surroundings and everything. Maud is awesome yes, but today I have decited for me that even with mlp it is not often the best if characters are simply op.
Then again Tempest is disabled, which is why I say that it would be enough for me if you could somehow mention it in the story. I mean in a way that makes it clear that she achived that much for being only a unicorn since she couldn'T use her magic and probably was only training her muscles. Now that I have said everything I wanted I can also accept that Maud would maybe overwhelme her even if she was prepared, I mean she only needs one or three precise hits since her muscles are probably a max eath pony strenght.
You could say I convinced myself a bit right now.
I just hate those simple...well what looks to me like simple thoughts, no offense and got a bit upset about it. I think I mentioned the thing with the humans here right? Stuff like that where they follow some rules like they were proofed by a professor and aren't brave enough to try something else.
Now is enough and I simply wish you a good night.
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That'll be at a later time.
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I get what you meant. Honestly it was either appease the Maud fans or the Tempest fans. I could have made it end in a draw but that would have felt cliche. At least to me, it would have. I just made a cal and thought this was the best course of action. PLus I wanted Tempest to honestly lose the first time. She the kind of pony who would see as nothing as a serious threat until it hit her. Literally.
I'm just glad everyone liked it. I don't plan to use action a lot in this story. Just as a thing once in a while. Maybe twice at best. For now there is more drama and character development for all!
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I guess you couldn'T just win in this situation and me always being for the main char in a way isn't helping
Well I guess recently I got often enough what I wanted so that I shouldn't be to dissapointed.
It is difficult for me to decite if I only like or dislike it sometimes, but that is something that sounds pretty good itself.
I could talk about that pony magic and everything that sometimes feels like a cheatdevice to me, but the only thing that was or is important to me, is to know that she would have a chance in future fights if it should happen again or not.
I mean it sounded like you just wanted to get Tempest down from her high horse (if that saying works like that in english) and show her that she isn't almighty, but at the same time could have a chance when she wouldn'T think so highly of herself. (something like that).
I kind of want Grubber to make a short appearance in the story, maybe embrass her. Not sure if I want dating jokes or whatever there.
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Well, Grubber might be a thing. I'm 90% sure.
You got the "high horse" saying right. And you got my reasoning for the fight in it perfectly. Yes, that's what I was trying to do, and yes I do want to give Tempest a chance to duel Maud or someone later and be a bit wiser for it. Let's be honest here, (Heh look at me I'm Applejack! HONEST HONEST HONEST!!!") LOL>.< I make myself laugh sometimes. Now, that was I saying? Oh, right! Let's be honest here, the mane 6 completely bitched out. The three Princesses were useless, (though I think that was more story than anything but they don't have a lot going for them) And I remember seeing the Wonderbolts in chains too. So, it's not like Tempest was met with a match, to begin with. But heck, it is what it is that's why were write and read fanfiction.
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oh just to be sure, I just noticed it but in chase you thought i had a problem with Tempest loosing, then no that wasn't the main problem. I also doesn't needed a draw, I only wanted that it was made clear (I think you kind of did that), that she had a fair chance on winning.
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That is still somehow a poin in her book and probably should make the princesses and the main six even more embrassed about the whole thing. However I just like the princesses and main six down from their "high horses" once in a while. Do you know the stories in which they are so unfailable and perfect that it starts to get really uhhhmm...annoying?
Well okay then I'm curious for a future chapter, I can totally image Grubber getting flustered when Tempest mother should mention a relationship and instead of denying, he would act shy and make it worse without wanting to actually hint at anything.