Interesting stuff. Friendshipping with benefits, kinda.
It's funny. 90% of the story ideas I come up with are clop and/or grimlight. Everyone who's into that kinda stuff I tell the concepts to thinks they are great. Unfortunately I have NO interest in actually writing those genres.
1031304 I blame 502 fic. I know I fixed that description once. JFSGJHFJLDFHJL
I'm not 100% what grimlight is, but if you have clop ideas (especially if they are quick/short or w/e) pm me. I am practicing story flow with these, the content itself isn't really the point and I could always use ideas.
Sorry for playing editor, but: Dash lay on her back, her tail wrapped under her butt, clamped firmly in her mouth, and pulled taunt as she strained her necks. I'm guessing you mean 'taut' and 'neck' here. Also, Her body flushed with heat as she finally came down form her high I think you need 'from' and not 'form' here.
An otherwise entertaining and well-written oneshot, though.
D'awww! These are great! Your utilization of grooming lends a certain warmth to the scene, helping it feel more like a love scene rather than just sex. You also did a rather fantastic job with the characterization of both ponies, making the story much more immersive. Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!
1043885 I've played that scenario over and over in my head. Dash figures it out, but just teases them with it, shaking her tail at them, stretching, until they get all flustered. Then she's like "duh, you're both hot, let's do this!"
Interesting stuff. Friendshipping with benefits, kinda.
It's funny. 90% of the story ideas I come up with are clop and/or grimlight. Everyone who's into that kinda stuff I tell the concepts to thinks they are great. Unfortunately I have NO interest in actually writing those genres.
1031304
I blame 502 fic.
I know I fixed that description once. JFSGJHFJLDFHJL
I'm not 100% what grimlight is, but if you have clop ideas (especially if they are quick/short or w/e) pm me. I am practicing story flow with these, the content itself isn't really the point and I could always use ideas.
:O Is this for EQAD speedclop comp? 'cause you totally gonna win.
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it is
but there aren't really "winners"
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Even so, you totally won in my book. Hands down.
Sorry for playing editor, but:
Dash lay on her back, her tail wrapped under her butt, clamped firmly in her mouth, and pulled taunt as she strained her necks. I'm guessing you mean 'taut' and 'neck' here.
Also, Her body flushed with heat as she finally came down form her high I think you need 'from' and not 'form' here.
An otherwise entertaining and well-written oneshot, though.
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My first question is, did you read the description? Did you really read it?
My second, was that really all you found? I found at least twenty.
Awesome work kits, not every day I find a one-shot clop, especially a speedclop, that makes me go 'aww' at the end
1033992 oops. Read this around 3 am, only got about half of everything I got this time...
D'awww! These are great! Your utilization of grooming lends a certain warmth to the scene, helping it feel more like a love scene rather than just sex. You also did a rather fantastic job with the characterization of both ponies, making the story much more immersive.
Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!
This is one of the best clop fics I've read so far :O I don't usually get drawn in by them but you pulled it off. Didn't feel like just smut
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I've played that scenario over and over in my head. Dash figures it out, but just teases them with it, shaking her tail at them, stretching, until they get all flustered. Then she's like "duh, you're both hot, let's do this!"
So wait... did RD feign an injury to lure Fluttershy into her love nest?
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nope. 69 minutes. didn't get there, but she did pull a muscle.