Friday and Saturday were two of Sunset’s best since coming to the human world. It didn't even bother her that her classmates pulled her away from her studies after lunch both days. Two mornings spent practicing Latin with Setsuna and Mana had significantly boosted her confidence in the language, though it would still be a few months before she could discard her Japanese-Latin dictionary. She'd even managed to work in a few hours each day to practice with her new magic, in which (Mana had informed her) she was progressing at an outrageously rapid rate.
Both Setsuna and Mana were busy Sunday, so Sunset dedicated that morning to mastering one particularly useful spell that improved general fitness. Strength, agility, stamina, hardiness, all would be improved at least three-fold, more depending on how much magic the mage poured into it. Sunset had cast it successfully on Saturday, but the spell was designed to last continually with little concentration. Today, Sunset planned to test her ability to hold it long-term.
Guess I'm not going to the gym today, Sunset thought, jogging through Library Island and delighting in the ease with which she ran. As fun as it would be to see the club's reactions as I clobbered them one by one, I don't want to cheat there. They wouldn't be happy about that. Sunset frowned. Wait, no. What do I care? I'm only there so I can learn to fight and stay in shape. I don't really care what they think of me… do I? Sunset stopped, putting a hand to her chin as she thought it over, remembering Monday when the Club President had taught her the rules of kickboxing, Tuesday when a few of the older students had taught her a few moves and shown her how to work the speed bag, Friday when she'd fought her first match and been creamed easily, how her opponent had pulled her to her feet afterwards, both of them laughing all the while.
Do I… do I actually care about them?
“Ano, Nichibotsu-chan? Could you please move? You're blocking the bridge and standing on the trap plate.”
Sunset looked up from her musings, surprised to find that she'd taken a different route than normal. She stood now on a narrow bridge, a series of bladed pendulums swinging back and forth across it. A group of high-schoolers was waiting on one side, most of them looking impatient.
“Oh! Sorry.” Sunset quickly made her way across the bridge, pausing and weaving to avoid the lethal trap. She reached the end easily, rubbing the back of her neck sheepishly. “Sorry for activating the trap. Got lost in thought.”
The older student waded her off. “It's fine. It'll shut off in about 10 minutes. I'm surprised you didn't notice it, though.”
Sunset shrugged. “Eh, the swing pattern is easy to predict. I could have walked through this one in my sleep.” She gave the bridge one last appraising look before hurrying off towards the surface.
*****
“Eh?! Negi-sensei’s looking for a fiance?!”
Sunset rolled her eyes from where she was relaxing in the baths. 3-A had gone crazy from the latest rumor right as she'd gotten comfortable. “Ignore them, Honya,” she said to her flustered roommate. “You know our class always blows things out of proportion. Remember when they actually thought a game of dodgeball could determine what class the kid taught?”
“Aw, come on, Nichi-chan,” Haruna said, elbowing her in the side. “Don't ruin everyone's fun with your logic. Besides, this one comes from the Narutaki twins’ own ears. Negi-sensei came to Japan to find a ‘partner.’”
Sunset rolled her eyes, settling deeper into the water. “Ah, that. No need to worry, Honya. I know what he's talking about, and he's a bit too young to make that sort of decision. You have nothing to-”
“I want to go to Prince Negi’s ball!!!”
Sunset sighed, glaring over at where much of the class had assembled. “Then again, we may want to do something to stop that horde. Anyone know where the kid is right now?”
“Well, the new term starts tomorrow,” Yue pointed out. “He's probably in the Teachers’ Lounge or our classroom getting things ready.”
“Huh. That actually works out perfectly,” Sunset said. “I'm helping Konoka with something over there today anyway. I'll just take five more minutes here before-”
“We're coming for you, Prince Negi!!!”
Sunset sighed, standing up and heading for the changing room.
*****
Where was this spell when I went to Celestia’s School? Sunset approached the school at a clip that would have impressed most pegasi, her “sprint” feeling like no more than a light jog. She wasn't even breathing heavily by the time she reached the front lockers. She quickly made her way through the school, listening for any voices.
“Is this really necessary, Grandpa? It doesn't look like me at all.”
Bingo. Sunset crept towards a classroom that had the door cracked open, keeping low to avoid being seen through the windows.
“Now now, granddaughter.” Sunset rolled her eyes at the principal's voice. “It's important to make a good first impression.”
Sunset quickly reached the door and peeked inside. A couple of men in suits were setting up photography equipment under the direction of a third. An old, hunched-over man with a long, thin beard fused over a beautiful girl in an elaborate kimono. Sunset had to do a double-take; between the kimono, the makeup, and the intricately styled hair, Konoka was barely recognizable. She squirmed in obvious discomfort, looking from the camera to a stack of papers on a nearby desk. Her eyes darted with some desperation to the doorway and widened in surprise and joy when they found Sunset's.
“We're just about ready, sir,” one of the suits said, adjusting the camera and training it on a white sheet. “Another minute at the most.”
“Grandpa, can I go get some water?” Konoka suddenly asked. “My throat’s getting dry.”
“Oho, is that so?” the principal asked, stroking his beard. “This wouldn't just be an attempt to run off again, would it? We've had to postpone this shoot three times already.”
“Aw, come on, Grandpa,” Konoka whined. “It's not like that. You can even send one of these guys with me to make sure.”
Sunset grinned, cracking her knuckles and standing up between the door and the window, just out of sight. She listened as two sets of footsteps approached, one soft and the other not. The door opened wide and Konoka sprinted out.
“Hey!” The suit following her reached out to stop her, only to get a facefull of fist as Sunset swung.
“Go, Konoka!” Sunset shouted, stepping into the doorway and putting up her fists. “Back to the dorms! I'll distract them!”
The principal sighed, shaking his head. “Nichibotsu-san. I shouldn't be surprised that she pulled you into this.” He pointed down at the unconscious suit. “You could have gone at least a little easy on him.”
Sunset stole a glance down the hall, seeing to her satisfaction that Konoka was indeed heading towards the front of the school. Hope she remembers to leave a few footprints before heading upstairs. “What can I say?” Sunset asked, returning her attention to the room. “Arranged marriages irk me, and I'd rather fight two faceless goons than three.”
“Hm, a fair point,” the principal said. “However, you've made one major tactical error.
“Realty?” Sunset tensed, readying herself for a blow from any direction. “And what error is that?”
“We're on the first floor.”
There was a beat of silence before both conscious suits turned and ran for the outside windows, throwing them open and leaping out. Within seconds, their cries of “Konoka-ojousama!” had faded into the distance.
“...well,” Sunset said, lowering her fists. “That didn't work.”
“Ohohohoho,” the principal laughed. “You're fifty years too early to test your wits against me, even considering where you come from.”
Sunset sighed, crossing her arms. “Fair enough. Hopefully Konoka can… Wait.” Her eyes widened. “You know where I'm from?!”
“Indeed. And from your reaction, so do you.” Sunset swore under her breath as the principal continued. “I was quite the Library Island Explorer myself, back in the day. A few of us stumbled through that mirror and spent a day on the other side. Tell me, how is Tenko-hime doing these days?”
Tenko? Sunset thought, a scowl maring her face. Does he mean Celestia? “She's fine,” she muttered. “Just as perfect as ever.”
The principal raised an eyebrow but didn't comment further. “Well, I have a favor to ask. If it's all the same to you, I'd rather the wider world not discover that we have a portal to another universe sitting beneath the school. Such things tend to attract all sorts of unwanted attention.”
Sunset snorted, a smirk spreading across her face. “I'm not exactly eager to tell everyone that I'm a magical unicorn from another dimension. I'd rather not end up in the nuthouse.”
“Hoho, I'd imagine not. But there is one more thing. As you probably realize, my family is very much involved in the magical world. While I don't really care one way or the other, Konoka’s parents have made it clear that they'd rather she not learn about magic. If you could keep the secret, I'd be grateful.”
“... Gramps, you do realize that she's currently rooming with a mage who was careless enough to let both me and Asuna find out about him, right? The same mage who inflicted a love poison onto half of the class? The same mage who regularly causes massive gusts of wind whenever he sneezes?”
The principal cocked an eyebrow. “Like I said, I don't care one way or the other.”
*****
It was obvious to Sunset when she reached the front entrance again that the suits has fallen for her bluff. Two sets of widely spaced footprints showed where a couple of men had run around the school and towards the road away towards the dorms. Sunset made her way to the other side of the building, wanting to make sure that the principal didn't see her, and pulled out her practice wand.
“Spiritus venti,” Sunset muttered, “dux mihi socius meus. Punctum me.”
A breeze kicked up around Sunset, one wisp of wind glowing blue and beginning to swirl in front of her. It shaped itself into an arrow which slowly spun in place. This was one of the few spells Sunset had managed to master in the last couple of days: Compass of Wind. It was the most basic scrying spell there was, easily blocked by magic, and only pointing in the cardinal direction in which her target was furthest from her. An arrow pointing north could mean that the target was straight north, or a fair distance east or west as well. It was all but useless as a real tracking spell, but for short range, it would work fine. “Konoka Konoe,” Sunset whispered to the arrow, picturing the girl in her mind. The arrow began to spin faster before coming to a sudden stop, standing on its end to point straight up.
“Huh,” Sunset muttered, dismissing the magic. “Didn’t know it could do ‘up.’ At least that means she’s pretty close by.” She looked up the face of the building, eyeing the narrow ledge outside of the second-story window above her. “Alright,” she said, crouching down and gathering magic into her legs. “Let’s see if this works.”
Sunset launched herself skyward, surprised to find that she reached, and passed, the window with ease. She almost cleared the top of the building when her ascent slowed to a stop and she began to fall. Crap! Find the ledge. Find the ledge! Sunset reached out, grabbing the second-story ledge as she passed it. The yank on her shoulder was jarring, but not painful, the spell doing its job and allowing her to maintain her grip. Sunset sighed in relief, pulling herself up and pressing against the window. Now, if I were Konoka, what room would I go to?
“ISN’T THAT OBVIOUSLY ASUNA-SAN!? DON’T TELL FORTUNES SO IRRESPONSIBLY!”
Sunset rolled her eyes, turning to face the window to her left. “Well that answers that question. Looks like the kid’s here too. Honestly, what is she predicting now?” Konoka had a surprisingly mischievous nature which her position as President of the Fortune Telling Club allowed her to indulge in often, much to the chagrin of her victims. Sunset leapt to the next window, peeking inside and smirking as she saw Negi chase Konoka around the classroom, his face flushed beet red. Yup, definitely up to her old hijinks. “Oy! Konoka! Don’t go picking on little kids.”
Konoka and Negi turned, their faces filling with shock as they saw Sunset hanging out outside the window. “N-Nichi-chan?” Konoka stuttered, running over and opening the window. “How did you get out there?”
Sunset shrugged, hopping inside and sitting on the windowsill. “Please. I’ve climbed smoother surfaces in Library Island.” With a full climbing harness. “More importantly, the old man’s goons have fallen for our trick and are running for the dorms.”
Konoka sighed in relief. “Thank goodness. I guess I’ll just stay here until it’s too late for the shoot, then.”
“That might not be a good idea,” Sunset warned, glancing at Negi. “We’ve got a mob of rabid schoolgirls chasing this one because he’s apparently a prince getting ready to host a ball to search for a fiance.”
“Eh?!” Konoka’s eyes shined as she grasped Negi’s hands. “Negi-kun! You’re a prince? Really?”
“I’M NOT A PRINCE!!!”
“Nichi-chan! Not you too!” Sunset, Konoka, and Negi looked over to see an exasperated Asuna standing in the classroom doorway. “Like I’ve been saying to everyone, it’s a complete misunderstanding. Negi isn’t a prince, and he’s NOT looking for a partner of any sort!”
Sunset chuckled as Konoka rubbed the back of her head sheepishly. “We know, Asuna. Just having a bit of fun with the kid. But we’d better get out of here quickly before…” She trailed off, her attention grabbed by the sound of multiple pounding footsteps. “Crap!” She lunged forwards, grabbing Negi by the back of his shirt. “Sorry about this, kid! It’s for your own good!”
“W-w-wait! Nichibosu-saaAAAA!!!”
Sunset turned, throwing him out the window and slamming it shut. She turned and leaned back against it just as a mob of girls slammed Asuna aside, pulling the door wide open and spilling into the room.
“Negi-sensei!”
“Prince Negi!”
“Please make me your partner!”
“EVERYBODY, QUIET!!!”
The room quieted at Sunset’s shout, the girls’ excitement turning to nervousness as they saw both the absence of a child teacher and the presence of a certain silver-tongued classmate. “N-Nichi-chan. Hi,” Sakurako greated nervously. “Ano, have you seen Negi-sensei anywhere?”
“Yeah,” Sunset said, crossing her arms and glaring at her. “I saw him. Running away like he had a pack of wolves on his tail.” She shook her head. “No, sorry, that’s unfair to wolves. At least they have a good reason for their hunt.”
“Yeah yeah, we get it.” Kazumi waved her off, a confident grin on her face. “You play the big bad bully, but it’s really all just an act. We’ve been through this before, Nichi-chan. You don’t have to-”
“Well then it’s a good thing it’s not an act this time.” Kazumi’s grin faded as Sunset turned her glare from student to student. “Fine, I’ll admit that what I said on Wednesday was mostly just to get you all to leave me alone, but that doesn’t mean I’m not going to call you out on your group idiocy.”
“Nichibotsu!” Asuna stepped in front of Sunset, commanding her attention. “Don’t you think that’s going a little too far?”
“Is it?” Sunset countered. “I’m just saying what you and the more level-headed members of our class don’t have the guts to. How many times have you had to save the kid from being torn to shreds by this pack of delinquents? A starving hyena has more restraint than the lot of them!” She gestured to the girls who were standing in the doorway. “They took one word, a single word that could have meant practically anything, and turned it into this overblown fantasy of princes and balls. It'd be bad enough if they were to react like this over someone our age or older, but Negi’s just a freaking kid! ” Her glare turned back to the girls. “You're lucky you don't face Child Molestation charges on a regular basis! Honestly, how did you all even…”
She trailed off, finally noticing her classmates’ expressions. It wasn’t Fumika’s watery eyes that stalled her, nor was it Kazumi’s shock or Sakurako and Ako’s flinches at being the subjects of her gaze. She shrugged off the Class Rep and Ku’s disapproving scowls as well as Kaede’s grave stare. What gave her pause was Makie, her frown speaking volumes. Disappointment without condescension. Sorrow not for herself, but for Sunset. It was a look that said, “I know you’re better than this.”
It was the same look Celestia had given her for months before she’d fled.
“...forget it,” Sunset muttered. She turned and threw the window open, leaping through and ignoring the cries of shock from behind her. She landed with ease, taking off into a sprint and barely remembering to keep her speed down to impressive levels rather than superhuman. She raced for the dorms, fighting back tears all the while.
Why! Why in the world do you have a face like that? What could a ditz like you possibly know?!
I love how you are having Sunset act like the voice of reason in this chapter, I hope that she doesn't make a Pactio with Negi though and I do hope that Evangeline finds out that Sunset is a Unicorn, thought it would be funny to see how Evangeline would react to tasting Sunset's blood though.
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Well she is older than them. It makes sense that she would get irritated at their juvenile stupidity.
Pactio with Negi, huh? Cons: people will see it as cliche. Pros: awesome tool/weapon/power-up for Sunset. Realistic analysis of Sunset: quick path to greater power, he's just a kid so a kiss is nothing. Full analysis says... I guess you'll just have to see. Why don't you want her to?
Looking good so far, and i here remembering all the names, anyway, here waiting eagerly when evangeline makes her true appereance, and becomes sunsets teacher :D.
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Other then she would have link with Negi which she doesn't want one, after all she's studying magic through the books he lent her, this way she can study the Negima world's magic on her own without a link to Negi then, not to mention if a pactio was made between her and Negi who would be on the card, after all Sunset is a Bucking Unicorn after all, on a scale of 1 to 100 I'd put her up there in the mid 80's mark of power.
Love it. A beautiful melding of the two fandoms and just pure fun.
Every girl in that class got pactios in one media or another, and early Sunset would hardly turn down any path to power. Can't wait to see it.
So the Headmaster knows about Equestria, eh? That could make things easier ... or so much worse.
I wonder if Eva has been to pony-land before?
And Makie is getting through Sunset's armor .. even if Sunny was completely in the right (if being harsh) this time ...
I honestly don't understand why this story isn't more popular than it is. It's a good crossover story, with good characterization and pacing. It manages to fit Sunset into the Mahora atmosphere nicely. It really is just a good story.
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*shrugs* Could be a lack of Negima fans. Could be that I don't have a huge following base. I don't think I'll get too many more readers unless someone well-followed gives it some exposure.
Maybe I should try submitting it to EQD?
Just found this. Negima is one of my favorite manga, and this is well written. Keep it up homie
Loving this! Also how about you diverge from the canon a bit more and have Sunset form Pactios with other characters? And is she going to learn Eva's dark magic spell? Cause that is just an epic image in my mind.
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Thanks! Let me know if there's anything I can do to improve.
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Very good questions. You'll just have to wait and see!
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As I said many times before - my English completly self-learned. So I often struggle with expressing what exactly I want to say vs my knowledge of English.
But moving on.
Fromy my point of view chapter seven exist solely for the sake of softing the blow of chapter six. And it's do so by leaning on set of implausible circumstances. Not only someone recorded this whole episode, but at the angle that allow everyone to see Sunset script. And the fact that Sunset even need this script also kinda... Not exactly believable.
I'm talking about chapter seven. And in my case I would let's them deal with a fact that Sunset are Not Nice. That even if she mellowed a bit she still more or less a bitch and if you want any sorts of relationship with her then you need to respect her personal space and borders and don't try to force yourself on her.
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Implausible circumstances? Stories are BUILT upon implausible circumstances! If someone wrote a story about things happening exactly the way everyone would expect, no-one would read it. It wouldn't be interesting. If would be so hum-drum and aveerage that people would get more entertainment out of people-watching. What were the odds that Cranky and Matilda would end up in the same town, both still unmarried? What were the odds of Cadence looking up at just the right moment to see Spike and the Crystal Heart falling? What were the odds of a monster attack occurring the day of Matilda and Cranky's wedding when they also just so happened to have had a misprint on the invitations? What were the odds that that Death Eater would still be holding Gryffindore's sword in plain sight when they arrived in Malfoy Manor? What were the odds of Luke landing in just the right place on Degobah? What were the odds of him being the one to find/purchase R2 and C3PO? What were the odds of Boramir having a heal-face turn quickly enough to fight for Merry and Pippin? What were the odds that he'd be able to keep fighting with half a dozen arrows lodged in his chest? The implausible is what makes the story.
As for everyone's realization of Sunset being "not nice," they STILL came to that conclusion. They decided to back off. Most of them are still either wary of her or outright hate her. And trust me, the fact that the entire class didn't immediately forgive her is astounding once you get to know the characters. Chapter 8 makes it perfectly clear that Sunset still isn't all sunshine and rainbows, and further chapters will continue to show a rift between her and much of the class. Certain elements of stories have to be taken as part of the larger whole, not as stand-alone moments. If we had to take a single chapter out of Harry Potter and judge it solely based on its own merit without considering anything we anticipated happening in the future, we could find many examples of chapters that failed to satisfy.
If you want to judge writing style and general ability, you generally don't have to look beyond chapter 1. But if you want to judge storytelling, you have to look at the whole. That means not judging a chapter right at the end, but waiting to see what comes after to see if it's setting something up. (I enjoy Season 3 of MLP a lot more in retrospect because I can see how they're setting up several elements for Season 4.)
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Can't wait and I hope to see Sunset using a fire magic to power herself up, just like Negi uses lightning and Eva uses ice. And please let there be those weird awkward moments between Sunset and other characters, the same Negi finds himself in. I know you said you weren't going to pair Sunset up with anyone but it would be interesting and funny, like say she gets drunk like the others during the class trip and hits on someone.
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If a your main hero old neighbor turn to be a pirate - fine. If he also a ninja, mutant, zombie and cyborg - it's definitely not fine.
And scene on class summit pretty much a cyborg zombie ninja pirate. Sunset script simply made no sense. Unless you say that it an important plot point and you plan to use it later it's pretty much looks lika a convent tool to show girls that Sunset "not as bad as they think".
Without a conviently filmed script they reaction on Sunset would be a far less favorable and not just " they decided to give her some space"
Okay, I get it. You want to go to "good stuff" as fast as possible and don't really want to build Sunset character in believable way or put any real hardships in her redemption and relationship with class 3-A. So I'm not going to bother you anymore.
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You're kidding, right? I rewrote the entirety of arc 2 from the ground up because that's what I was doing the first time. And did you even read chapter 8? You want to tell me that Sunset doesn't have a ton of growth ahead of her? You seem to expect her to be 150% an evil and manipulative witch like she was in EQG 1, but news flash! She has something in this story that she didn't have then: friends. And she's had them for 6 months. Are you telling me that that isn't enough to shift her from "evil and manipulative and cruel all the time for teh evulz" to "bad attitude and calculatingly cruel when it serves her purposes?"
And on the script being pointless, recall that her classmates were only supposed to think that it was notes. It tied together the "condescending superior" look and reinforced to them that, rather than spur of the moment, this was something she calculated specifically to hurt them. On her side, why not have a script? Why not have a prepared speach for every scenario? Why not make sure there will be no hesitation or wavering on her part? The assuredness and smooth transition from student to student adds to the air of superiority and leaves them with no chance to retaliate unless she wants them to, and in the way she wants them to. It's manipulation at its finest to be able to predict reactions and steer the conversation from the beginning. THAT'S why she had a script.
As for the "pirate ninja zombie" thing, this class has an alien from the future, a 700 year old evil vampire, a half-demon mercenary, a robot, a ninja, a ghost, and many, many other strange and exceptional individuals. And before you accuse me of anything, that's all canon of Mahou Sensei Negima. If you don't like a cast that diverse/OP, then Negima and works based on it aren't for you.
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Do you not understand literally anything about the social sciences? By the context of her arrival, as well as the varying factors available to the character, interacting with her... that kind of thing changes circumstance!
It was said that our experiences shape us, and this has always been a clear and apparent truth. Did you expect completely different experiences to produce the exact same individual? That's just... willfully ignorant.
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This has been an experience, and I look forward to the third arc!
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My problem with your Sunset goes way back to chapter one. And in general could be summed in "Too fast, too easy". When Susnted stunt happens I was ready to applaud you. Finally some real problem. Buuut. Chapter seven, from my point of view, return story back in "too fast, too easy".
Arc two have more conflict that arc one? Yes, definitely. But in general there still the same problem - "let's integrate Sunset into Negi class as fast as possible". At least it how I see it.
So. I really can't believe in your Sunset and you definitely not going to change anything. So what the point of arguing further?
Well, that and I need to apologize. When I write my post I been in extremely bad mood. So again, I apologize.
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Though I appreciate your defence of my portrayal of Sunset, I'd appreciate if people kept ad hominem out of the comment section. I'm all for productive debate and discourse, but attacks on each other's character only leads to strife. Arigatou gosaimasu.
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In respect to your wishes, I've erased the attack. Thank you for making your wishes clear.
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I would like to point out that a swift acceptance of characters that it probably shouldn't be for is a staple of Mahou Sensei Negima. If anything, Show is drawing it out longer than normal, by splitting the class opinion into more realistic factions, while still keeping with the general spirit of the original source material. Allinall, fairly admirable.
Of course, if your looking for more consequences to Sunset lashing out like she did, I imagine there is going to be more of that in Arc Three. By the faction that still doesn't forgive her, and being bothered by the one that does, of course.
So if Negi went through the Mirror Portal, would he be a Unicorn due to his status as a Magus or an Alicorn due to his Royal Heritage?
For some reason I see Evangeline as a Bat-Winged Alicorn and it makes me laugh.
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Definitely a unicorn. As Blueblood demonstrates, royalty does not necessarily equate to alicornhood. Asuna might be, though.
And yes, Evangeline would definitely be a bat-winged pseudo-alicorn. A terrifying bat-winged pseudo-alicorn... filly.
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And she would find herself picked up and snuggled by Luna so quickly...
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...yes. Luna's first reaction to a being filled with magic as dark as Nightmare Moon's or Sombra's... would be to snuggle her. Right.
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I know. Even though Eva is adorable, Luna would probably go on the offensive.
Still an amusing image, though...
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True enough. I almost want to commission someone to draw it.
“Realty?” Sunset tensed
1. Doubt that Sunset is into Realty. Really though.
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Even the MMA part? Because I'm sure it's not well known outside their circles.
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Hm. Probably not that part.
For folks as visually oriented as I am, I find having this open in another tab very helpful for keeping all the students straight.
... I mean, she's not wrong. Just because she's defying the genre conventions of the world by trying to apply actual reason and logic doesn't mean she deserves Celestia-grade looks of disappointment.
On the other hand, the delivery could certainly use some work.
In any case, you certainly have my interest. Seeing Sunset bounce off this gaggle of variably supernatural knuckleheads has proven quite amusing thus far. I look forward to more.
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Thanks. I should have the next arc finished up a couple of weeks.
Mother bucking finals.
When re-reading this chapter It’s Just kinda Dawn to me.
I kind of thought that Celestia’s Japanese name Tenko-home It’s kind of plain (no offense)
so if you don’t mind why don’t you change it to Amaterasu from there Amaterasu-ōmikami
The sun goddess from the old Japanese religion Shinto.
She even haves a young sibling (Gender unknown) named Tsukuyomi who is the god of the moon.
I think that that’s more suit for Celestia’s Japanese name Don’t you think ?
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I'm rather familiar with Amarerasu and Tsukuyomi, but not only does Tia's personality not match to the Shinto sun goddess's, Celestia herself wouldn't want to take on the name of a local deity. That doesn't seem to fit with her character, especially since, for all she knows, Amaterasu might be real and take offence. Celestia is also too humble to rake on such a prestigious name, as evidenced by her title of Princess rather than Queen (hence "-hime"). Finally, Celestia wouldn't know anything about Amaterasu unless she was told, so it would be up to someone she encountered to name her that. I don't see the Principal, or whoever first came across the mirror and stumbled through, calling Celestia by the name of one of their gods, once again, for fear of offending them.
Sunset was right to get angry at them Negi is just a kid after all.
This chapter's ending reminds me of the fanfic 'Sleeping With the Girls' in which the main character has to deal with ALL the consequences of being in universes set around themes like RomCom or Shounen. Sunset's already feeling the burn of being in a Harem Comedy it seems, but I do believe she was justified even though Negi would just wave the class' shenanigans off like usual.
And all in thinking is the gramps in charge is like as long as she don't kill or blow my school up let her learn her lessons and maby smack some sense into them
Even for someone their age, it would still be a bit messed up, so yeah, for a freaking 10 years old !
how Sunset isn't in the right ? It's funny for a manga, but her reaction made sense.
Being harsh is only a bit wrong for something truly innocent and sane, such a reaction for this is acually really lenient.
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seriously , can you explain how is the thing at the end with the look Makie gave to Sunset not bullshit ? they (including Makie, so she had no high ground) are a bunch of crazy shotacon, all Sunset did was calling them out for it.
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"You can be right, but wrong at the top of your voice."
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yeah no, she was harsh because they were acting like creeps.
And a shotacon have no right to give the stare in such a situation.
why you didn't answered ?
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Answer what?
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when i disapproved what you said about Sunset (in your opinion) exaggerating.
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Well, first, you misunderstand my point; what she said was correct, but her tone was harsh and her word choice even moreso.
Second, I've learned not to argue every point. If I explain my reasoning and someone still disagrees, I need to let it go as a difference in opinion before it turns into a long, drawn-out debate. (See previous examples [fire safety in Canterlot, Sunset's humility, etc.] where I failed to restrain myself.)
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can you explain how she was too harsh ? it's not like those antics just started.
Also, my problem is than it was one of the creeps who was giving her the stare.
Do you imagine Mineta give the stare ? Well for me here it's that.
The girls were quite close to Mineta level of disgusting, would it be harsh to talk like that to mineta for being a creep ? If not, than here it isn't either, especially since they are the older persons.
they should be the only ones feeling uneasy and wanting to apologise.
How is it too harsh ? It would had been too harsh if she had beat them up, here, there is a reasonable person who don't want creepy actions done by her classmates and call them out for being creeps.
Again, he's only 10 ! at this age, 14 and 15 years old are giants for us, it is really messed up, it was mostly harsh because she needed to remind them of the age difference, and they are too dumb for needing something less to have it forced into their thicc skulls.