It was a cold winter's day in Canterlot, the snow was falling and ponies huddled close to their partners for warmth. Octavia however, was alone. Exhausted from having to perform three days in a row she was looking forward to the break that Hearth's Warming Eve would bring, even if she had to spend it alone. She had only one performance left before she could take a long needed break.
On her way home from the stage she noticed that it was empty of an audience, confused and angry she heard a strange song coming from nearby. She followed the music, wanting to confront the pony that was stealing her show. What she found was no pony, but a creature she had never seen around before.
Rated Teen for alcohol use in story
Chapters (1)
You used to call me on my brick phone, late night when you need cheap job~
Soviet Union! Yugoslavia! Bricka Bricka!
AAIQU
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Stay Cheeki Breeki my comrade!
Dosvedanya and thanks!
There wasn't enough cheeki for your breeki
Pleasant reading, thanks.
I didnt get this one: 'inogda ya plachu sebe spat' What is the meaning? All other russian phrases were written alright.
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It roughly means 'sometimes I cry myself to sleep'.
I'm sorry if it's not correct, my Russian is a bit rusty as I haven't been in Europe for quite a long time. :twilight blush:
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Sorry, I'll try better if I remake this into a more mature story.
Much, MUCH more cheeki breeki will be there.
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I'm afraid it's not correct. Phrase like 'ya plachu poka ne usnu' will be more close to it.
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Thanks! like i said, I'm a bit rusty
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Honestly you got some real story potential there mate. I'd try avoiding butchering the words to portray intoxicated speech, it breaks the flow. I'd love to see their everyday life and struggles.
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You are welcome!
I'm sorry for misunderstanding, the 'inogda' was correct as 'sometimes', you might wanna keep it.
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So it would be something like 'inogda ya plachu poka ne usnu'? I forget how the structure goes sometimes.
Btw, you be been a big help. Thanks
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Alright, I'll keep that in mind. It was my first time writing anything with intoxication and I might make a continuation of their story.
Your advice is appreciated and I'll take It to heart for any of the next fics I write
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Yes, now it has full meaning of what you intended to say.
I'm glad to!
C H E E K I B R E E K I
CHEEKI BREEKI
That romance happened way too quickly. I still liked the idea, but just saying: The romance happened probably 15x quicker than it should minimum. Work your way up to it. The sleeping in same bed is fine, but the kiss and "I love you"s came out of nowhere and tbh it just felt boring and out of place.
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Like I said, first time writing a romance.
I'm working on a story that goes more into their relationship, that's coming out soon.
I'll try to keep what you said in mind for any of my future romance fics
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I really like the premise. I look forward to reading it :)
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this was adorable. More cheeki breeki in the works excites me.
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It's a process, but I'll get it done eventually :^)
I fucking love this
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Thanks, it was a lot of fun to write. I'm thinking of making a sequel or another story along the same lines
i love it
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Thanks, good to know my older stories still satisfy. I might make a re-write of this sometime in the future. Maybe a Valentine's Day special
That was VERY fun man.
Especially your "Nastoyashiy RUZZKIY yazyk"
Thank you and Stay Cheeki Breeki!
Really? You are going to get pissed off over some pony playing music that just so happened to bring the attention towards him and not YOU.
Wow, you are shitty.