Two friends, named Steven and Trent, end up in Equestria as a RWBY OC and Agent Washington from Red vs Blue. Now they're getting used to their new lives and dealing with monsters.
8068336 OI! That be a self set prophecy that be. Don't le a few things in life get you down. This story is good yes and it will remain like that ONLY if you want it to be. So write as you see fit for the story and do not be afraid to ask for help when stuck. Got It
8067616 "And Nixon coming, We're finally on our own. This summer i hear the drumming, four dead in Ohio." this just popped into my head when i saw Nix.
I like the story so far, but I don't really like that our two humans talk so weirdly, I mean, their saying something then change to an different topic suddenly and nobody seems to care, and they banter and talk in combat, being attacked, and when, at end of chapter, in middle of a group of people and they just seem not to care there are others around them
Don't forget you have me as a prereader and advisor
8066568 Heh sorry buddy
8066568 I was explaining why the chapter(s) may be less than adequate.
8066634 Ah
Laughing through the entire chapter.
Nicely done.
8066731 Seriously?
Nix?
8066732
It's a compliment, I meant no offense.
8068206 No, I'm just surprised when people actually like my work
8068229 Don't be its good.
8068319 For now. But I doubt you'll still think that in the future
8068336
OI!
That be a self set prophecy that be.
Don't le a few things in life get you down.
This story is good yes and it will remain like that ONLY if you want it to be.
So write as you see fit for the story and do not be afraid to ask for help when stuck.
Got It
Dude, stop self doubting this story is good.
8067616
"And Nixon coming, We're finally on our own. This summer i hear the drumming, four dead in Ohio."
this just popped into my head when i saw Nix.
8070169
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8067616 I think you mean Nyx
8070526
The chapter is solid, and enjoyable in the banter between the main characters.
It could benefit from specifying who is talking in certain dialogue lines, but it is a minor flaw.
I'll keep on reading.
I can't wait for Pinkie to get Freckles....
At least the Q&A are out of the way....... at the results of threats and a fast mare's leg being shot.....
You sir have done good.
I like the story so far, but I don't really like that our two humans talk so weirdly, I mean, their saying something then change to an different topic suddenly and nobody seems to care, and they banter and talk in combat, being attacked, and when, at end of chapter, in middle of a group of people and they just seem not to care there are others around them
But besides that, pretty good
10007278
Banter and talk in combat? There's only one combat scene in this story so far.