First it was the Overmind. Second was the Queen of Blades before she ascended to godhood. Third was the Cerebarate before his "death." And Now its falls on me. My name is Dusk Shine, and this is how I became the Guardian of the Swarm
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To late in the morning, I'll read later but this has promise from just the description.
Edit: read, liked and faved and hoping for more soon.
Also, have a Hydralisk eat Rainbow. I'd also say Rarity but she's rotten to the core
Did you write Remnant of the Swarm on fanfict. https://m.fanfiction.net/s/11759010/1/Remnant-of-the-Swarm
I'm actually the original author.
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Bad SeventhBrony, bad! *waves a rolled up newspaper around*
You forgot Broodmother Zagara, the official swarm leader as of the end of Starcraft 2.
7945662 I explained already about what happened to Zagara. Reread the first prologue again.
7945679 I meant in the description.
7945697 Exactly. In my Fic Zagara is dead and the Ceres took her place.
7945701 Then it should say that Zagara was #3, The Cerebrate was #4, and Dusk Shine is #5. If all this happened before the story even started it doesn't really count as spoilers.
7945706 Sorry my bad. What I meant to say was that Zagara in my fic was killed BEFORE Ceres was found and reintegrated into the Swarm.
7945719 So the story is built off of a Starcraft AU where Zagara died early. You might want to make that clear up front so other lore nerds don't get on your case about it.
7945741 That's why I usually have a Q&A at the end of every chapter. To answer questions that readers might have about a particular chapter. I'll tell everyone in my next chapter, thanks for the heads up. :)
7945744 You should still adjust your description a bit. Right now it looks like you're misinformed on Starcraft lore instead of making an intentional departure from it.
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hmmm, well good story, but rainbow seems a little too angry, and rarity seems more......selfish so to speak.
but also you SERIOUSLY need an editor/proofreader
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For rainbow Dash and Rarity I try to stick to their canon counterparts, keep in mind they just heard a rumor about Dusk supposedly using their fame for his own selfish gain. In the canon, Rainbow Dash is usually hot-headed, cocky and always dives into every situation head first without thought and is loyal to a fault to her friends, someone like that will no doubt be angry at Dusk and what he is supposedly doing.
Rarity, on the other hand, has shown numerous times in the canon to be up to date with the current “fad” of Canterlot and fashion and tends to believe/follow the latest hot topics, so her behavior towards Dusk stems from what she heard about him through the Canterlot rumor mill.
As for editing and proofreading, I agree, I usually edit and proofread each chapter before releasing them but sometimes I miss something only to realize my mistake days after. Also, this chapter was released when uploading stories to this websites were an editing nightmare. I don’t know if you know, but you can’t directly upload finished stories onto this site from other writing platforms (aka, Microsoft Word), instead, you have to copy and paste the entire story onto the upload page on this site and go through it and redo many fonts/edits and separate the entire story into seperate paragraphs.
This is now no longer the case but before it was a major pain to do so every chapter I released.
So I hope these answer your questions.