A closet brony finds that Lyra Heartstrings is real, though she is a filly, and decides to take her under his care. As time passes, the two go on to share a strong friendship, but due to Lyra's accelerated aging, might become even more...
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This story needs a chapter where Lyra uses her Magic on this two selfish bastards, Like levitation and smacking them against a wall or something.
I'd tone down the first chapter a bit - no point in getting his life story out of the way that quickly. Also, you should take greater care in making sure your tenses all align. Keep it present tense or past tense, not both. Outside of those two things, your grammar is pretty good and I'm interested in seeing where the story goes.
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OR throwing them out a window.
...or throwing them off the roof.
......or throwing them off a plane with no parachute.
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throwing them off the planet and into the sun!
I wonder if Ed is like Lady Tremaine's great great grand son or something. I wouldn't be surprised.
Do the chores yourself you fat lazy prick!!!!! 😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡
I'm enjoying this story so far. I sure hope something happens to both fatso and his bully son!!!
No way he got that done in under four hours
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You'd be surprised how fast one can do household chores with years of experience doing it.