And thus, my writing gets progressively worse as I remembered I'm terrible at smut, and I forgot where I left off last time. Oh man, I hope this makes sense. That pegasus dude is a BG pony by the way, I think, I forget. He's in Hurricane Fluttershy.
Well, sor-ry. I actually think you did a great job in keeping with the idea. I was thinking, well, it didn't really seem to be rape, it was more like she was just rubbing him inappropriately. It seemed like there could have been more she could have done to him, such as actually having him inside her, and then when he came he would tell her something like he felt really good and she figured it meant he would cum and then get off him and slurp it and all that. But, hey, you're the author.
And thus, my writing gets progressively worse as I remembered I'm terrible at smut, and I forgot where I left off last time. Oh man, I hope this makes sense.
That pegasus dude is a BG pony by the way, I think, I forget. He's in Hurricane Fluttershy.
I think my problem is I keep thinking I'm writing more, but when I actually publish, it's smaller than what I wrote previously. :/
Non-author first.
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What did I just read?
That was good rape scene and all, but... Err...
I'll leave you with
APPLESAUCE
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That doesn't help nor hinder me. Good job for being totally and utterly not helpful.
Well, sor-ry. I actually think you did a great job in keeping with the idea.
I was thinking, well, it didn't really seem to be rape, it was more like she was just rubbing him inappropriately.
It seemed like there could have been more she could have done to him, such as actually having him inside her, and then when he came he would tell her something like he felt really good and she figured it meant he would cum and then get off him and slurp it and all that.
But, hey, you're the author.
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Welp, I suppose I see what you mean. I guess I shouldn't write at 3 AM.
I shouldn't write at all. Never read my stories because you'll have to bleach your eyeballs. X3
I'm just good at supplying ideas.
Has she tried therapy?
Not too bad...
good chapter
875211 good job this is the first fic i've read were tootsie flute is an important character again good job
Oh god...
I approve.
I look forward to seeing future chapters