After 200 years, Scootaloo wakes up from magical stasis to find herself in the Equestrian Wasteland. She has to figure out a new place for herself when her friends and family are all long dead as a new threat looms on the horizon, one from her past.
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No Scoots, don't ollie into the great beyond!
Grind, 180 pike loose foot, then trick flip in.
7853395 Yay .
2nd Dashite, Rainbow DASH was the first...
7853540 Depends on how you look at it really. Scootaloo was the one who gave them the name Dashite and left the clouds to follow Rainbow, by that criteria she is the first.
This is a really good start. Also it never said for sure what happened to Rainbow Dash in the original. Up till now I was wiling to say Gilda got her in Canterlot, Dash's last message said she wasn't sure she could beat her. But I think this gives her a far better end, she saved her little sister. I really hoe you plan on writing more of this.
7853636 please please please tell me you are going to have twilight as part of the enclave!
Shit that's one hell of a way to get my attention.
7853673 Have you READ the original?
7853702 no not really i skimmed over it but could not find any mention of the enclave
7853704 ...well, go finish it! Not any mention of the Enclave my ass, that's the final story arc, among other things!
7853673 Sorry but I gotta follow canon for most characters, which means she is not.
7853640 Yeah, I'm glad people have liked it so far.
7853712 Fair point though i find the false alicorn trixe to be kind of close to frank so that's why i think that twilight would make a good member of the enclave
7853717 What about the institute i mean fallout equestria was written before fallout 4 so you could have a courser twilight
7853750 Well... maybe, but I actually don't have any plans for the Institute to be in my fics.
7853673
Twilight is explicitly part of the Goddess with no chances of being outside it. She could take over an alicorn and go play drones with them. After the relative midpoint of the original, Twilight is absolutely dead and moved on with her soul. Souls do not come back once they move on though, so short of saying I substitute your reality with my own ala Project Horizons, Twilight is entirely hard played out of the story 10 years and a month ago.
7853732 Twilight's PART of unity dude!
Scoots... do Equestria at large a huge favor and hop into the nearest Pitt smelting pot you irredeemable sack of stupid
Good job so far Ruin, keep it up
7853860 That seems a little extreme , yeah she did bad things but wouldn't this be a chance for her to atone for them?
Thanks though.
So many emotions at the same time..... i want to read more so badly!
7854184 Sorry that this is all that I have done at the moment, I'll be working on chapter 1.
I'll be honest the MOA is probably the worst place to have a cryogenic stasis pod as it would be one of the first places the enclave would search when looking for Rainbow Dash. And since the MOA was basically a front for subterfuge and counter intelligence against the Zebras RD would be smart enough to know this. She would definitely have put it somewhere more obscure or at least much better hidden especially if it was intended for her own use
7854203 Okay, I didn't think of that... I'll figure out some sort of explanation, maybe off the books storage facility or something that wouldn't come up on the Enclave's radar.
7853758 Now did she? We have no clue if Goddess was playing with necromancy to play with souls, and I am pretty sure that the only thing s Goddess was playing with were minds of ponies who got in her Unity.
So I don't see why Twilight is so hard gone like you describe it.
This is a good story so far, and with the likes, it will soon go on the very front page for a while.
However, ik it is a prologue, but the story should be slightly less fast-paced in the future so we could get some more development of characters and the steady pace of the plot.
7855605 Well this is just the prologue, I promise that the actual first arc will be a bit better paced.
7855658 When can we expect the next chapter?
7855970 I don't know honestly, I kinda do this all randomly.
So, without being rude, you could probably use an editor for this chapter. If I recall, Ennui is editing your later chapters, which is all well and good, but this chapter confuses where and were twice, contains dozens of elipsis, and overuses commas quite a bit.
I don't want to just comment to critique you, though, so I must say, this is looking like it will be a wild ride.
A very enjoyable chapter!
8257001 Thanks, I hope you like the rest, there's some, minor inconsistencies I need to fix but other than that.
Every single time you wrote “where” in this chapter you should have written “were”. Every. Single. Time.
8300408 I know I need to fix it
So far, it’s really interesting. The story flows well, the characters act in a believable way and the descriptions are enough to imagine what’s going on. (Though a few more details wouldn’t do them any harm )
The only thing that was bugging me while reading is your inconsistency in capitalization. For example Ponies/ponies or stallion/Stallion. Besides that, it was a nice opening. I’m looking forward to the next chapter!
8471637 Well, I'm glad you like it so far, and yeah I admit I probably need to do better about that.
My interest has been piqued! I've read many a FO:E Story (including the original), but never really found one that talked about Scoots...
Let's see where this goes....