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  • E The Price of Grace

    As Luna is set to return, Celestia's thoughts go back to the one mistake that sealed their fate.
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  • T Twilock Sparkle, Mare Detective

    Twilock Sparkle and her faithful partner Dr Spikeson solve a ghastly crime.
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  • 91w, 5d
    [no title]

    “So here you will meet your fate,” he said darkly.

    Clouds were breaking once more. Torrential rain pattered down on them, icy and without mercy, until they were soaked to the bone, but Celestia barely noticed. If anything, the stinging pain only added to her nauseous determination. Only the lights of the torches reflected in her eyes, her pupils hidden somewhere deep inside.

    “Acier,” she said and turned to him, as though taken by a sudden idea. “If I do this, will you forgive me?”

    “No,” he said without hesitation. “I won’t. And neither will you. Never. You will have a busy life, but an empty one nonetheless, and whenever you have enough time to pause and find yourself alone in a room much too large, you will think back to this day and curse yourself, hate yourself, wish physical pain onto yourself. You will wish to have died in her place instead, but you won’t be able to, because you truly are immortal now. You will wish for relief. You will wish for light at the end of the tunnel, only to find out you’re in no tunnel at all, but in a bottomless pit, again falling, falling towards a Canterlot Square that never comes. Your life will be a nightmare. Have you understood?”

    She stared at him for a couple of seconds, but there was no glistening in his eyes, no hint as to any insincerity. His look was grave and grim, and sad, too, she thought. Then she nodded slowly.

    “I have.” She looked down towards the Eternal Flame on her chest. “But that is what must happen, mustn’t it?”

    Acier said nothing, did nothing, just stared at her, but in his eyes, just before she turned away, bitter tears welled up that she preferred not to see.

    She took a deep breath. The time for words and sentimentality was over, a rush of blood to her head told her. Lightning tore through the night above her. She stepped into the Castle of the Two Thrones.

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  • 126w, 1d
    Price of Grace book & e-book

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  • 126w, 5d
    A call for quality stories

    Could someone recommend a particularly worthwhile story they've read here? I've been reading far too little pony fiction so far, and I'm curious as to what I may have missed out on.

    8 comments · 110 views
  • 127w, 23h
    The Nightmare

    Now that The Price of Grace is finished, I thought the story would leave me alone. Unfortunately, that is not the case. It's come back to bug me time and time again.

    So I've changed my mind and there's gonna be a continuation up soon - probably later today -, to be called The Nightmare. However, I've decided to mix things up and take a totally different route in all aspects. Chapters will be shorter, the style will be less elaborate, the tone will be rougher, everything will be a little grittier. So yes, I think it'll end up very differently from Price of Grace. I consider it an experiment.

    Let's see where it leads. If it fails, I can still write clopfiction and get super famous.


    Aaand in other news, a 1000-word story called "Dash eats meat" is insanely popular right now. Good job, fandom.

    4 comments · 98 views
  • 131w, 2d
    [no title]

    New chapter coming up reaaaally soon. This chapter includes the following new or improved features:

    - The sweat and blood of my brow

    - Repetitive strain injury (wrists and brain)

    - A violent crackdown on overused semicolons

    - 120% as much excitingness

    - (Even more!) general indifference

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Young Celestia has gone into hiding in the underbelly of Equestria. Through his vile scheming, Discord has driven her out of Canterlot Castle, engineering a civil war; Luna, her mind and soul poisoned by Discord, has turned into Nightmare Moon. Sooner or later, Celestia must face what she knows is her destiny: to confront and banish her own sister, before the advent of Eternal Night.

First Published
21st Jun 2012
Last Modified
19th Feb 2013
#1 · 127w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Oh yay!

I am so happy to see this up! :twilightsmile:


#2 · 127w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

...Fascinating!

#3 · 127w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Bleak. Dark. Gritty.

Once again, I have to congratulate you on your skill at description. The reader is immediately thrust into this new grey Equestria. And the despair in the air is palpable.

Also very much loving the portrayal of Celestia. The loss of innocence, doing what is necessary to survive, and the bitterness that comes with it, all executed very well. This is a protagonist I can sympathize with. The child has to grow up before its time to be able to face the world's cruelty.

And yet the story never fully descends into that dark abyss, silver rays of hope remain. Foxtrot's kindness and the return of Acier (I actually pumped my fist into the air when I read his name) set a nice contrast to the rest of the chapter. I'm hoping to read more of the latter - his interaction with Celestia especially. I have a soft spot for gruff, old soldier characters.

So far this reads very nicely. The much shorter chapter-length doesn't seem to be a problem at all. Though, then again, this is merely the introduction. The style doesn't seem all that different to me. It's still very elaborate, but only when it needs to be. Verbosity doesn't have to be a bad thing, though. It's a matter of implementation.

Good stuff, Sparkle.

Keep it coming

#4 · 127w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Yes! Yes!  I am extremely excited to see this go up and I am glad you are continuing this story.

#6 · 127w, 10h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I have not read this yet. But I must compliment how much you're willing to do for your unfortunately small amount of followers. I do recall the moment where you were in a dilemma of whether leaving the story on permanent hiatus or continuing on. And now, you're creating the sequel to it. Great perseverance.

My journey into another (hopefully) amazing wall of text begins.

#7 · 126w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

i just now got the chance to read this and I think it pretty good. I hope you do continue this story because I was really looking for every time price of grace got updated. I be watching you now good luck.

#8 · 126w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Well I was going to post this on your recent announcement, but you've removed that it seems, so I'll post it here instead.

You're stories inspire much, boredom is not one of them, The Price of Grace was a beautiful story, well written, engaging, great characters and a protagonist you could feel for, and truth be told I wish I came across it much earlier. It was one of the better stories I've read to do with MLP and I'm rather harsh, if the story doesn't grip me from the first chapter I'll move on, I may give it till the second chapter to be more fair, again The Price of Grace had me on the first chapter which is quite rare for me, in fact after reading the first chapter I signed up solely so I could comment on such, needless to say when I read some of the comments that seemed to suggest you were going to quit I was crushed, I'd found a great story and it seemed as soon as I had, it was going to end, unfinished, gratefully that didn't turn out to be the case.

Now The Nightmare had me on the first chapter as well, it was(an hopefully still will be) shaping up to be just as beautiful, well written, and engaging as the first. I must admit I'm slightly crushed that you've decided to put it on Hiatus(still I'm glad it's no longer listed as 'cancelled') for now, which I'm hoping is merely temporary, I was looking forward to the next chapter.

Of course, either way, I'm grateful that you wrote The Price of Grace, I thoroughly enjoyed reading it, the long chapters didn't concern me at all, although that's an uncommon view. Remember, you have a small amount of people that check back daily to see whether you've updated, myself included.

I did have more to say, but I feel as if this is sufficient.

#9 · 126w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

A shame.

At least it was changed from "Cancelled" to "On Hiatus".

I can, of course, understand your reasoning, and even if not, I would have no right to tell you what to do. Creative writing takes a lot of energy (and a lot of heart), and if you genuinely feel that your efforts are wasted, then moving on and doing something else seems like a sensible choice.

Even so, the selfish prick in me hopes that this particular "Nightmare" won't leave you alone, and that you will eventually come back and finish it. I'll be vigilant for updates.

And should you decide not to, know that I wish you luck in your future endeavors regardless. You have talent. If not here, I hope you can find the appreciation you deserve for it elsewhere.

Regards

- Neighkodemus

#10 · 125w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I really do hope that this story continues, its a simply exclent read that I have really injoyed.

#11 · 125w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>835255

Yes, one of the few that I really enjoy. I would love nothing more than to see this continued :twilightsmile:

#12 · 122w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I have only recently stumbled upon The Price of Grace, as I found it in the comments for Paradise.  The comment that the link was embedded in said that the story was underapreciated.  I would have to agree with said sentiment, in that this story surpasses any other that I have ha the pleasure to read in this genre.  I believe that The Price of Grace should be recognized as one of the great fics of the fandom rather than be recognized by only a few as it is now. With that said, I am looking foward to the rest of The Nightmare if you so choose to write it. Thank you for the effort that you have already put into this story.

#13 · 110w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

There goes another story that never to be finished :fluttercry:

#14 · 109w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>1459210

Well, it's On Hiatus, not canceled. We can still hope.

Right?

Right, Sparkle? PLEASE?

#15 · 92w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Ooh, does this mean it's off hiatus? Reading now.

#16 · 92w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

So does this mean that this story is on again? If so, then I am grateful since I have enjoyed the price of grace a lot! Keep up the good work buddy :)

#17 · 92w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Yes! Yes! Oh god yes! Good to see you back :D  I shall read this chapter greedily.

#18 · 92w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

It been awhile. Are you now working on this story.:pinkiehappy:

#19 · 92w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Whale oil beef hooked

#20 · 92w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Oh thank god, I was beginning to, I was thinking it was cancelled.

#21 · 91w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

ooo fuck I didn't know this updated

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