Well, that seems a random crossover, but you do a good job with writing filly Starlight. She hasn't grown into her ways that we saw in the Cutie Map yet, though she does have her hate for Cutie Marks, so it's really easy to emphasise with her. I'm mildly surprised that Obito doesn't divulge much more in his thoughts about the Rikudo Sennin putting him in Equestria than a brief couple of aside mentions about the guy.

Well, this was really nice. A lucky find on my part.