Celestia has been murdered and left Twilight and the others with just an old letter and news of an Alicorn aside her and her sister being alive and quite possibly Equestria's only hope from an enemy thought to be long gone.
big thanks to soarinbolt from Deviant art for the cover image and Thedudwiththeface from Funnyjunk who is helping with pre-reading chapters
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I am utterly stunned. Whether by amazement or disgust even I can't tell.
god dangit why you gotta tease me friend
Eagerly waiting for more.
TBH, the plot is just fine, but the grammar, punctuation, and capitalization kill me.
I will try this.
It's a nice story, but you violated a pet peeve of mine. It doesn't ruin the story, it just irks me. If this alicorn is truly wearing gold armor, it would not have tarnished like you say it did. Gold never tarnishes. Ever. Also it's soft and a poor choice for combat armor, but I'll let that slide.
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ah yes i see your point lol i was just going by the basis of the canterlot armour from the show and thought that over a thousand years it would look old :P
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Well It could just be bronze and appear gold. And after a thousand years it may look dusty or dirty, but just as yellow as the day it was made. That's why the use it for circuitry in spaceships. It doesn't rust like iron, or even silver. It would actually make sense as an armor for one who live for long periods of time because of that. I'm not exactly sure why it doesn't. It may just be more reactive to itself then oxygen or something. Also it has no discernible taste (as far as humans can tell). But now I'm just rambling.
This is awesome.
Good job!
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why thankyou this thing walked into my head almost like J.K Rowling and harry potter and i just had to do it glad that you like it
and it's pretty hardcore, though I haven't read to the latest chapter,
pretty epic that something is stronger than Celestia. 
oh yeah, Chapstick is my other user, accidentally made 2.
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haha thankyou it's always nice to hear someone appreciates my work i would have uploaded the chapter on monday as i plan on releasing them each week but i couldnt be arsed to write anything till today
You should seriously consider having someone edit this, or at least run it through a grammar checker (if you have access to one). Your story is riddled with grammatical errors, particularly the run-on sentences and lack of commas.
Incidentally "a lot", not "allot". Spellcheck won't pick it up since "allot" is a word, but it's wrong for the situations you're using it for.
172531 ah yes i do suffer from grammar errors and would give it to pre-readers but as im new to this don't know any if you can suggest me some then that would be amazing as i could do with some editing.
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I'm afraid I don't know any personally, but you might find some by asking around forums.
(sniffle) I haven't read any other chapter except 1 and 2 and this, but buck this is sad.
Windhelm, hmm where have I heard that before?.................SKYRIM!!
G\FUS RO DAH
353763 damn skyrim! haha I have a map of skyrim next to my computer so I must have subcontiously been reading it when I thought of the place
356462 Well nopony can escape the Skyrim, except for...http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2O-P16lz_NM
Hmm, what's the secret?
This fiction is too underrated.....