(2nd edition after revocation) In an alternate Equestria, the first firearms were created to aid the military... and crime unfortunately.
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Much, much better now.
I would advise to cut down on ellipses ("...") as well, it's in at least two out of every three sentences. Makes all dialogue read the same.