*NOTE* First 3 chapters have been rewritten so older readers please check them out. *NOTE*
A prototype prosthetic hand from our universe falls through a rift in the dimensional barriers, eventually becoming attached to Lyra. What will Lyra do now that she has her long awaited hand? Join us and find out.
My thanks go out to Starfall for proof-reading the story.
Now with Flying_whimsy as an editor!
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This is planned as a one-shot, but may be continued depending on feedback.
Oh my.
This.Is. Brilliant dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png Please add more
I am intrigued... please, carry on.
That ended way to abruptly for a oneshot... I bet you planned more really
More please
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Your explanations are fascinating and detailed while not succumbing to the deadening forces that can kill moods such as when one explains a joke, very well done.
Also an admitted "prude" especially when it comes to ponies I did start getting annoyed at your portrayal of lyra and bon-bon's relationship. I deemed the displays of affection between them seemingly unnecessary and embellished. However I was still interested enough to keep reading and then found exactly what your intentions had been the entire time! I must say I found that ever so amusing and did not see that coming, good show dear lad, good show
The Adventures Of The Disembodied Hand.
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Well, it looks like people want to see more of this. Wasn't to sure how well received it would be, which is why I made it a one-shot and left the open ending. Changing status to incomplete. Expect to see more in the future.
706544 I know it's a little much at points, but as you said, its all setup. That said, with a continuation, it will be less present, well from Lyra and Bon Bon that is.
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Mwuaha-ha! ha ha!
and somehow I can just hear pinkie prancing around town humming and singing to herself just under her breath "...they're creepy and they're kooky, mysterious and spooky, they're all together ooky, lyra's family...."
Got quite a few run-ons, and I've seen a better written plot, but it's an interesting idea. Have a mustache.
713303 Thanks for the feedback, a few examples of the worse run-ons would be helpful. I tend to ramble sometimes in flesh space, so its not surprising that might have happened here.
“Of course Pinkie, you’re purchase will be on the next month’s invoice and thanks for the cupcake it looks delicious, as always.”
“Yes it does indeed look tasty and, thanks to my Hand, it feels nice as well, though my Hand isn’t responding as well as it did earlier. I wonder if I broke it…”
“I wonder if I would have better control over it and play better if I stored not only he lightning magic in the gem, but also some of the magic I use to play with.”
That sort of thing...
A runaway hand that is inter-weaved with Lyra's own brand of magic, and now has a strange tendency for groping random mares. I have to say that this is really.... interesting for a plot idea.
This sounds hilarious! Do continue