The roar of a motorcycle and a cloud of dust filled the early evening sky. Rainbow watched sadly at the retreating back of its rider, their bomber jacket emblazoned with a griffon whipped by the wind. Soon only a shimmer of dust in the air and the faint smell of fuel were all that remained of her first love.
The visit had been a disaster, sure Pinkie was affectionate and yeah, one New Year’s they’d fooled around a little at midnight, but it was only a kiss. Gilda had reacted to her badly, she knew the girl got possessive from when they’d been together at college but it hadn’t been that bad. Her earlier visits and heck, even when they shared a bed, she had never been so angry and reactive.
Rainbow rubbed the livid scratch on her arm and sighed, before she’d not been as close to other girls. Now Gilda was off and away forever. “I…hate being alone.” She whispered and scrubbed some tears from her eyes. She turned and walked back towards the last structure within Ponyville limits, it was time to return to her lonely apartment at the airfield.
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Ponyville library was quiet, but then it always was. It was past closing time but the librarian and her assistant were still tidying up. “Hey Twilight, is Pinkie having that party to make up for the last party going bad?” Spike pushed the book cart along the aisle of the library.
“I’m not sure, it has been only two days. It’s sad that Gilda took it so badly this visit too.” Twilight carried on shelving books, there were just a few more to be put back and the two of them could go home for the night.
“Yeah, sure is sad, I mean poor Rainbow. She and Gilda were tight.” Spike handed up another pile of books. “Gilda just didn’t get on with you guys did she?”
Twilight paused then, “Rainbow...” she whispered. “Spike, have you seen Rainbow around since she left with Gilda?” It had been a tense moment, just like the last time, Gilda had got more and more angry. This time however Gilda had taken Rainbow for a long talk. Twilight had helped clean up the party and then gone to bed. Work and study had taken up her schedule.
“No Twilight, I haven’t seen her at all. In fact all the others asked me the same question.” He pulled a worried face. “You think she isn’t ok?”
Twilight ruffled her young assistants hair, “It’s tough when your friends fight or argue with each other. Tell you what, I’ll drop you at Fluttershy’s and go check on Rainbow after we finish up here.” She smiled at his cross expression.
“Alright, but do you have to mess my hair up?” Twilight chuckled and they carried on the last chores of their working day.
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Twilight’s car rolled up at the gates to the airfield. She’d left Spike with his overnight bag at Fluttershy’s and had headed out. Her passenger seat loaded with Rainbow’s favourite Chinese food and a crate of beer. Gilda and Rainbow had been a little closer than Spike was aware, the aviator had confided as such in her friends. Whatever had happened the other night must have been bad. Putting up the headlights Twilight left her car and unlocked the gates, all the girls had key’s to each other’s places, she drove through and shut them again.
Without the floodlights on, Spectrum Airfield was very dark. It was a ten minute drive from town on a service road. The night sky was painted from horizon to horizon beckoning deeper into infinity without a single stain from cloud or electric light. Twilight loved to come out here and stargaze, just her and Rainbow with a thermos and a telescope. Now however was not the time for hobbies.
Her car came ever closer to the block at the edge of the airfield that served as Rainbow’s home. In the near perfect darkness there were signs of a television flicker in the window. ‘At least she’s home.’ Twilight thought, a weight from her shoulders. She parked up and politely knocked her friend’s front door. Arms loaded with food and beer she called out “Rainbow?” there was no answer. Sighing as the door key became ever difficult to find Twilight set the food down and unlocked the house. “Rainbow, I’m coming in.”
Her friend’s home was always a mess, Rainbow just wasn’t one for 100% perfection in her living space, the workshops were operating theatre clean but her house often looked the worse for wear. There were no outward signs of things being wrong. The sound of a television and its dull light came from the living room. Twilight entered and was shocked by what she found. “R-Rainbow?” Her varia-colour headed friend was lying on the sofa, eyes bloodshot and face tearstained.
“Gilda left me...” Was all the girl could choke out. Twilight dumped the goods on a table and rushed to Rainbow, gathering her into a warm embrace.
Rainbow twitched and winced a little causing Twilight to draw back. Closer to her friend she could see the fading purple of a black eye and a scratch down her arm, the nap of Twilight’s jumper must have caught the healing scrapes. “Did she do this to you?” It was a gentle question that hid undertones of deep concern and a hint of anger.
“My fault, wasn’t good enough.” Rainbow mumbled in reply.
“No. No, Rainbow, no one ever deserves this. Someone who loves you should never hit you.” Twilight pulled her close again. “We can report this if you want.”
“No! I, I don’t want to cause her trouble. ‘sides she’ll more than likely be out of state now.” More tears followed that statement.
“Rainbow Dash, you are more loyal than is good for you.” Twilight smoothed the multicoloured hair of her friend. “If you want to leave it, ok. But never, Never say that you deserve it. She never deserved you.” Rainbow buried her face in the soft knit of Twilight’s jumper, reaching her arms around to return the embrace. “Now, I brought some food and some beer. You want to share?” Twilight disentangled herself carefully. Rainbow gave a wet smile and nod. The librarian set about sharing out the food and sat down on the sofa besides Rainbow. “It’s going to be fine Rainbow. You’ll see.”
As the night passed them by, two friends shared food, drink and company.
It was late, a slight blush across both girls faces indicated that the empty crate had done its job. Twilight would be staying for a while it seemed. The last cans were drained with gusto and thumped to the table. “You know, you know- you know what?” Rainbow chuckled.
“Well, I know lots...” Twilight giggled a little and plunked an empty can with a fingernail. Rainbow gave a morose grin.
“Me an Gilda went waaaay back, y’know? Like kids back Twi’. I loved her, man I loved that girl. She got a mean streak though. Jealous too...” Rainbow trailed off and Twilight flung a companionable arm across her shoulders. “She was the only one, y’know. The only one who loved me. My parents were you know, they had to love me. Gilda was different, we like chose each other. She didn’t have to love me but she did...” Rainbow peered into a can in search of more beer. “I only had friends other than her after I moved here...”
“Well we all love you Rainbow.” Twilight smiled, placing a finger on Rainbow’s chin. Rainbow looked more morose.
“She di’n’t like that you girls’re my friends though? Y’all really pretty an’ she knew it. Like, like how Pinkie is all huggy and stuff, she didn’t like it at all.” Rainbow grabbed Twilight’s hand that dangled from her own shoulder. “She really didn’t like how I looked at you.” She chuckled at that and Twilight gave a cute laugh too, a little snort at the end. “She said ‘You like that one in all the purple! I can tell!’ so I was all ‘So what? She’s nicer than you Gilda!’ Then she like, hit me a bit and we tussled and she left.” Twilight brought her other arm over carefully and touched the bruising around Rainbow’s eye.
“That’s mean.” She said simply.
“Yeah, she left me. Phoned yesterday to say as-as-as mush.” She turned to face Twilight. Twilight turned to return the look.
“I’m here now Rainbow.” Was all she said. Their breath felt warm on each other’s faces, Twilight had an idea.
She kissed Rainbow.
You're doing some interesting things here. Most fics I've read often depict Twilight as someone who can't hold her liquor if her life depended on it. The fact that this is humanized warrants a watch. You have piqued my curiosity and I would like to see where this goes.
However, I would advise you to go over and fix the dialogue. When I different character speaks, put that in a different paragraph. As it is now, following the conversation is kind of tricky. Just use a fine-tooth comb on this and you'll get something awesome.
your right twidash is best ship but not good enough for me to read humanized but the ship is good so seea and goodluck with the story
edit: i dont like humans not anything with humans in it is bad
Humanized..uhmm never read but lets try, looking foward for more
I totally cant stand humanized fics... But TwiDash caught my attention and I am pleasantly surprised where this is going. Good job sir and please continue
TwiDash? I shall read.
Oh yes. More Twidash. Because Twidash is indeed best ship ever. No matter what.
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120% agreed!
Please guys if you thumb down give the man a reason
703286 I believe Cirrus Sky is a girl. But I could be mistaken.
GILDA DID WHAT?! AW, HELL NAH!
*grabs shotgun*
You mam(?), should be proud of your work. This was my first look at humanized ponies, I am enjoying it. Although, I did notice some paragraphing errors.
You put both Twi and Dash spoken lines in the same paragraph. Just to help make it read smoother, start a new paragraph for a new speaker.
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"This is filler," said Twilight.
"Hey! That was my line!" Dash protested.
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Okay, okay, okay. I know it's irrelevant, but what's the car's model?
Urgh, last time I copy over a chapter from one document over to FiM just before I go to sleep! Any and all paragraphing errors are due to the switch from my word processor to the chapter format
Glad y'all are liking it
*some moments later*
Ok, should be sorted now. I actually got this one pre-read by a friend but of course page width changes had to mess it up!
Yes, Twidash is indeed the best ship. The story seems interesting. I'l keep an eye on this.
Thanks Bailey for the heads up! I am the same way with her though being normally against human related stories but there are the few I like and this is one of them... Of course the TwiDash is most likely the deciding factor in this lol. Why? Because TwiDash is best pony
Good fic. FlutterDash is best ship though.
I've been looking for a good Humanized story for a while now, it's not exactly something you see very much of. I've always hated HiE stories, but outright Humanized ponies seems to have more potential as far as I'm concerned.
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... when Twilight and/or Spitfire are otherwise occupied.
Look like you need to work on skipping lines when some one new talks, its a little hard to read the dialogue for two people ate once
I really can't imagine Twilight being a beer person. Good job!
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I thinks is more realistic if she can hold her liqour, thus beter story about neon coloured ponies.
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Are you Kidding...
*grabs tank, 5 rocket launchers and all male weapons*
that girls going down!!!!!!!!!
Daw "that's mean". I found that cute coming from drunk twi
Hm... Interesting. I'll be keeping an eye on this story.
But there is one thing: Whenever there is a new speaker, always make a new paragraph. This does mean that some paragraphs will be short, but you need to make a new one when a different person starts speaking.
A few structural errors, but nothing off putting. I'll keep reading!
Basic rule of writing: new speaker, new paragraph/line. You have characters speaking in the same wall of text. This quickly gets confusing and is not pleasing to the eye. The assumption is that the same person is speaking if they are in the same paragraph. Please fix this as it is distracting. It seems minor but I dislike having to reread a line multiple times to just make sure the same person is speaking rather than it be self-evident.
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*Brings an army of tanks and the Death Star* There's no kill like overkill!
5086589 I'm just gonna join you with the assembled legions of the 3 demonrealms.
I'm gonna keep reading, but you need to space out the conversations, I kept getting confused on who was talking
I realize chapter one is quite old as far as a fanfic chapter goes, but still, if its ongoing and being updated you should fix the dialog.
I read to relax, not to sit there and figure out who said what because you don't follow the basic rule of "new speaker, new paragraph".
Hell, someone else even mentioned this in the first comment I'm seeing on this chapter.
5086589 1.bp.blogspot.com/_8tTVmvXtTWU/SUKpX6ltq0I/AAAAAAAAAc4/I8HzSDtudVk/s400/944521_20081008_screen001.jpg ill bring the chrimra fleet to help as well
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summon ever zord from ever power rangers all at once., follow by grab all the gundams and mobile suits ever made "I think we good" now,
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Meanwhile i just told the imperium of man she was a heretic and they sent a squad of inquisitors after her.... Slippery bitch hid long enough to warrant an extermanatus though....