Yes, almost as important as using proper grammar so you don't sound like caveman. Get an editor. As minor as they are, these little grammar gems appear quite a few times in the story...like in the first sentence
As to the rest, well...it's not all that bad. There's a few wonky bits here and there, but this could turn out to be a decent story with some editing. I'd suggest posting on FoE groups since ones like Looking for Editors are all st.
Also, strength of 1? That's, like, a baby's strength. If you want her below average strength, give her 4, same goes for endurance (and you are aware that usually SPECIALs add up to 40, right? )
6576539 Thank you for your advice. I've been looking for an editor for a while now, but no one is biting. And I am aware that the normal S.P.E.C.I.A.L. adds up to around 40, but I'm playing this one by Fallout 4 rules, where they've revealed that you only start with 21 points to invest into it. I'll wait until after Fallout 4 comes out before I release ethereal next chapter so I can see how they do the leveling. Again, thank up for your advice and input, and I hope you'll check my story out again AFTER I get ahold of an editor.
Yes, almost as important as using proper grammar so you don't sound like caveman. Get an editor. As minor as they are, these little grammar gems appear quite a few times in the story...like in the first sentence
As to the rest, well...it's not all that bad. There's a few wonky bits here and there, but this could turn out to be a decent story with some editing. I'd suggest posting on FoE groups since ones like Looking for Editors are all st.
Also, strength of 1? That's, like, a baby's strength. If you want her below average strength, give her 4, same goes for endurance (and you are aware that usually SPECIALs add up to 40, right? )
6576539
Thank you for your advice. I've been looking for an editor for a while now, but no one is biting.
And I am aware that the normal S.P.E.C.I.A.L. adds up to around 40, but I'm playing this one by Fallout 4 rules, where they've revealed that you only start with 21 points to invest into it. I'll wait until after Fallout 4 comes out before I release ethereal next chapter so I can see how they do the leveling.
Again, thank up for your advice and input, and I hope you'll check my story out again AFTER I get ahold of an editor.
I love it ! Everywhere in stable is full of love lol poor those...i have no idea what will happen ! I will absolutly follow this story