I never thought my life would be like this.... but what can I say? I chose to kill those ponies. My only regret? well.... it would be not meeting her sooner.....
Authors note: some of you maybe wondering as to whom the main character of the story is. if you have ever read the famous story from Edger Allen Poe : the tell tale heart, you may come to understand why the character has yet to be named. I do hope you will read the story none the less. for those who have thank you.
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I will not favorite yet, but I will watch. It has potential, but you may want to go through once or twice and catch some of those errors. Don't stress over them too much, though, as they happen to everyone.
Keep it up, man.
Impact
The strength of the emotions, effective use of language, responsiveness. How a story made me feel, how well it met established expectations, how much enjoyment was had. Grammar problems will be overlooked if I am sufficiently in the zone.
It certainly got my interest, that was for sure.
Accuracy
Faithfulness to the setting, characters, ect.
As no characters have been named yet, I will have to postpone this.
Originality
Judges will add points for ideas they’ve never heard or seen executed and choices that are off the beaten path. Judges will deduct points for tired ideas and cliché directions.
Mass killing of ponies I've seen before. Namely in Fallen Prime's riffs (the brothel comes to mind). However, if the killer is an already established pony, well, that'll certainly be something I've never seen before. Well, with the exception of Pinkie. She's a well worn road.
Impact
The strength of the emotions, effective use of language, responsiveness. How a story made me feel, how well it met established expectations, how much enjoyment was had. Grammar problems will be overlooked if I am sufficiently in the zone.
What happened? Last chapter seemed fairly impactful, if not short, but... now I just feel nothing.
Accuracy
Faithfulness to the setting, characters, ect.
Again, you are avoiding the identity of the killer. I do not know who this being is, although I'm willing to bet it's Flutter's marefriend.
Originality
Judges will add points for ideas they’ve never heard or seen executed and choices that are off the beaten path. Judges will deduct points for tired ideas and cliché directions.
See previous.
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Thank you. this is my first story, so i know there's mistakes. but i will do my best to correct them in the future. thank you for reading.
3001181
No worries, dude. Looking forward to more of this.
2999533
Do forgive me if my last chapter seemed to be lacking. I've actually been more focus on the next few chapters then the last and it seems that the chapter has shown it.
as to the identity of the killer... its a secret...
and yes i know that the cliche of mass murder has defiantly been worn, it is my hope i can at least spark some interest with my up coming chapters.
thank you for reading, and rating my story. i do appreciate feed back.
MOAR!!!!
please...
3002181
lmao.
working on it!