Twilight, who had been severely startled by the sudden flash of light, had fallen backwards into the pile of boxes she was sitting on. She continued to stay there for the several minutes as she had to cover her eyes completely to not be blinded by the light emitted from her friends. During this time, everything fell silent for Twilight, except for a quiet noise that sounded like fairy dust being sprinkled. She had no idea what was going on, and started to worry about what was happening. There were no screams of pain or anything else of the sort, so she knew they weren't being hurt. But she wasn't hearing anything from them, which wasn't a good sign.
After about five minutes of waiting, the noise was silenced, and replaced several seconds later with a low groan. Twilight knew that noise all too well, the sound of somebody that didn't want to wake up. She moved her hands away from her face slowly, and found no scorching light met her eyes. What she did find however, was something, or six somethings that scared her just as much as they made her want to scoop them up into a hug. Lying on the floor were six technicolour ponies, five of which looked to be asleep.
Twilight quickly got to her feet and brushed off any dust on her skirt that remained from the old boxes. The movement caught the attention of one of ponies, specifically the flame-maned one, who was the only one to actually be awake. She opened her groggy eyes a little bit further and looked directly at Twilight, who had a confused look on her face.
"Twilight, what happened?" said the orange pony.
It spoke, Twilight thought quickly, but that voice, could it be? "Sunset? Is that you?"
"What do mean? Did we transform back or-" Sunset reached to the top of her head to check her ears, her hoof hitting the unicorn horn that was sticking out of her forehead first. "Am I a pony?" she said, with concern in her voice.
Twilight was simply dumbfounded. Not only did she have a friend who used to be a pony from a different world, but now that friend was a pony in her world! The half-pony transformations were one thing, something she didn't understand at all, but six actual ponies? Her mind had no idea where to begin. She sat back down on the semi-crushed boxes, hand on her forehead, trying to piece together what happened.
Sunset by this point had noticed Twilight's reaction, and came to the conclusion that she was in fact, a pony again. She got to her hooves, her mind switching back to her birth instincts, and looked around her. She put two and two together and knew that somehow, the other five ponies laying there were her friends. She walked over to each of them and gave a slight nudge in the side to try and wake them up. Slowly, but surely, each of her friends awoke, and realized where they were. Sunset just stopped and listened, as one by one, they realized what happened to them and started there own mini freak-outs, except for Fluttershy. The yellow, animal loving pegasus was caught in the same dilemma that Twilight initially was. She wasn't sure whether to scream or to SQUEE, the result being a mixture of the two. The confused sound made everyone else in the small garage turn towards her in shock, silencing their own cries. Sunset quickly seized upon the silence.
"So girls, uh, we're ponies now," she said with an sheepish grin. "Something definitely went wrong, and while I'm used to being like this seeing as I was born a pony, I can understand what you girls are feeling right now. I had no clue what to do with myself when I first walked through the portal, I didn't know that I was a bipedal species, or that I didn't have magic. But for right now, I just need you calm down while I can figure out a solution."
"Calm down?" Applejack started, trying shakily to stand up, only to fall back onto her haunches. "We just went and turned from magical half pony-humans into actual ponies, and you want us to calm down? Ah have hooves for pete's sake!" she said while waving a hoof around in the air. Sunset could tell by her heavy breathing that Applejack wasn't taking this very well.
"Applejack," said Rarity, "I agree with Sunset, freaking out isn't going to help us solve anything." Rarity slowly got up, having an easier time then than her friend, and walked over to her. She draped herself over Applejack in an awkward pony-human hybrid hug. Sunset couldn't help but snicker to herself about how weird they looked. They stayed that way for a couple of minutes, until Applejack broke the hug.
"Thanks Rarity," she said with a small blush. "And Ah'm sorry Sunset, ah don't know what came over me," she was almost crying at this point from the mental stress she went through.
Unbeknownst to the three girls, their friends were sitting on the other side of the garage, looking over their new bodies. Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash were closely examining each other's wings. They had had wings, whenever they "ponied up" before. The only difference now was that they could actually look at them without worrying about changing back like when they played music.
Close by the two pegasi, a now intrigued Twilight was sitting with Pinkie Pie, lifting and lowering her hooves like a water pump. She had the notepad in hand and was writing down notes about the new species in front of her. The pink mare could hardly sit still and was almost bouncing, her tail shaking back and forth like a dog's.
Sunset walked into the center of the room and with got the attention of her friends. "I'm going to be honest with you girls, I have no idea how to fix this. I'm still learning friendship magic myself, and I was wrong about the first solution. I should've been more careful, and I won't make that mistake again.
"Which is why I don't want to actually try anything to fix this until I ask Princess Twilight for help. I'll keep trying to figure it from the research I have, but for all I know, something far worse could've happened than us being turned into ponies."
Surprisingly to Sunset, Twilight was the one to respond. "From a scientific standpoint, that's probably the best bet for now. Better to be sure about your next attempt, than make it worse." Everyone else nodded as well. They had to admit, the idea of doing magical "tests" on themselves wasn't very appealing.
"So until Princess Twilight responds, we're stuck like this? You all remember how long it took for her to get Sunset's message before the friendship games. What will we do if she's busy again?" said Rarity. "What about school?"
"Well, I guess we can't go to school until we can hear from Twilight, what a shame," Rainbow Dash said with a sarcastic sigh.
"But where will we stay?" Pinkie Pie said, pulling her ear away from Twilight and her notepad. "I don't think my family would be very happy if I went home as a little pink pony. Well, I'm sure Maud would find it hilarious, she loves fun stuff like this!" Having met her sister Maud before, the other five ponies in the room simply gave her a hesitant "yeaaaaaa," trying not to let on that her sister didn't seem like the fun type.
"But, if I can't go home, how will I feed all my animals?" Fluttershy gasped.
"Fluttershy, you carry all your animals and their food around in your backpack, remember?" said Rainbow Dash, pointing a hoof to the open pack near the garage door. It was open, with a bunny and a hamster sleeping inside, a cat beside them licking its paws, and a bird resting on the cat's head.
"Oh, right," she whispered. "But where will we stay?"
"Sunset," Twilight spoke up, "You said this morning that the family you live with was only gone for tonight, right?" At the pony's nod she continued. "My parents are gone on a two week business trip, so I guess you girls could stay at my house."
"A sleepover?" Pinkie Pie nearly hit the ceiling with how high she jumped. "Ohmygosh! Ohmygosh! Ohmygosh!"
"That sounds like a marvelous idea!" Rarity said excitedly. "But how will we get to your house Twilight, we can't exactly run there and not expect to be seen."
"Actually Rarity, we would be galloping, not runn-," Sunset started, only to be cutoff by the glare that Rarity shot at her.
"Errrr, never mind."
"Ah have an idea," Applejack stood up, this time figuring out how to not fall back onto her haunches again. "Twilight, you said you got your license a few days ago, right?" She walked over to her backpack and stuck her head inside the pouch to look for something.
"Yeah," she replied. "But my parent's car is our family's only car, and they took it for the business trip."
"Well, isn't just lucky that Big Mac let me borrow his truck to get here today?" she said with a huge grin, using her hoof the scrape the apple shaped key-ring out of her backpack.
"Excellent. Alright girls, grab your backpacks and lets head out! Just leave your instruments here, and we'll grab them when we figure everything out," said Sunset as walked over to her backpack and sat down beside it. The pony couldn't help but smile about everything that had happened. I can't believe I'm finally a pony again, I feels good to be back!
About five minutes later, and everyone was ready to go. Twilight opened the garage door slowly and looked around for anyone that might have been walking or driving by. Everything seemed clear, and she gave the the word to her friends.
"Ok y'all follow me, I parked just over there," Applejack said, pointing towards the old red pickup truck. Everyone broke into a quick gallop, save for Twilight, who was constantly watching for anyone that might be passing by. Luckily, nobody did.
After lifting her non-winged friends, one by one into the truck, Twilight draped a large white sheet from Sunset's garage over everyone.
"Ugh!" Rarity coughed. "This thing is simply covered in dust, couldn't you have shook it out first?"
Everyone seemed to roll their eyes in unison, and Twilight walked over the driver's side door, got in, and checked all of her mirrors. She didn't ace her driving exam by forgetting her mental, pre-driving, checklist. And finally, after a couple failed engine starts, they were on the road.
"I guess while we wait, I'll start writing a letter to Princess Twilight to explain the situation we're in here. Hopefully she won't be as busy as last time. I'd suggest that you girls call your parents when we get to Twilight's house," Sunset said, fishing the enchanted book and a pen out of her backpack. As if it was instinctual by this point, Sunset started to dictate her letter as she wrote.
Dear Princess Twilight,
I'm going to be honest, friendship magic makes NO sense.
After a band practice with the girls, we were left with our pony ears and hair.
I assumed that playing another song would fix the problem,
but instead I made it worse.
We all turned into our pony selves, except for Twilight.
(I guess because she wasn't part of the initial
friendship magic group... I think.)
I haven't really worked out all the details myself.
We're staying at Twilight's house to avoid the public eye,
but we need your expertise.
Please write back as soon as you can.
Your friend, Sunset Shimmer.
what? no, "wait...where are our clothes?" darn...
There are times when the scientific process and it's progress require you to take a step back and do nothing further for a while.
6483156 I'll admit, I was wondering where their clothes went too, but considering magic alters RD's and Flutter's tops to account for wings...
Minor error: instant instead of instincts when Sunset woke up.
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true, but there wasnt any reactions of "oh no we're naked"?
They don't realize that they're naked?
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We're getting there, geez! I just turned 5 humans into a different species (Sunset doesn't count), and you think they're going to be thinking "logically?"
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I'm guessing that's going to come up when someone mentions needing to take a shower. Fun times ahead!
Edit: Found a typo;
Pretty sure that should have been 'stuck'
As I've said, I don't do a ton of planning. But let's see what I have to work with the the coming chapters.
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Yea... Yea... I can work with this, realizes I tagged the story as "Everyone,"
Back to the drawing board...
i cant wait for more chapters to get done
Editing tip: When a quotation has following attribution, that attribution should be lowercase, and if it would end in a period, that period becomes a comma. Other end punctuation is unchanged, but attribution is still not capitalized. Example:
Wrong: "Words." She said.
Right: "Words," she said.
Also right: "Words!" she exclaimed.
Ahahahaaa! Those reactions! Anyway love it gimme moar pls!
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I imagine it going something like this:
Cue epic freak out from Rarity and someone (likely Applejack or Fluttershy) pointing out that ponies don't normally wear clothes. Sunset then helpfully mentions that most Equestrians don't usually bother with clothing outside of formal occasions
Dear Sunset Shimmer , your friends have been channeling Equestrian magic aka pony magic into their bodies, over and over. The outcome isn't that surprising.
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Thanks. I know about those rules, but they're tough ones to follow. I hope that after some time, I'll get into a habit of doing it correctly.
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Well actually, it isn't just pony magic. In friendship games, in turns Sunset into a phoenix... thing.
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A Phoenix Alicorn... thing....
.... you know what, screw it.. horned Phoenix.
Now, I just wonder how long it'll take Sunset to think: "Maybe the Portal can fix us up" (will it though? Maybe. Maybe Not. there are many theories as to how it works and none have been disproved)
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Well, isn't just amazing that I've planned just far enough ahead to have the conclusion in my back pocket? And that doesn't mean a fix for the transformation, and it doesn't not mean a fix. A conclusion, I'm not giving any spoilers here.
This should be fun
this is one fun story! it is such a pleasure to read! you also have captured their feelings and emotions masterfully, kudos to you!!
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Thank you guys so much! I was kind of worried that it wouldn't do very well, but apparently I was wrong. Even after two chapters I can already tell, this is not going to be my only story.
Definitely off to a roaring start. Looking forward to seeing where this goes.
Wait a minute, how is she dictating and writing the letter at the same time if she isn't using magic?
I'd say it's a safe bet to assume they'd have magic, seeing as magic DOES exist in the world, and the magic beams in Friendship Games kinda proved that it could be directly manipulated.
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Remember when I said that I didn't even know if there's magic? I was either lying or you guys pointed out a flaw that I never noticed. I'm not going to admit to which is right though.
I look forward to the next chapter! I also cannot wait to see how Principal Celestia and Vice-Principal Luna take the girls new looks
6489270 Thank you very much. And on the topic of the next chapter, I will *hopefully* be starting it tomorrow (errr... today, it's 12:01AM). I started playing Space Engineers, and it took me off task a little.
6489324 Can't say I have heard of that game. What is it about?
6489348 Hmmm, best way I can describe it, think of Garry's Mod + Minecraft, in space.
6489455 cannot say I have played garrys mod, but I have played minecraft (and terraria and starbound)
One question. Do they have cutie marks? Or do they not have enough self identity for that yet?
What happens when Rarity starts to use what her magic can do?
Or AJ starts feeling the connection to life all earth ponies have plus super strength.
stuck.
Still, this reminds me of "Five Score, Divided by Four". I think it would be a good idea to do a plot deviation from that soon.
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Sorry for the slow reply; I was hoping I would have the time to re-read this and point things out to you in this message. I ended up not having said time, but I will still point things out later once I DO have the chance. Promise
Well I think they should have magic. Remember this fact: In the Human world magic is chaotic unless needed for something.
Pony twilight had her magic but she couldn't control it until it was needed.
The best choice would to give them the magic but make it even more chaotic.
Like rarity having a magical surge creating a cloud over rainbow dash causing her to jump and summon a lightning bolt scaring the other and sunset teleports human twilight someplace else
Missing punctuation.
And, to be honest, I'm surprised nobody's suggested getting Human!Twilight to build something to suck the magic out of them. Sure, it would need to be destroyed soon after, but otherwise flawlessly reverted the half-changes. Why not the full changes?
Also, are we going to see any magic from Sunset to validate her position as Princess Celestia's former student?
This is an interesting concept, but it feels rushed. You brushed over most of the reactions to getting turned into ponies. The whole point of a story like this should be to dwell on their reactions! That's what makes it fun. AJ was the only one who freaked out. You did mention that Fluttershy was happy being a pony, but what exactly does that mean? Is she going to try to communicate with ponies in their world? What about Dash: Is she already trying to touch the clouds? Is Pinkie working her prehensile mane and tail? And similar to what other readers mentioned: Is Rarity freaking out over being naked?
This story has potential, but it needs to be fleshed out.
They should try going through the portal and back to see if it fixes it. I'm assuming it shouldn't, but it seems like an obvious thing to try.
6489455 When is the next chapter coming out?
6594362 Honestly, I'm not too sure, I'm being really lazy about writing it, unfortunately. I have about 700 words down already, but it's slow going. Sorry to anyone else as well that's been waiting for me.
Interesting work so far, keep it up.
Just remember rarity always over react to everything
"of the sort"
I wonder who's her family. I mean, it's not like she has any legal documents for adoption. Then again, it's a wonder how she got into school in the first place in the movie.
"won't"
Story's alright. Just need another once-over to get rid of small typos.
I like this so far. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Heh. First story? This is better than all THREE of my stories COMBINED. Thumbs up to you!
Have Princess Twilight respond asap. But have human twilight take her to the place but as soon as they get there have human twilight slowly turn into a unicorn. But bring the other equestrian in as one by one they start turning into humans. Have them switch in hope of fixing it but it falls. But have sunset have a twilight moment. Some of the episodes twilight just stumbbles over the answer when it's right in front of her. Sunset shimmer and twilight are more alike then they know. Princess twilight has a habit of forgetting the power of friendship. Make the answer to their problem so easy it is funny. The portal is good start but not simple enough. You need six more. Hint hint human sunset shimmer.( there is a rumor that human sunset may have been shown in season 4 that's right the shadow pony from season 4 episode 3.
6595021 Impressive start, I assume Sunset will try to stay as herself?
That ending message to pony Twilight summed up:
"We all turned into ponies and are staying at other yous house until you can figure something out. Hurry up please"
And then Twi became a unicorn.
yall -> y'all
it's a contraction for "you all"
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"Pinkie Pie... can you... um... stop staring at our butts?"
"But pony butts!"
only read beginning want more need more
NEED MORE
I need it
this is one of the best mlp eg stories other than the cuphead one and the one with the tiny twilight
even though one is mostly done and the other is complete this need to be updated