WOW 10/10 I loved it. It was heartpounding, and that fight scene was lovely. For the longest time I thought Celestia would trip up or make some mistake, but you made her the victor in a tense manner that had me guessing until the very end. I would have preferred some more focus on the digestion, but I also love the story with the bartender getting arrested at the end. The way you wrote the characters was 100% accurate to how I picture them. In fact, if you wanted to continue this universe, be my guest.
Especially for the fight scene. In your story, I loved how the fight built up to the vore, so I put a lot of focus on emulating that here. As for the digestion, I already thought about that myself, but I just couldn't figure out how to fit it in that last scene without disrupting the interactions with Crude Point and the bartender...
Finally, thanks for the invitation to continue the 'verse, but I don't think I will. I've already got way too many other ideas!
Great story. On the couch I thought for a moment celestia would force feed pharynx to thorax XD But the tongue knot was great too. Looking forward to seeing another chapter with Crude Point getting a reward ;3
Interesting, you actually considered the implications of the green ribbon likely luring many unsuspecting victims to their doom and gave Celestia the wit to figure out that this was a violation of the supposed 'consent'.
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10/10 I loved it. It was heartpounding, and that fight scene was lovely. For the longest time I thought Celestia would trip up or make some mistake, but you made her the victor in a tense manner that had me guessing until the very end. I would have preferred some more focus on the digestion, but I also love the story with the bartender getting arrested at the end. The way you wrote the characters was 100% accurate to how I picture them. In fact, if you wanted to continue this universe, be my guest.
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Damn! Thank you for such high praise!
Especially for the fight scene. In your story, I loved how the fight built up to the vore, so I put a lot of focus on emulating that here. As for the digestion, I already thought about that myself, but I just couldn't figure out how to fit it in that last scene without disrupting the interactions with Crude Point and the bartender...
Finally, thanks for the invitation to continue the 'verse, but I don't think I will. I've already got way too many other ideas!
Great story.
On the couch I thought for a moment celestia would force feed pharynx to thorax XD
But the tongue knot was great too.
Looking forward to seeing another chapter with Crude Point getting a reward ;3
Interesting, you actually considered the implications of the green ribbon likely luring many unsuspecting victims to their doom and gave Celestia the wit to figure out that this was a violation of the supposed 'consent'.
Vore with some rational thought pleases me.