This is definitely different from what you usually write. But it's interesting.

hmm.

theres an awful lot of cuss words, but who cares

pretty funny.

Whether The clop? And between who?

6366614
That's usually because I write HIE.

6366630
So? Don't go complaining about that.

6366645
Thanks. First time I tried writing comedy.

6366651
The clop is after next chapter, which is Chapter Two. It will take place right after Day one. Oh, and it's between Keen and Baddy.

6366610
Do you read my stories, or just comment on them?

6366667
well, it's fine. keep it up.

6366702 I READ THEM. YOU THINK I DONT READ THEM? 0_0

6366665
im not but not every other word the characters say have to be fuck or shit

6366715
Just asking, calm down.

6366716
Well fucking sorry, fuck my fucking life, I'm just no fucking good at fucking writing fucking dialogue, fucking sorry my fucking friend.

6366721 I'm calm I'm calm I'm just always hyped but yeah of course I read Doctor and I love them. I really like in this one how you describe punishment. Like if you steal it'll come back to you and if you kill it haunts you. I like that. It makes sense to me :D

6366735
Thank you. I always love hearing feedback from you and many others.

6366740 thank you. And you what I love? :D https://youtu.be/J8xoJg0N598

So can't help but feel this is a story that just happens to have my little pony trappings...sorry but here comes a downvote.

6367569
Trappings? Can you please elaborate?

6367901
It just feels like you made a story and put MLP into it as an after thought.

6367931
I don't think you understand the implications of that statement. No, this story couldn't be written with out MLP characters considering one of them is a Gryphon, one of them is a Unicorn, and one of them is a Pegasus.

But, you tried.

6367953
You obviously don't understand what I'm trying to say here, so I'll let your like/dislike ratio for this story speak for itself.

6368341
Let me ask you something: Why would I write a story, for a My Little Pony fan fiction site no less, without any semblance to it, then add elements from My Little Pony to it?

This story could not, I repeat, could not, work without My Little Pony characters or elements, because the plot is focused and revolving around that fact alone.

I'll let your like/dislike ratio speak for this story speak for itself.

And there goes all my respect for you.