You are what you eat? I say you are as what you dress up as! And let's get one thing straight. I was a normal person before all of this magic shit, but now... I’m Malus and this world is just waiting for the taking.
Nice chapter. It seems that Spike's unusual personality, possibly puberty, has also caught the attention of Celestia. I really liked how Spike summarized the events of the previous and was perceptive enough to realize that Malus wasn't in the right state of mind when he gave the evil speech. Still, the beginning of the chapter with Celestia being blamed by a farmer for being uncaring due to Blueblood's insensitive attitude was a little dark, especially since the farmer was nice, albeit temperamental, gal who only wanted to protect her family and Celestia really liked her. Anyway, thanks for the chapter, dude. Hope to see the next one soon.
Forgot to ask, will there be crossover with other displaced in this story? Also, will there be transformations like Malus using some type of spell to look younger or appear as a stallion for infiltration?
I am SO waiting for tia and her little world to be destroyed by the real world. tia should have had blueball's head on a pike outside the castle gates years ago
All the way, she fought, cursing and damning me. Me, her goddess and one that has looked over the Equestria Empire for over a thousand years.
All I've ever really seen is a country in the hands of a velvet gloved tyrant and when someone realizes it they are enemies to "harmony"
6780055 That's why theirs a "dark tag" on this story. Also, thanks for your input. 6780123 Well, no displaced story crossovers, but I'm thinking on him actually travailing to other universes. Skyrim most differently And the changing forms? I'll save that idea for latter...
6780427 Well, I'm relieved that there won't be any displaced crossovers. Don't get me wrong, a displaced crossover is great, but lately crossover have been done to show off how OP some guest Displaced characters are, cause gender transformations or body modifications, or have the guest Displaced sleep with anything with a pulse, so it's refreshing to see a character traveling to different universes that are not related to the Displaced universe. Questions, will there be clop in the story because, if so, then don't turn Malus into a Casanova that can get any partner he wishes just for being a Displaced? Sorry if I'm being intrusive with my critique/questions.
6780523 I don't do well with other authors when writing a crossover. It isn't my style. Really don't like overly OP displaced with everything they wanted and just having fun. So I agree with you there. I'm trying to make a story with none of those. His magic my be overly powerful, but he'll die like any normal man if shot or stabbed in the heart. Hell, he is probably weaker since his body is thinner and nimble. I'll explain how he survived in the next or future chapters to come. Also, clop? HELL NO! I don't write that stuff. I just don't, okay. Also, It is totally okay to ask these kind of questions of an author. I know I do want to know what if their's going to be sex in a story or making it a crossover of other stories. It is logical to ask that kind of stuff of an author to know where he/she is going with the story. If you got any others questions, you can continue commenting here or just send me a PM. Anyhow, I hope this answers you questions.
Even thou I am totally okay with helping readers understand my story and they help me to fix what I can change/or not do in future chapters.
6754279 Well, he is just lost and has magical powers. He is also a teen so he'll act like one and not some sort of evil OP trained warrior. BTW Sorry for the late reply.
I do like how you tried to bring some skyrim elements into this story. I also think that the main character is acting like someone in his position and background should act.
I find his bounty of 10000 bits to be a little on the light side he caused mass collateral damage and put one of the element bearers an essential part of the contrives main defense in coma. I would tack on an extra zero for attempted murder of rainbow dash and estimated value of destroyed property.
6884403 I feel that the the golden bit is worth around 5 USA dollars. So it's around $50,000 if it was being payed in the dollar. So that's half of what you are suggesting. I think it shoud stay at where it is, but thanks for that input.
6888810 It's okay. Everybody has their opinion on how much the bit is worth. With my point of how much he is being charged with, I think to say that is very responsible.
7097651 Thanks, my seances aren't the best at the moment. Plus that fact that I need to keep my grades up and family life just makes it a swirling mess of confusion really. I sometimes need a break from everything, including writing, reading, and gaming.
7173757 To be honest, I don't know, I have lost my creativity for this one. I hope I can gain it back sometime soon. I have the ideas and know what to write, but I just don't got that inspiration that I once had with displaced stories. Sorry.
7174566 And I'm just being honest. I'm more involved in my other story Sentient Difference. If you get the chance, you could tell me what you think. Anyway, I'll just be sitting here, waiting for a reply for someone to become my editor.
"You whore!" he groaned loudly in pain, spitting out bits of bloody teeth onto the marble floor. Before she could send another blow, the guards had apprehended her in magic cuffs and dragged her away and out of the courtroom. All the way, she fought, cursing and damning me. Me, her goddess and one that has looked over the Equestria Empire for over a thousand years. She had just shouted with every being of her, damning me to Tartarus. As soon as she was gone, everypony looked at me, as if wondering what to do while some rushed over to Blueblood. Then, green flame flowed out of the window and formed into a letter. I quickly grabbed it with my magic and began reading it.
I feel sorry for her. Sure she broke his jaw, but he had it coming, considering her family is in danger. You know, I hope our protagonist will help them and spread his influence! That would be interesting, like that Darth Vulcan story!
6885635 actually, i did several calculations based on the purchases they've made in the show and according to all the data I've found the equestrian bit is worth 10 cents.
Is this really true? What if this all a cover up to protect the newly added princess Twilight Sparkle? Are the two Element of Harmony still in love? Dose their love for each other break apart as one lays on her deathbed as the other walks free from pain? Why have they denied their love? Read on pages-
Nice chapter. It seems that Spike's unusual personality, possibly puberty, has also caught the attention of Celestia. I really liked how Spike summarized the events of the previous and was perceptive enough to realize that Malus wasn't in the right state of mind when he gave the evil speech. Still, the beginning of the chapter with Celestia being blamed by a farmer for being uncaring due to Blueblood's insensitive attitude was a little dark, especially since the farmer was nice, albeit temperamental, gal who only wanted to protect her family and Celestia really liked her. Anyway, thanks for the chapter, dude. Hope to see the next one soon.
Forgot to ask, will there be crossover with other displaced in this story? Also, will there be transformations like Malus using some type of spell to look younger or appear as a stallion for infiltration?
I am SO waiting for tia and her little world to be destroyed by the real world.
tia should have had blueball's head on a pike outside the castle gates years ago
All I've ever really seen is a country in the hands of a velvet gloved tyrant and when someone realizes it they are enemies to "harmony"
And spike asks one of the most difficult questions of all.
6780055 That's why theirs a "dark tag" on this story. Also, thanks for your input.
6780123 Well, no displaced story crossovers, but I'm thinking on him actually travailing to other universes. Skyrim most differently And the changing forms? I'll save that idea for latter...
6780417 Indeed.
6780417 That's why I cut it off from there.
6780427 Well, I'm relieved that there won't be any displaced crossovers. Don't get me wrong, a displaced crossover is great, but lately crossover have been done to show off how OP some guest Displaced characters are, cause gender transformations or body modifications, or have the guest Displaced sleep with anything with a pulse, so it's refreshing to see a character traveling to different universes that are not related to the Displaced universe. Questions, will there be clop in the story because, if so, then don't turn Malus into a Casanova that can get any partner he wishes just for being a Displaced? Sorry if I'm being intrusive with my critique/questions.
6780523 I don't do well with other authors when writing a crossover. It isn't my style. Really don't like overly OP displaced with everything they wanted and just having fun. So I agree with you there. I'm trying to make a story with none of those. His magic my be overly powerful, but he'll die like any normal man if shot or stabbed in the heart. Hell, he is probably weaker since his body is thinner and nimble. I'll explain how he survived in the next or future chapters to come. Also, clop? HELL NO! I don't write that stuff. I just don't, okay. Also, It is totally okay to ask these kind of questions of an author. I know I do want to know what if their's going to be sex in a story or making it a crossover of other stories. It is logical to ask that kind of stuff of an author to know where he/she is going with the story. If you got any others questions, you can continue commenting here or just send me a PM. Anyhow, I hope this answers you questions.
Even thou I am totally okay with helping readers understand my story and they help me to fix what I can change/or not do in future chapters.
6754279 Well, he is just lost and has magical powers. He is also a teen so he'll act like one and not some sort of evil OP trained warrior. BTW Sorry for the late reply.
I do like how you tried to bring some skyrim elements into this story. I also think that the main character is acting like someone in his position and background should act.
Great story soosoo far
good Chapter
pls moar
it is ceiling not sealing that was just rubbing me the wrong way for some reason other than that that last line was just funny.
good story bro 3/5
This is amazing can't wait for more chapters soon :)
I find his bounty of 10000 bits to be a little on the light side he caused mass collateral damage and put one of the element bearers an essential part of the contrives main defense in coma. I would tack on an extra zero for attempted murder of rainbow dash and estimated value of destroyed property.
6884403 I feel that the the golden bit is worth around 5 USA dollars. So it's around $50,000 if it was being payed in the dollar. So that's half of what you are suggesting. I think it shoud stay at where it is, but thanks for that input.
6885635 oh sorry I when I did the calculation I assumed there was a 1 to 1 conversion ratio.
6888810 It's okay. Everybody has their opinion on how much the bit is worth. With my point of how much he is being charged with, I think to say that is very responsible.
6897435 That's a great idea!
6929440 Damn... But I'm in the same predicament too.
6927392 Thank you.
*Hears Angels and Demons singing together* This is the start of a beautiful story.
Update please
7031388 This will explain... Click here.
7033598 oh, that explains it. I understand. (Probobaly the reason all of my other favorite stories update slowly )
I stopped reading when 'gay rainbow' appeared and realized how immature the mc is.
Is this story dead?
7096270 No. I have a life that's being a bitch. Like being sick is one of them.
7097570 oh I can understand that
7097651 Thanks, my seances aren't the best at the moment. Plus that fact that I need to keep my grades up and family life just makes it a swirling mess of confusion really. I sometimes need a break from everything, including writing, reading, and gaming.
7097687 yeah I had to do the same thing on my stories
This is awesome and funny and will sun butt tell spike what puperty is
7154136 ...okay I laughed. Good job.
7154136 Someone got the joke!
When is the next chapter coming out?
7173757 To be honest, I don't know, I have lost my creativity for this one. I hope I can gain it back sometime soon. I have the ideas and know what to write, but I just don't got that inspiration that I once had with displaced stories. Sorry.
7174558 It's okay i was just curious
7174566 And I'm just being honest. I'm more involved in my other story Sentient Difference. If you get the chance, you could tell me what you think. Anyway, I'll just be sitting here, waiting for a reply for someone to become my editor.
I feel sorry for her. Sure she broke his jaw, but he had it coming, considering her family is in danger. You know, I hope our protagonist will help them and spread his influence! That would be interesting, like that Darth Vulcan story!
6885635 actually, i did several calculations based on the purchases they've made in the show and according to all the data I've found the equestrian bit is worth 10 cents.
Just like real life.
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So this Malus prick is worth 1000 dollars...
Guess that is a lot of money in pony world.