Another HiE story. Mark was only home from college for a few days before he was unwillingly sucked into Equestria. Surrounded by technicolor ponies, Mark must deal with the politics and issues that come with being the only one of his species.
The beginning chapter wasn't bad but the use of the word luv felt shoehorned in.
oh damn usually intros don't leave me interested on how this will affect the character's life.......but this
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I think that it is a really good introduction through the cliché "portal." But then again by now it's pretty much impossible to not make the transport cliché.... Really good but please don't use words like "luv." to shorten words. Even if it is as if someone is saying more of a 'teenaged love' you should still type it normally. (unless it's in messages.)
That probably didn't make any sense at all..... Hey, I'm Swedish! Don't judge.
The beginning chapter wasn't bad but the use of the word luv felt shoehorned in.
oh damn usually intros don't leave me interested on how this will affect the character's life.......but this
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I think that it is a really good introduction through the cliché "portal." But then again by now it's pretty much impossible to not make the transport cliché.... Really good but please don't use words like "luv." to shorten words. Even if it is as if someone is saying more of a 'teenaged love' you should still type it normally. (unless it's in messages.)
That probably didn't make any sense at all..... Hey, I'm Swedish! Don't judge.