Twilight groaned as she slowly regained consciousness. "Did it...work?" she asked.
"In a matter of speaking."
Twilight jumped on her hooves, looking around frantically. She didn't recognize that voice, plus all of her friends were still unconscious from the magical overload. She found the source of the voice in the corner of a room and her eyes went wide. "What? No! Why didn't the elements work?!" she exclaimed.
"They did work." Nightmare Moon replied, walking up to the unicorn. "Well actually that's not correct." she said, putting a hoof under her chin. "You see, the elements only work on those who are truly corrupted or creatures of chaos."
"H-huh? B-but...you did something to the princess! You brought eternal night!"
Nightmare Moon giggled. Giggled of all things. "Don't worry. I didn't banish Celestia to the sun or anything. Actually, she's still in Canterlot, only a little...immobile. As for me, let's just say, when I was a filly I was part of the drama club in my school." Nightmare's horn lit up and Twilight prepared herself to cast a shield around herself and her friends. But the magic beam of destruction never came. Instead the blue glow surrounded Nightmare Moon and then dispersed into a bright flash of light.
Twilight's eyes took a few seconds to readjust themselves to the darkness and when they did, they found a slightly different mare in front of her. She had the same coat as nightmare moon and the same eyes, but her mane color was different. It was lilac and also it was ethereal, like Twilight had only seen by princess Celestia so far. The cutie mark was also different. Instead of a moon, there was a blue shield.
"My true name is Nyx, Twilight."
"Nyx" came even closer to Twilight, who instinctively took a few steps back from the large alicorn. Nyx' expression turned to one of sadness and hurt, confusing the unicorn even more than she already was. However that expression soon vanished leaving one that was filled with hope.
"But you, I get it! You're trying to trick me, aren't you?" Twilight shouted with narrowed eyes, hoping to not give away that at the moment she was downright terrified.
"And why would I do that?" Nyx asked. "The elements didn't work on me and I'm fairly certain that at the moment my magic is stronger than you. Listen to me, I am not here to bring eternal night."
"Then what was that about earlier? In Ponyville, I mean...why hasn't the sun risen?!" Twilight exclaimed, frantically hoping she could buy enough time, so they would all wake up. Maybe they just had to try again? Maybe now that the elements were all reassembled, they could use their full potential.
"Simple. I needed to lead you to the Elements of Harmony, so Equestria would be protected from foes that might want to destroy harmony."
"What?"
"As for the sun...(urrgh, why do I feel like a little filly again and am about to get grounded?) I...might or might not have put Celestia under a sleeping spell, when she was distracted." Nyx told the Element of Magic sheepishly. For Twilight that was enough evidence that Nightmare Moon or Nyx as she liked to call herself apparently was up to something bigger and just didn't reveal her entire hoof so far.
Nyx took in a deep breath and looked determined down at the unicorn, causing said unicorn to gulp in fear. "There's not much time left." Nyx' horn lit up again and her magical aura surrounded Twilight. Letting out a shriek, Twilight tried to break free from Nyx' magic, but her own magic was suppressed by the dark alicorn, who levitated Celestia's student towards herself.
"Wh-what are you doing?! Let go of me!!" Twilight panicked. Although she knew better, she still tried to break free by twisting and turning her body. However, a moment later she found herself not only magically restrained, but also physically, namely a bone crushing hug. Twilight's cheeks flushed, when she felt Nyx nuzzling her.
"Don't worry." Nyx whispered. "I'm going to protect you, no matter what." And with those words, Nyx touched Twilight's horn with her own. The lavender colored unicorn feared the worst, when she felt Nyx soothing magic floating through her body.
Th-this must be her plan! She's going to hypnotize me in order to get close to the princess and then...oh no! She probably wants the power of the Elements of Harmony for herself. She would be unstoppable if she-
"Done."
"Huh?"
Nyx released Twilight from her hug, causing Twilight to land uncomfortably on her rump. she was surprised to see Nyx teary eyed, yet her lips formed a small smile.
"W-what did you do?" Celestia's student asked more curious than scared by this point. She didn't feel any different and neither did her magic. Was it a trap? A spell that would activate itself later or worked over time?
"Don't worry mom. I haven't done anything bad to you and neither will the spell do any bad to Equestria or any of its citizens. Cross my heart, hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye."
"...what." Twilight deadpanned to what was clearly a children's promise. She was beginning to suspect that she was dreaming or landed in the wrong story. Or both.
"It's a Pinkie Promise. And you never break a Pinkie Promise or else you lose your friends."
"FOREEEEVEEEEEEERRR!" *thud* Pinkie's head hit the floor again, leaving a downright terrified alicorn and a Twilight Sparkle, who experienced the biggest headache ever since her entrance exam.
"I'm sure I was thorough with the sleeping spell." Nyx said carefully. Clearing her throat she turned her attention back to Twilight, but was distracted again, this time by the sun suddenly rising on the horizon. Hope filled Twilight's heart upon seeing the display, while Nyx frowned.
"I guess this is it." she mumbled. "I hoped we would have more time to talk." Nyx gave Twilight a quick surprise hug, to which Twilight was too stunned to do anything against it.
"Why are you doing this?"
"Because I love you, mom."
Oh my, that made is rather beautiful if you don't mind me saying. Good job on the story
6155524 Thanks a ton of bricks.
Oooh i can't wait for the next chapter everything with nyx is awesome
6155614 Nyx getting a harem too?
Oh, wow... New Nyx story! This one seems like it's gonna be fairly different.
Thumbs up - Thumbs up - THUMBS UP//// WHY CAN'T I THUMB THIS DAMN THING ANY HIGHER GAHHHHHHHHHH
Moar sir, please. Can i have some moar?
Sweet wheres my popcorn
too many question way too many questions. Luna would still be NMM at this point so even with Nyx showing up that would still be a thing.
i think you need to redo this.
6156360 Nope. Questions are simply gonna be answered later. Next chapter (a few at least). Belief me, I tried to do the chapter like you want it to be, but it just wouldn't fit.
Where's Luna?
6156863 NEXT CHAPTER NOW STOP ASKING!!!!!!!!!!
I can just imagine the look on Spike's face when he sees his 'little sister'
Nyx? *squee* Interesting. It's still a bit early to judge, but the beginning is promising and I'm really curious to see what will happen in the next chapter
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I will be reading this.
I wounder what happened in the future? Anyways great story I can't wait for more.
I had an idea a lot like this, though mine involved frantic confusion on both sides when Nyx showed up at the same time of Nightmare's defeat.
Anyway, this could be a great story, but it needs a lot of editing, and I don't mean in spelling or punctuation. The sentence structure is very clunky at points, lacking any semblance of flow.
Work on smoothing things out, and you'll have yourself a reader.
Example
It was lilac and bore an ethereal quality she'd only seen Princess Celestia possess.
Or something like that.
Kinda cute! ^_^
#Gross!
I SWEAR, IT WAS A REAL LIVE TURNIP!
6157081 That picture pretty much sums it up, for me. Well done on your intro, its raised a lot of questions and earned you a track from me.
Such questions include:
=Why is Nyx here?
=If she is here, where is NMM?
=How is Nyx still existing, when she's potentially caused a Grandparent Paradox?
-ie by causing the original NMM to not get blasted, there won't be any shards for the cult to use to attempt NMM's ressurrection, therefore, no Nyx was born.
=Where the buck is Luna?
All valid questions. Now, you seem to have a little problem with the "flow" of the story, as well as how certain things are worded. I'm also not 100% sold on where exactly in the tale you decided to pick up the story... It could do better.
To help you out, I am offering my editing skills. Don't take this the wrong way, I'm not saying your writing is bad, but it could stand to be better. Every good author has an editor.
Finally, I'd just like to say, Nyx is best OC.
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Hmm, I came in with low expectations and came out with intrigue and desire for explanation. I await to see how Nyx intertwines herself with the past. Also, love the mother and daughter love at the end. I would like more of that.
Also, what dragon hunter said!
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It should be 'lose' not 'loose'. 'loose' is for something like, "I have a loose shoe lace."
I think you are looking for the word 'thorough', not 'throughout'. That is to be used like, "through out the land, darkness reigned supreme."
Well that explains it. She was only throughout with her sleeping spell.
If only she had been thorough...
Interesting. But you're messing with time, Nyx, and that's not so good...