From a strange merchant I got the powers from one of my favorite Video games plus my favorite mythological creature. Great right? Well nothing is free and power is expensive. I lost my humanity, my gender, and my world. This had better be fun.
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um hey your storie has some chapters that have unedited on them
So the Goodly Idiots summoned another dungeon keeper, who probably won't have Rin's restraint well this will be brutal
seeing the introductions I am sad you never did more of that at the start, like maybe for the ones Rin had hired normally say like Vinyl:
A new creature has been recruited for your dungeon. Curious, a Vampony, while not too common to a Keeper's roster, they can hold their own just as well as any of their humanoid bretheren.
...just thought that might've been cool.
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Restraint? Actual Dungeon Keepers only have 2 goals: Win the turf war against other Keepers and Recreate hell on earth.
If they've heard of restraint it's a dirty word to them...
Well... A Dark Angel has risen from the depths... This'll be interesting.
Oh great, the pressed continue on the game. Hope Rin doesn't need to buy in-game currency so she actually stands a chance against the others as well as buying back the powers she already had yet mysteriously lost.
First thought I had was Yondu. He's blue and has red eyes.
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You know, I actually was planing on doing that. But I decided that the mentor voice would be a built in alert system and that would require it to be self aware.
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ah, makes sense, say, I think once I've gotten The Arkaic Evil's Token chapter done that maybe he and Rin could crossover... I'd love to see how a Dungeon Keeper displaced reacts to... *looks up name* Kevan Brighting narrating everything they do while there.
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Now I wish I did go with my plan to make the Mentor a sentient being just to have him go up against your narrator.
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well I'm not gonna push these but a clever idea might be either:
A: The Mentor has been hiding his sentience this entire time and the introductions he made were hints to him stopping the act now that he's aware of another Keeper in the mix.
or
B: The portal that brought the new Keeper also brought the real Mentor to this world who then takes over for the programmed system Rin originally had.
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Have you read my mind?!
threw
tough
There were also some other errors. These were somewhat more disruptive.
Nice seeing you still writing.
*the hyppogriff*
*-ass*
And
leak
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I've just gotten a more active editor who is now going through all the chapters marked as unedited.
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Cool
you no if you add a mini Dungeon Core from war of the overworld and fusion it to the mini Dungeon Heart would make it more in thrashing hmehehehehehehehehehehHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
Damn, I'm caught up. Now I have to wait.
Hello?
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Hi.
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Any more?
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A few more chapters yes. I've been working on my own story to sell on kindle. Only with extra care to check for errors.
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Okay PS please use the idea I referenced on the bonus chapter.
When are you gonna update?
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Working on it. Been working on other things so it has been slowed down a bit.
"I'm sure no harm would come from her domain being gone for a while."
In a deep, festering pit in the void, there was a shifting mass. And Murphy opened his eyes... and smiled.
this is way you don't say shit like that and murphy you bicth don't do it.