The Guard of my Heart

by High Harmony

Prologue

Twilight Point of View

"You sure yo want do want us to come with you, sugarcube?" asked the blonde haired cowgirl named Applejack. Today, one of her best friends, and princess, Twilight Sparkle was going on a trip to the Crystal Empire to see her brother, the prince nd her sister-in-law, the princess.

"No. I will be fine, but you six better not get into any trouble while I am gone," she pointed at her five pony friends and her number one assistant, Spike, with a serious look on her face.

"HA! Whatcha talkin' about, Twilight? Nothing ever happens when you and Princess Cadence meet!" the rainbow-maned pegasus, Rainbow Dash stated sarcastically, holding in her obnoxious laughs. Twilight did take some offense, but it was the honest truth. Her previous meetings with the fellow princess wasn't what many people called "ideal".

"And don't forget to write to us, okay? Because if you don't, then we might not think that you want to be our friend anymore. And if we think that you don't want to be our friend anymore, then we mi- MMFMMMFGHFFMNF!" the pink party pony named Pinkie started, but was interrupted by a white hoof, which was connected to a tired-from-finished-a-line-of-dresses pony named Rarity.

"Just have fun, darling. Just don't forget to bring me back some crystal for my new line of dresses. OH! I am going to miss you so much!" The sewing pony squealed, obviously exhausted from making her new spring-into-summer line of dresses.

Twilight walked over to Spike, who was tearing up, "Spike, you sure you can take care of the entire castle?"

Spike wiped a tear from his face, "Of course, Twilight," they hugged each other and Twilight went back to where she was previously standing.

She began to shed a tear. "Oh! I am going to miss you all! But the trip is only for five days. I'll be back in Ponyville before the brezzies migrate again," the purple pony princess reassured. She hugged all of her friends and said her last goodbyes before heading on the train. After that she gladly trotted onto the train which she was standing next to.

As the train began to depart, the princess went to the back of the train to look back on her friends. Pinkie Pie was running towards the train on the tracks, "TWILIGHT! I WILL NEVER FORGET YOU!" Twilight rolled her eyes and waved back to Ponyville train station. Once her friends were out of sight, she sat down inside the train. A lot of things were running through the princess's mind about the trip. What will happen to Ponyville? Will the C.M.C. get their cutie marks by the time she gets back? She forgot everything while taking out a letter from Cadence and Shining Armor. It was about the two having a surprise for the new alicorn, which brought her to here. she was so excited. She placed the letter away and took out a photo. It was her in human form with Flash Sentry in human form. She shed a tear, thinking about the future. Then something hit her mind. Cadence said that he was part of the royal guard. Oh. I hope he is there this week. That would be the best trip to the Crystal Empire EVER! She sighed and giggled at the picture. This was going to be a five days that she will never forget.

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Flash's Point of View

It was early in the morning in the Crystal Empire when Prince Shining Armor had called one of his most-trusted members of the royal guard. As the prince sat in the throne room, sipping coffee, an orange-yellow pegasus stallion (he was the only member of the royal guard without a crystal coating) came storming in the door. "Y-Your h-highness," he bowed down to his prince, "Y-Y-You c-called?"

"Yes Flash Sentry. Get up on your feet," He replied, not liking the formality of being a prince.

"S-Sorry, sir. I f-forgot how you don't enjoy formality of royalty,"

"It's fine, Flash. But, back to the task at hand. My little sister, Princess Twilight Sparkle is coming today for a week. Since me and the princess are going to be setting up for her arrival, neither of us can get her at the train station. That is where you come in. I need you to pick the princess up at the station and bring her back to the castle, where me and Princess Cadence will be waiting. Can you complete the task?" Flash did remember the pony he literally bumped into on one of her visits to the empire. Every time he has seen her, his favor for the mare has grown gradually. He believes that now he has grown to like the pony more than a school-pony crush.

Although, he kept his cool with her brother and replied, "Yes, sir. Thank you your hi- er... sir,"

Shining Armor smirked and chuckled, "Okay. Off you go then. The train will arrive in no more than a half-an-hour," Flash saluted and started to walk out. Shining Armor chuckled again and remembered something. "Flash Sentry!" Flash stopped at his tracks.

"Y-Yes, sir?"

Shining Armor gave him a serious face, which made Flash walked back a few steps, "Flash. Bring. Her. Back. Safely!!!"

Flash, still very scared, and a bit scarred, stood up straight and saluted once more, and promised, "Sir, you have my word that I will bring Princess Twilight Sparkle back to the castle safely," he walked out of the castle, slouching a bit, smiling. I am going to be happy to see Princess Twilight Sparkle again. I hope she will be happy to see me. Flash thought. Just like Twilight, this was going to be a five days that he will never forget.

Author's Note:

HEY GUYS!
This just the beginning! There is going much more to come. And it's coming soon, so keep checking on the "Guard of my Heart". I will not be doing many Flash and Twilight separate POV's. This is one of the few public fanfictions on the ship flashlight (OMG THE FEELS!) , and I hope you will all enjoy what comes next! Stay tuned!
Your fellow brony,
High Harmony

Comments

[SageBrony07]

Good start to the story. I will give it a favorite when a bit more of the story is published. I like your writing style. Person preference of mine would be longer chapters, but this chapter is adequate in length. Good luck with the next part of this story.

[High Harmony]

6039486 thank you very much for the advice. I will definitely be creating longer chapters. This is only the prologue, and there will be more to come.

[Violet_S]

Nice start I'm looking forward to the next chapter

[dracone]

Noticed some minor spelling errors, mostl missing word throughout the chapter.

That all said, I enjoyed this read and hope it all goes well.

[OmniFox]

I hope after this story you'll write a side story of how Spike and the rest of the gang are doing.

[MajesticPoniesEverywhere]

Red = incorrect Green = correct

"You sure yo want do want us to come with you, sugarcube?"

Awkward. But no fret! How about, "You sure you don't want us to come with you, sugarcube?"

Today, one of her best friends, and princess, Twilight Sparkle was going on a trip to the Crystal Empire to see her brother, the prince nd her sister-in-law, the princess.

Awkward again. Here: "...one of her best friends, Princess Twilight Sparkle, was..." OR "...one of her best friends (and the princess), Twilight Sparkle, was..."
"...see her brother, the prince, and her sister-in-law, the princess."

"No. I will be fine, but you six better not get into any trouble while I am gone," she pointed to her...

"'No. I'll be fine, but you six better not get into any trouble while I'm gone!' She pointed to her..."

...rainbow-maned pegasus, Rainbow Dash stated sarcastically, holding in...

"...rainbow-maned pegasus, Rainbow Dash, stated sarcastically, holding in..."

Twilight walked over to Spike, who was tearing up, "Spike, you sure you can take care of the entire castle?"
Spike wiped a tear from his face, "Of course, Twilight," they hugged each other and Twilight went back to where she was previously standing.
She began to shed a tear. "Oh! I am going to miss you all! But the trip is only for five days. I'll be back in Ponyville before the brezzies migrate again," the purple pony princess reassured.

Lots of minor errors, and they keep reoccurring (ex. the periods and where they are replaced by commas). Look out for that kind of stuff when proofreading:
"Twilight walked over to Spike, who was tearing up. 'Spike, you sure you can take care of the entire castle?'
Spike wiped a tear from his face. 'Of course, Twilight.' They hugged each other and Twilight went back to where she was previously standing.
She began to shed a tear. 'Oh! I am going to miss you all! But the trip is only for five days. I'll be back in Ponyville before the breezies migrate again.' the purple pony princess reassured."

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Delete 8 of the "~~"s.

Flash's Point of View

You can shorten it to "Flash's POV". They way you wrote it is not incorrect, though!

"Y-Your h-highness," he bowed down to his prince, "Y-Y-You c-called?"

"'Y-Your h-highness,' he said, bowing down to his prince, "Y-Y-You c-called?"

Shining Armor gave him a serious face, which made Flash walked back a few steps, "Flash. Bring. Her. Back. Safely!!!"

"...which made Flash walk back a few steps."
Using "Flash" in the statement is unnecessary. Also, underlining comes LAST when trying to emphasize what a character is saying. It always goes italics, bold, THEN underline "Bring. Her. Back. Safely!!!" OR "Bring. Her. Back. Safely!!!"

...up at the station and bring her back to the castle, where me and Princess Cadence will be waiting. Can you complete the task?"

PRINCESS CADENCE AND I!!!!!!! "...where Princess Cadence and I will be waiting. Can..."

So there is something that I hoped helped A LOT! Great story, and remember not to rush it, because looking at how you wrote the story so far you may be very prone to it. Anyways, lovin' it so far, and one more thing...

Please remove the part about the CMC'c cutie marks. 'Cause you know, they already got them (after you published the chapter).

[onekface]

Aww i was hoping for more. This little prologue was such a tease.