This story is a sequel to Homeworld: Equestria
The abilities of Equestria's space-faring navy are tested once more, as the war with the Turanic Raiders uncovers highly unsettling technology.
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Nice, loved the first one way back when didn't notice this this sequel, will start on it this week.
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Darn it! And here I was hoping to be the first to comment!
Gonna be reading the first one here soon though...
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Sorry, I will be back to you ASAP with with my actual comment. Love Sci-fi ponies
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All good, mate! Happy reading!
Well I have read the first ten chapters of the story, and while I am exactly all too interested in a story that focuses on pre-reformed changelings, I think the story is very interesting so far. I can pretty much say that the quality of the writing of the writing is a massive step up from the original story that you wrote, which while interesting, wasn't all that well written in the character development department. So far, I do really do like of you managed to describe all the different equipment and their functions along with protocols and procedures in a well explicative manner while managing to put a lot of interesting character dynamic and the theme of the story is so far interesting. I don find it interesting of prejudice against the main character is presented and how he doesn't really put in any really effort to get along with other by striking back and such which really doesn't put him in the best of light, which helps to show that he still has a lot of character growth to go through, which makes the story that much more interesting to me. I would like to see his negative assertions on ponies be challenged and having him confront his bias thoughts against the ponies put them into question, I would live to see how he would react if a new member of the crew turned out to be a reform changeling and see hall his trenches Changeling being victims to be washed away and to show confront him with the naked truth of his own racism. Also like the mystery that you are starting to build up with the derelict ship in orbit, I wonder what it will lead to.
By the why how do you do your research in your source material to explain how a space ship work? I would like to know because I would like to write my own Sci-fi story with mechas in it. Any advice you can throw my way would help a lot.
I am looking forward to reading the rest of that story.
PS here is some of my own work if you want to take a look
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Actually, that large gap between the first couple of chapters, and the rest was a result of me going back to the original story and realising just how badly it was written, so I rewrote the whole thing. Story still the same, but I think I managed to catch all the grammatical errors and make the whole thing a little easier to read. Was rather embarrassing to see how many errors slipped past me, even when I had a pre-reader back then. Figured at least a few people might read it, considering this one is a sequel, so a bit of a fix up was in order.
Regarding how I do my research, it depends. For the original story, I wrote things in a way that matched the Homeworld universe as much as possible, including one of the big scientific inaccuracies of 'drag in space'. This time around, I tried to write it closer to how physics would actually work. For anything I've written where numbers come into play, I had to either recall my physics knowledge, or do some research to figure out how to calculate it, because I wanted it to be something accurate, rather than arbitrary numbers. Otherwise, if it's research on lore that you're referring to, I think that's the harder part, since information on the universe is so fragmented. Where there's no canon information, I'd use data from fan materials, before coming up with my own. The reason for prioritising other fan data over something I'd come up with is to try and make something more consistent, as one of the things I'm trying to weave here and there in this story is a fictional language.
I am approaching the end of all the chapters that have been written from my backups now, so the rate at which new chapters will be released is going to drop dramatically. Holiday leave has ended, so that will further compound the issue, I'm afraid. I'll still try my best to get things finished, as I hate to leave things half-done, but work and studies are a nightmare.
I appreciate your feedback, by the way. I'm happy if even one person would be satisfied with the story. I'm just hoping that the character development isn't stretched too far out, as I know it's rather slow.
Well I just finished catching up after i noticed that the story existed. I'm enjoying this as much as the first one. also Glare & Obsidian, saw that coming a mile away, they are rather sweet.
After reading all the chapters published so far, I would say that it's interesting, I hope to see more of this. At first I though that the whole team was composed of Changeling infiltrators, at their introduction took me a while to dispel that. I do not think that Obsidian is ridiculous at times, with the starvations especially in light of the Thorax's hive don't actually need to on other beings anymore his stance on not wanting to undergo the TF sounds flimsy to me, and only serves to add the image of just being love sucking predators they willingly continue to be.
I had originally hope that the POV's would be focused on the Captain and spread around to different sections of the crew with interesting space naval naval maneuvers, and less back opps mission team. Still, the story is interning there doesn't really seem to be that many good Sci-fi stories and I do enjoy reading it, keep it up.
Interesting chapter was nice to see what happens in other sections of the ship and the characters who work in it. I wonder if this is part of a mystery that is building up?
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Not really. This was just a quick slice of life chapter I had prepared earlier. Thought I'd slide it in here after some edits, as I've now reached the point where there are no more chapters left that were already made from before. The next chapter was only about 10 or 20 percent complete, so I'm going to have to start properly writing things up again. The latest chapter was mostly just to break up the delay I expect will follow. I'm currently attempting to re-create Amarok in Blender, just for fun. Figure I might as well slip a few renders into the A/Ns when I'm done.
HOLY BUCKING HOMEWORLD BATMAN! I'm so glad this isnt dead! Too many stories I've gotten into haven't had updates. But in the end I shouldn't be surprised... most of them do get updates after a while.
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I definitely plan on finishing this. If not, I'd say so. I owe at least that much to anyone who reads this. I know the feeling of going through stories that never make it to completion.
Sorry for the slow updates. And the short chapter. We're almost there, though! As an apology, have a little loading screen image at the beginning of every chapter.
So, just putting it out there for those few left, I'm starting to have my doubts about whether I can finish this story. What started out as a typical writer's block became exacerbated by my studies, and despite approaching the last 5 weeks of those studies, I'm not quite sure if I'll have the ability to finish off the final chapter. Which...you know...is an absolute bummer when I'm this close to the end. Will still try to do it, but I hate that I have to go against the one thing I said that I did not plan to do in a previous comment.
Let's just say that I'm left with a fried brain at the end of each day in this flight instructor course.
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Seems like you finished it. I'm only on chapter 2 but I'm liking this story like the last.
I love this chapter a lot. It's so accurate for how training is. Lol