Reyals Nik is a former teenage killer who just wants to have a normal life. So when he is accepted into Canterlot High and moves to the city, leaving his dark past behind. Can he resist the urge to kill again?
6386005 The idea of the story is a youth troubled by his past of murder and must learn to fit in with society to become a normal teenager. However because of the injustice he sees in the world like when Thunder Jockey is bullying the Crusaders, it causes him to become enraged and attack the perpetrator in anger but is trying to restrain himself because he cannot afford to try and kill otherwise he will go to prison and be incarcerated for life (Yes his murders were that bad). So basically the idea is can a former serial killer be a normal person or not?
Also another note is how he call Equestria gay and stuff is because he is a believer of life on other planets and plus states that there is scientific explanation for everything. Do I have the same beliefs? Yes I do but I still think some forms of magic exists to a point.
Your story have more content than just a serial killer killing all the mane six just for the fuck of it or stories where the guy just *pop* Make friend with the mane 6,go to equestria,learn about the magic of friendship and become an almighty god in the two first chapter that all the girls want to fuck with.OR those fast paced stories that i hate so much Like we sadly see in 3/4 of fanfics on this site
Your character have more to him than those bad protagonist. We can see he is not totally sure he can make it but still want to. He didn't become a god-like human in not even 4 chapters like (again) we see a lot of time in other stories We have time to understand what is happening with your protagonist rather than trying to understand a bunch of scribbles.
So yea,what i'm trying to say is...your story is good
6531345 I will do the next chapter when I can. I've been busy with school work and on the holidays I did an acting course so be patient and I will write it soon
for now its going nice and smoothly.![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
i like it
Its not just a.
"Yo i'm someone you don't know,want to be friends"
Mane six say"Fuck yeah"
Sunset shimmer"you know in reality i was born in a pony world full of magic"
"Holy shit thats awesome"
"Now lets take you to equestria for no reason at all"
MAGIIIIIIIIC!!!!!!
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Kind of story.![:unsuresweetie:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/unsuresweetie.png)
at least it think so.
And he didn't start to kill everybody for no other reason than the author sadistic fantasy
So that good
anyway![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
keep on the good work
6386005 The idea of the story is a youth troubled by his past of murder and must learn to fit in with society to become a normal teenager. However because of the injustice he sees in the world like when Thunder Jockey is bullying the Crusaders, it causes him to become enraged and attack the perpetrator in anger but is trying to restrain himself because he cannot afford to try and kill otherwise he will go to prison and be incarcerated for life (Yes his murders were that bad). So basically the idea is can a former serial killer be a normal person or not?
Also another note is how he call Equestria gay and stuff is because he is a believer of life on other planets and plus states that there is scientific explanation for everything. Do I have the same beliefs? Yes I do but I still think some forms of magic exists to a point.
6386213 i know and that why i like it
Your story have more content than just a serial killer killing all the mane six just for the fuck of it or stories where the guy just *pop*![:ajbemused:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajbemused.png)
Make friend with the mane 6,go to equestria,learn about the magic of friendship and become an almighty god in the two first chapter that all the girls want to fuck with.OR those fast paced stories that i hate so much
Like we sadly see in 3/4 of fanfics on this site
Your character have more to him than those bad protagonist.
We can see he is not totally sure he can make it but still want to.
He didn't become a god-like human in not even 4 chapters like (again) we see a lot of time in other stories
We have time to understand what is happening with your protagonist rather than trying to understand a bunch of scribbles.
So yea,what i'm trying to say is...your story is good![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
6386213 KO when will the next chapter come?![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
6531345 I will do the next chapter when I can. I've been busy with school work and on the holidays I did an acting course so be patient and I will write it soon
6553913 KO awesome hope there'll be some action soon too.![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
![:rainbowdetermined2:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowdetermined2.png)
6553927 Oh there will be![:trixieshiftright:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trixieshiftright.png)