"I don't want to be cheated on, but you're the only mare that's ever noticed me. If you're going to hurt me, that's fine. I wish you wouldn't but I still want to try. If it happens, I'll deal with it then."
This really isn't how a healthy relationship should start. Perhaps having it start as an open relationship from the get-go. It wouldn't be cheating if they had established those boundaries in the beginning.
6080212 Okay...then I think the law contradicts itself if it has drunk driving laws. Apparently your responsible for your actions if you drive a car while under the influence, but you aren't responsible for yourself if you consented to sex under the influence.I'm very confused...
Hmm. So it was just a contributing factor before then. I guess I hadn't given much thought to her pleasuring herself while performing her talent. In this case, she didn't even need to.
I hope this relationship works out. There needs to be some form of stability.
Are you talking about the same Poindexter from the IDW comics? I looked at the copy I have with him in it, but he's not a unicorn, but rather an earth pony.
Poor Gizmo. Unless you're 100% okay with her being with others, way deep down in your core, and get something out of it yourself - eventually it's either going to tear you apart or you're going to have to leave before you lose your mind.
6743403 I don't know man, I think this might work out for them. I mean her special talent is just giving blow jobs, it doesn't mean that she has to give out to everybody.
Oh it COULD work out. If Gizmo completely lacks the slightest dominant instinct most people possess. If he has a even whisper, it might take awhile, but if they get any kind of serious then the love of his life is off either sucking nut out of five other stallions a day or potentially getting a bunch of loads blown in her - well, you can either BECOME okay with it by severely harming your mental/emotional state, fall into a deep self-destructive depression (not mutually exclusive with the first), leave to prevent the first two things happening, or hulk out and despite being incredibly satisfying it never ends well.
Either what she does with anyone else either excites him and doesn't harm him at all, or if they're going to make it work she's going to have to focus all her nympho needs on him. If one of those two things aren't met they're gonna have to split. Trapping yourself in an abusive relationship for the sake of love, even non-malicious and/or unintentional abuse, isn't much different than just suffering a slow ego death. Which is really sad to see or go through.
6743203 isn't this all forgeting you can simply not press charges with rape DUI is illegal period, but having sex drunk isnt, its just automaticly not consentual at the time, but the next day if you are aware of the events and have no qualms then no suit will likely be filed
6743291 Non-unicorn magic is acceptable. You needn't remove his magical field just because he's an Earth Pony. I mean, my OC is an Earth Pony that uses magic all the time. Hells, my OC rarely walks preferring to use Telekinesis to get around.
Man, I actually don't know if Deepy will cheat on him or not. If it was basically anypony else then it's basically inevitable, but this guy? He's got the Alpha+++ Cock of Final Destiny. Perhaps that part about Deepy wanting to 'spend the rest of her life sucking that cock' will actually come true...
6743821 Bad OC's are bad. I can understand Earth Pony magic giving durability or self healing. I can even understand the rare cannon that Earth Ponies and Pegasi can use dark magic. But a telekinetic Earth Pony is as bad as a red and black Alicorn OC.
You got too many downvotes, probably from the same type of people who upvoted that guy who talked about how he lets his wife date and bone other women and he chooses not to.
We live in a world where (in some countries) a man can get arrested because they and a women both drunk, consent to sex, then she decides a day or two, maybe even next morning that she didn't really want to have sex, so she was raped.
The law is ass backwards when guys get involved. Honestly, it's annoying to be at a party and having guys walk around you on eggshells just because you had a hard root beer float or two. And women are confused about the existence of MGTOW.
Oh, downvotes don't bother me - especially not here, and especially not on this subject. One of which I've been through myself several times and have done an exhaustive amount of research on in psychosocial terms. I'd put money (if I had any left...) on most of my detractors being inexperienced and quite nearly under-aged. The others likely just have a different experience and opinion on the objective materials they could look up for themselves, which is perfectly fine. Then of course there's a few people who seem to stalk-downvote me wherever I pop up and leave a comment longer than a paragraph.
Her body tensed. She would have told Sawdust that something was happening to her too, but that would have meant releasing his cock from her hungry, loving muzzle. But as she drank the last drops of him, pleasure began to overtake her, moans rippling from deep in her throat as she shook, her tongue and lips never ceasing their attention. With her own cute cries, Deepthroat Cockslut reached her first orgasm, just as Sawdust had.
As the author you have the authority to determine facts like when Deepy had her first blowjob induced orgasm, but I feel I should point out that as of now this event occurs twice within the story. Maybe you should consider picking one up for the sake of coherency, yet I would be alright with leaving it as is tho. As I really admire chapter one and would absolutely hate if you so dare change a single word of that most perfect piece of literature.
Perhaps it would be better if you slightly modify this chapter as there is many other ways to make an orgasm significant other than it being the first induced solely by deepthroating, while I feel being the first time is a reason best suited for that day she discovered her call in life and destiny.
But that's just my opinion, and that is ultimately your call to make.
"Oh, uh, I study celestial bodies, their movements, and attempt to predict their behaviors. Right now I'm studying black holes." He seemed much more confident once he was speaking about something in his field of expertise.
6758875 the laws are shit. ment to control others with the threat of imprisonment or death. downvote me all you want for saying this, but laws are MAN MADE. nature IS who and what you are. and nature cannot be controled unless it lets you. i follow most laws becouse i respect others wishes, and if they wish to see me follow them, i'll put on a show. when alone, with others who feel this way about laws, im a diffrent person. i wont kill, hurt, or disrespect others, as that is against my personal policys. but i will do as i please when around my kin in beliefs. laws are bad. they are like a fire in nature. a cancer on the soul and will.
you know what... im ending this rant. sorry. a few things set me off. laws are one of them... *cough* gun laws, antigay, incest... we are what we are. dont be hindered by a law against them. even more so in the foundation of your contry is being rewritten by new laws. *cough*
Destiny is a giant asshole.
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So is your avatar.
Now THAT is a title that'll attract a lot of readers.
Unless I've been reading it wrong, it seemed like she had before.
This really isn't how a healthy relationship should start. Perhaps having it start as an open relationship from the get-go. It wouldn't be cheating if they had established those boundaries in the beginning.
6743192 She's been close, but never pushed over the edge. As for the relationship, we'll just have to see how things develop.
6080212 Okay...then I think the law contradicts itself if it has drunk driving laws. Apparently your responsible for your actions if you drive a car while under the influence, but you aren't responsible for yourself if you consented to sex under the influence.I'm very confused...
is this the beginning of something beautiful
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Hmm. So it was just a contributing factor before then. I guess I hadn't given much thought to her pleasuring herself while performing her talent. In this case, she didn't even need to.
I hope this relationship works out. There needs to be some form of stability.
6743220 probably after she has sex with him. After that, no penis will ever satisfy her.
Are you talking about the same Poindexter from the IDW comics? I looked at the copy I have with him in it, but he's not a unicorn, but rather an earth pony.
That's either a reference to Conan the Barbarian, which I'm leaning towards, but I really wanted it to be a reference to Grognak from Fallout XD
6743265 Both references are appropriate. And you're right about him being an earth pony. Will fix soon.
damn...every nerdy guys dreams right there ^
Poor Gizmo. Unless you're 100% okay with her being with others, way deep down in your core, and get something out of it yourself - eventually it's either going to tear you apart or you're going to have to leave before you lose your mind.
Sluts are for fun, not for commitment.
6743403 I don't know man, I think this might work out for them. I mean her special talent is just giving blow jobs, it doesn't mean that she has to give out to everybody.
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Oh it COULD work out. If Gizmo completely lacks the slightest dominant instinct most people possess. If he has a even whisper, it might take awhile, but if they get any kind of serious then the love of his life is off either sucking nut out of five other stallions a day or potentially getting a bunch of loads blown in her - well, you can either BECOME okay with it by severely harming your mental/emotional state, fall into a deep self-destructive depression (not mutually exclusive with the first), leave to prevent the first two things happening, or hulk out and despite being incredibly satisfying it never ends well.
Either what she does with anyone else either excites him and doesn't harm him at all, or if they're going to make it work she's going to have to focus all her nympho needs on him. If one of those two things aren't met they're gonna have to split. Trapping yourself in an abusive relationship for the sake of love, even non-malicious and/or unintentional abuse, isn't much different than just suffering a slow ego death. Which is really sad to see or go through.
6743436 alright dude, just calm down. just saying that we may misinterpreting her cutie mark. also, I said 'might' in that sentence.
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I still would like to see their relationship progress to something other than sex. I feel there's a lot that can be done with those characters.
6743436 He might be a cuck.
6743470 will then, here's to hoping for character growth then. nerdychampagne.files.wordpress.com/2015/06/cheersgif.gif
and let's hope it turns out better than what this guy's conversation that I had.
6743203 isn't this all forgeting you can simply not press charges with rape
DUI is illegal period, but having sex drunk isnt, its just automaticly not consentual at the time, but the next day if you are aware of the events and have no qualms then no suit will likely be filed
Just once, I'd like to read a comment by Dimmet where he leaves his giant, giant mountain of personal issues at home.
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Yup, and he loves his job. Just look at that happy smile!
6743291 Non-unicorn magic is acceptable. You needn't remove his magical field just because he's an Earth Pony. I mean, my OC is an Earth Pony that uses magic all the time. Hells, my OC rarely walks preferring to use Telekinesis to get around.
Awesome ^^
Wow..... Just wow.
Man, I actually don't know if Deepy will cheat on him or not. If it was basically anypony else then it's basically inevitable, but this guy? He's got the Alpha+++ Cock of Final Destiny. Perhaps that part about Deepy wanting to 'spend the rest of her life sucking that cock' will actually come true...
6743821 Bad OC's are bad. I can understand Earth Pony magic giving durability or self healing. I can even understand the rare cannon that Earth Ponies and Pegasi can use dark magic. But a telekinetic Earth Pony is as bad as a red and black Alicorn OC.
6745427 I originally created her for a Psychonauts/MLP crossover PBP RP over on the Ponytales website so... yeah.
And with a ululating lusty cry of joy and life, the story moves on once again...
Yea she gets around. But she always comes home to me.
She is a credit to her gender!
So, when are they going to make sweaty, sweet, love? (Aside from the throaty kind)
6754448 Soon. Assuming something doesn't interfere.
6743436
You got too many downvotes, probably from the same type of people who upvoted that guy who talked about how he lets his wife date and bone other women and he chooses not to.
6745427
A bad OC is bad when the writer can't write. No single quality of any character just makes them bad.
6743203
We live in a world where (in some countries) a man can get arrested because they and a women both drunk, consent to sex, then she decides a day or two, maybe even next morning that she didn't really want to have sex, so she was raped.
The law is ass backwards when guys get involved. Honestly, it's annoying to be at a party and having guys walk around you on eggshells just because you had a hard root beer float or two. And women are confused about the existence of MGTOW.
6758852
Oh, downvotes don't bother me - especially not here, and especially not on this subject. One of which I've been through myself several times and have done an exhaustive amount of research on in psychosocial terms. I'd put money (if I had any left...) on most of my detractors being inexperienced and quite nearly under-aged. The others likely just have a different experience and opinion on the objective materials they could look up for themselves, which is perfectly fine. Then of course there's a few people who seem to stalk-downvote me wherever I pop up and leave a comment longer than a paragraph.
Thank you for the consideration, though.
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I loved this chapter, I believe it was the sweetest so far for the first half, and then your colorful sentences made the second half exhilarating.
6743186 I thought the same thing.
6743202 ...That's not what the story says.
From chapter 1
As the author you have the authority to determine facts like when Deepy had her first blowjob induced orgasm, but I feel I should point out that as of now this event occurs twice within the story. Maybe you should consider picking one up for the sake of coherency, yet I would be alright with leaving it as is tho. As I really admire chapter one and would absolutely hate if you so dare change a single word of that most perfect piece of literature.
Perhaps it would be better if you slightly modify this chapter as there is many other ways to make an orgasm significant other than it being the first induced solely by deepthroating, while I feel being the first time is a reason best suited for that day she discovered her call in life and destiny.
But that's just my opinion, and that is ultimately your call to make.
~Leonzilla
*cough cough* luna.
7035302 lmfao my thoughts were 'oh sweet luna!' lol.
6758875 the laws are shit. ment to control others with the threat of imprisonment or death. downvote me all you want for saying this, but laws are MAN MADE. nature IS who and what you are. and nature cannot be controled unless it lets you. i follow most laws becouse i respect others wishes, and if they wish to see me follow them, i'll put on a show. when alone, with others who feel this way about laws, im a diffrent person. i wont kill, hurt, or disrespect others, as that is against my personal policys. but i will do as i please when around my kin in beliefs. laws are bad. they are like a fire in nature. a cancer on the soul and will.
you know what... im ending this rant. sorry. a few things set me off. laws are one of them...
*cough* gun laws, antigay, incest... we are what we are. dont be hindered by a law against them. even more so in the foundation of your contry is being rewritten by new laws. *cough*
7379819 I mostly agree except with the incest part, because that's one of the few laws you'll find in nature. Incest is not wincest!
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Except if it is porn. In that case incest is always Wincest!