Hmm...this chapter wasn't as funny as I had hopped. Also, I'm sure my little meta tease with my editors won't go over well. And I'm sure you're all mad at me leaving Rainbow Dash sucking on lemon flavored pole dancing shorts while having a death-defying orgasm. Should I ask myself if I've failed... scranton.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw4691-tumblr_m2nofpA4M31rnl2pl.jpg
Hmmmmmm. Some of the chapter went over my head, but you know what? I ain't even mad. It was still funny, after all, I got it all, even if it took me a bit lol.
... dafuq did I just read? There were so many comedic elements crammed in there... er... poor choice of words... ... ... ... Ok I'm going to need a while to recover from the randomness of this chapter.
Other than lemon shorts-gasm, Scratch having a plot load of glow-sticks (literally), and some SETTING UP for possible clop. No, there was no clop... I would teach you another lesson and shred your comment board with my fury but I don't think I'd be able to follow through for very long so your safe for now!
Not quite as good as the other entries, but not bad either. I think The dialogue was too short. It's really fun to see the characters interact with each other. Also, surprisingly not a lot of clop in this one. Not necessarily a bad thing, but part of what makes a clopfic entertaining is the action, no? I was expecting crazy shit to go down between Vinyl, Octavia, Luna, and Twi when they went up to her "office," and was lightweight disappointed to see a good setup fizzle. Also, imo smashed ponies should jumping on the guards trying to hook-up and stalling them instead of letting em walk around freely.
tldr: more interaction between ponies, clop or not(read:setup for clop)
632152 Well I have plans for the guards. Also, I do have a clop scene in the next chapter, and a fair one at that, not this 'light touch' stuff I've been pulling off. I promised clop, and I deliver
620276 It's not five because im not usually a clop reader nor doer. Was the guards but minty fresh afterwards? Also Y U NO chapter 6 yet ???(Im not the most patient person )
634982>>635699 Argh, it be on it's way. Be checkin' th' horizon tomorrow at noon, ye scallawags. Had to stop at port I did, an' restock me ship, but we be sailin' full speed ahead again!
635185 Th' shorts? They be in the booty, o' course! Get ye eye on the treasure lad!
Hmm...this chapter wasn't as funny as I had hopped.
Also, I'm sure my little meta tease with my editors won't go over well.
And I'm sure you're all mad at me leaving Rainbow Dash sucking on lemon flavored pole dancing shorts while having a death-defying orgasm.
Should I ask myself if I've failed...
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still good tho
this story is weird!
626080 Good or bad?
pointed at the golden doors, where Private Lynked - So-Fucking-Meta, as he was called by friends - barged through the doors.
Repitition of 'doors'
626088 it's kinda good but weird!
bass cannon? Uh oh...
OMG! MIDNIGHT!
The clock strikes 12, place is rocked by
FIRE!
WUBWUBWUBWUBWUBWUBWUBWUBWUBWUWBWUB! BASSCANNON!
love this story so far. KEEP IT UP!
So Private Lynked - So-Fucking-Meta-(who is best Private) saw the swollen, green thing? Ewwww. Gonna need sum counseling ain't ya?
I loved the rest of the Guards' names. Made me lul and totally makes up for Dashie suffering admin flavored orgasm.
well it can only get weirder but that whats makes this fic sooo good.
keep up the good work, yes this chapter was not as funny as the others but builds the setup for the next chapter very well.
Hmmmmmm. Some of the chapter went over my head, but you know what? I ain't even mad. It was still funny, after all, I got it all, even if it took me a bit lol.
... dafuq did I just read? There were so many comedic elements crammed in there... er... poor choice of words...
...
...
...
Ok I'm going to need a while to recover from the randomness of this chapter.
BTW you lied again... no clop, just random lolz
It's bout' to go down.
LOL, can't wait to see what song goes with the Bass Cannon...
"Private Lynked - So-Fucking-Meta"...
also i like how each chapter has a song with it, definately keep that up
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626993>>630482 Private Lynked is Best Private. NOW CANON. denver.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/rsz/mlfw4988_small.jpg
628836 Did not! It was like... half clop, half random scranton.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/rsz/mlfw4961_small.jpg
625852 scranton.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/rsz/mlfw4962_medium.png
YOU PUT ME IN THIS?
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630733
Other than lemon shorts-gasm, Scratch having a plot load of glow-sticks (literally), and some SETTING UP for possible clop. No, there was no clop... I would teach you another lesson and shred your comment board with my fury but I don't think I'd be able to follow through for very long so your safe for now!
Liked your vinyl scratch pic though!
Not quite as good as the other entries, but not bad either. I think The dialogue was too short. It's really fun to see the characters interact with each other. Also, surprisingly not a lot of clop in this one. Not necessarily a bad thing, but part of what makes a clopfic entertaining is the action, no? I was expecting crazy shit to go down between Vinyl, Octavia, Luna, and Twi when they went up to her "office," and was lightweight disappointed to see a good setup fizzle. Also, imo smashed ponies should jumping on the guards trying to hook-up and stalling them instead of letting em walk around freely.
tldr: more interaction between ponies, clop or not(read:setup for clop)
632152 Well I have plans for the guards.
Also, I do have a clop scene in the next chapter, and a fair one at that, not this 'light touch' stuff I've been pulling off. I promised clop, and I deliver
To say im loving this story would be the understatement of the entire space time continuum... more please?
620276 It's not five because im not usually a clop reader nor doer.
Was the guards but minty fresh afterwards?
Also Y U NO chapter 6 yet ???(Im not the most patient person )
"Shh, you egghead. I know it doesn't happen often, so just enjoy it."
Kinda burned yourself there RD.
Man, this story has me rollin. Love the comedy/semiclop mix you got here.
Now to sit and wait patently for the next chapter.
634982>>635699 Argh, it be on it's way. Be checkin' th' horizon tomorrow at noon, ye scallawags. Had to stop at port I did, an' restock me ship, but we be sailin' full speed ahead again!
635185 Th' shorts? They be in the booty, o' course! Get ye eye on the treasure lad!
632372 She be on th' way.
635208 Aye, she ain't th' shiniest dubloon in th' chest, but she'll catch yer eye, if ye know what I mean.
That be it fer now ye seadogs! That better have gotten in yer skulls! Now off with ye!
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635870 ...to me you sounded more northern than pirate... meh, cool picture though!
635991 Northern? Hey, a pirate's a pirate
636190 Northern = http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jzAD2GLfaNU
636195 Well... pfft, I was so a pirate
636211 true true... now all you gotta do is put some pirate in ur story
636219 Perhaps I will
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I imagine the bass cannon looks about this big and is quite similar.
(The thing actually works and can play th eresonant frequency of the building it was tested in).
635870 time to set sail capt'n rainbeard? arch.413chan.net/Pony_Pirates-(n1307885569921).png YAAAAR we shall make a shipping XD
640170 In but a few minutes, aye! twentypercentcooler.net/data/sample/5b/9b/5b9bff332a806a8122fe6fb7109f01fa.jpg?1334092984
640186 aye' aye' we shall make a shipping! (Sadly im a little busy right now....)
Vinyl and Octavia have a kinky relationship.