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Logic errors are common with names, so you may want to fix this mistake between the names "Josh Rovers" and "John Rovers," unless you're after a comedy relief from luna continually calling him the incorrect name, so he has to continually correct her.
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It is a mistake I was originally wondering between John and Josh and Jason for character names
Could probably make it into a story element since Luna's enhancement translates intent rather then sound and specific words. But I think I will fix it and just use his real name as a sort of an endearing nickname once Luna starts a relationship with him.
5990933 don't become depressed my friend if you do you will lose the inspiration and joy to write. Everyone makes mistakes. While I proofread your book you may read my first book, but I am no longer editing it, so it's just there for people to read it if they want.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/258884/prophecies-of-a-dragon
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Thank you also I use to express my shame at my mistakes I don't get depressed as I know I am doing my best.(even if my best leaves much to be desired still)
Will start reading your story as soon as I finish chapter 21 the inspiration has stuck me about something maybe I will get a few ideas on how to progress the story. Thank you kindly for your concern.
You might want to run this chapter by your editor again. I noticed several run-on sentences and typos.
also, the giant walls of ALL CAPS are hard as hell to read. there's gotta be a better way to convey what you're trying to get across.