On a hot day of summer Noteworthy was walking down the streets of Ponyville. Unfortunately, his name was the only thing note worthy about him. No job, no marefriend, no life. A perfect nopony.
Anyway, those days the circus was spending the weekend in Ponyville. Seeking for something to do, Noteworthy decided to take a look at the attractions present that day. After a ride on the roller coster that was as thrilling as a book club reunion, he noticed something that caught his attention. Alone, far from the other attractions, a blue tent stood in the park; it had white stars drew on it and a label saying "Madame Truth Teller".
'Well, it's not like I have something else to do, so why not.' Noteworthy thought to himself, as he headed towards the tent. He hesitated a little in front of the entrance, before taking a deep breath and heading in.
The fortune teller Truth Teller welcomed her client in the study.
On the table there were a Griffonian statuette, her black cat Goofy, three pairs of medalions and a tarot deck.
"Cut the deck." said Truth Teller, with baritonic voice.
The client executed.
The fortune teller pulled out three cards from the deck and slowly uncovered them in front of herself.
"The first card says that in the next two weeks there will be terrible attacks to Canterlot, Manehattan and Fillydelphia and one of the princesses will die."
The stallion started to sweat.
"The second card says that the reaction of Equestria will start a war with every other country on the planet, causing one bilion deaths and a climate catastrophe that will flood two-thirds of the land."
The stallion gulped.
"The third card says that the mare you're thinking about still loves you and will come back to you."
"Thank you, thank you." said Noteworthy with watery eyes. He paid, came out of the tent and when he looked aroud him, the ponies, the sky, the trees, everything seemed more bright and shiny.
drew needs to be changed to drawn. It might also be helpful to change the name of the cat since the name Goofy is trademarked by Disney. Princess needs to be pluralized. the of between billion and deaths isn't necessary. That's really the only issues I see with this chapter. Good job!
I like were it's heading will read the other chapter later on today. So far I like it... the ending went form zero to a hundred real fast.
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Yeah that's exactly what I wanted to achieve