A young colt has aspirations of heroism, but swiftly learns that such a dream may not be realistic within the confines of the Marejave Wasteland. Can he overcome the world's callousness, or will he fall prey to it like so many before him?
GASP! Evil twist is evil and inspired from futurama... A few select people will get that joke! I kinda guessed that something was wrong with how the place wasn't mentioned in chapter one and Best Pony Ever was seem wandering around.
Nitpicks: "violently propelling Noose into the copse of cacti behind him." with how you have it written does it sound like he get thrown into Gash "earth to Venture" Unless he is a human alien, in which case I am gonna boycut this story... should it properly be Equestria "...ew." need a space here
GASP! Evil twist is evil and inspired from futurama... A few select people will get that joke! I kinda guessed that something was wrong with how the place wasn't mentioned in chapter one and Best Pony Ever was seem wandering around.
Nitpicks:
"violently propelling Noose into the copse of cacti behind him." with how you have it written does it sound like he get thrown into Gash
" earth to Venture" Unless he is a human alien, in which case I am gonna boycut this story... should it properly be Equestria
"...ew." need a space here