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Rather nice chapter, although I find it kinda funny how blunt Angel was to the potential mind controller. However that isn't a flaw at all, just character, so keep up the good work. ^^
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That is absolutely Angel Grace. She has no social grace, whatsoever, and there's a reason for that, as you'll find out. There's a reason she's the one carrying the files, and it's not just because it's my character.
Lookin good so far.
great chapter. I always love mind-control stories that involves puppet strings. It's a sham that there aren't more of these.
That was rather direct. I had expected we'd see more intrigue, but they just march straight into the evil lair.
I would have used something more along the lines of a self-sustaining puppeting, potentially seen as the strings being tied to the unicorn's horn or hooves. Even if it could only work for unicorns, there's nothing stopping him from tiring multiple ponies to the unicorn in question (so to speak).
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Like Spiral Dream said, the spell requires a lot of focus from the caster to keep working. Basically, it's like the unicorn is attaching another body to their motor cortex, and even a unicorn only has so much brain to go around. Dancing Strings is using a workaround, and he's still having to cheat.
6217651 Perhaps, but it doesn't really make too much sense that a puppeteer can have a pony say "I am now your obedient slave" or something and it sticks.
I hope you explain how it works a little bit more in the next several chapters. Perhaps he's simply misleading them while he could, in reality, move her to to somewhere he can instill a more permanent means of control.
Perhaps with control-ception. (For example, "puppeting" could be a fast-acting but inefficient mind control while some form of enthrallment and/or mind alteration would be slow-acting, but more effective, and he simply kept one of those types of ponies under his puppeting).
A mind control-fic based on a puppeteer? That's awesome, I really wonder why noone thought about that before. Really looking forward to seeing where this is going
I just realized that the rating is still E... You gonna fix that since it's in the clopfic folder, or are you waiting till the actual acts appear?