6 months ago Equestria landed in the ocean, between Asia and North America. 3 months ago the areas closest started suffering from some type of Radiation. Two hours ago the head of Gentek called for a world-wide press conference. Now Mercer speaks.
5778716 Trondason keeps telling me to look at Greene Fields for your Elizabeth I keep saying that I don't want to binge on a good fic yet. But yeah like I said the cast of both Prototype will show up, even Heller.
You *desperately* need a proof reader or three that are more educated in English than you present yourself as. You have tense issues, comma abuse, run-on sentences, sentences changing direction mid-thought, issues with a/an, no grasp of punctuation, no real word flow...All that with my having quit about 4 paragraphs into Chapter 3. You've probably got a good idea but it's painful to read.
Ah, all these familiar faces coming out, including my favorite familiar face at the end.
5778716 Trondason keeps telling me to look at Greene Fields for your Elizabeth I keep saying that I don't want to binge on a good fic yet. But yeah like I said the cast of both Prototype will show up, even Heller.
59 likes....just one more....just one more
5781624 For a perfect 10:1 ratio?
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it just has to be
5781783 Gotta love how your comment is about the ratio and not the story lol, errr can I ask for your opinion on my two latest blogs?
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I haven't seen the blogs but overall I didn't like crossover stories....but this one is a very good exception
5781805 The blogs deal with the next story I want to write and I'm asking for people's opinions.
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I like the fourth idea
5781857 Thanks..... think any of the family would protest if I made a thread asking for opinion?
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maybe they have different ideas on what they want to see but you can ask away
Okay, I tried. I really did.
You *desperately* need a proof reader or three that are more educated in English than you present yourself as. You have tense issues, comma abuse, run-on sentences, sentences changing direction mid-thought, issues with a/an, no grasp of punctuation, no real word flow...All that with my having quit about 4 paragraphs into Chapter 3. You've probably got a good idea but it's painful to read.